The bar chart below shows the reasons for internet usage among British

adults(2001)

The table illustrates the purposes of using information superhighway by gender in

six categories of activities in year 2001 in United Kingdom. Overall, it is clear that
females were slightly exceeded that of males in spending time on internet. There
were minimal differences regarding banking and commercial activity between male
and female.
According to the data the smallest group was product vendor activity, which made
up 20% of male and female internet users. By contrast, banking activity comprised
the second least proportion at about 40%, doubling the figures of the smallest
group. Besides that, males were significantly outnumbered females in playing
internet games, with a partitioning of slightly under 40% being male and around
20% being female.
In the meantime, nearly all internet activity, about 98%, appeared to be dominated
by sending email, with a man to woman ratio of 98% to 95%. It is obvious that
female overwhelmingly search for medical information (39%) than male (less than
20%). Likewise, 60% of women also interested in involving online commercial, which
was a figure much greater than its 39% male counterpart.

Kindly please grade the essay according to table below, so I can

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