Dana Porter 4.12.

12 Final Proposal/Pitch No Ordinary Plague is a moving story of a fight for justice in a world whose definition of the word is so underappreciated. Barney and Sherin Benzyl are only people trying to live in the world when this horrific influenza breaks out and turns their quite life upside down. Now they have an all new purpose, trying to stay healthy and find the truth behind the plague. The idea of this story spun from the real life events that happened in 1918 during the Spanish Flu. This heart riveting story should inspire its audience to take action when it comes to a worthy cause, because inspiration can come from the simplest outlets. In 1918 the Spanish Flu took hold of the world affecting many countries on many continents. This real epidemic tested the medical field, scientific field, communities, and the government. When this epidemic hits the Chicago, Illinois of my story and all of these groups of people are disturbed with the issues that come along with it. When the flu makes its appearance no one knows how to handle it and the fear of the unknown begins to surface. The government decides that the best way to handle the situation is to put quarantine in place forcing those infected to be cut off from the rest of the world. When these events take place, Outscope Labs, the lab where Sherin Benzyl is a scientist begins to scramble to find a solution to the sickness. The long term goal is set at finding a cure but in the meantime they focus on a serum to ease the effects of the flu. Interviews from people who experienced the actual event inspired the personalities for the movie as well the events. When the real life plague hit communities drew closer than ever to take of one another and to make sure their neighbors and friends were taken care of. The neighborhood that Barney and Sherin live in is small and friendly. When their next door neighbor come down with the flu they do their best to make sure he stays in his home but eventually he is taken away from his family to the be quarantined, leaving his family to fend for themselves. This tragedy makes the flu very personal for the main characters and sets them in a very emotional place where they are determined to change things. When the movement of the flu began to move around in different ways it mutated. Soldiers fighting overseas that were seriously affected were sent back home to be treated being sent out at the masses on public transportation. At the same time, people who were less sick went out to their places of employment. This mix of people brought on a second more deadly strain of the influenza. In No Ordinary Plague when the second strain hits the city the chaos is sent into overdrive. The carriers of the infectious disease have outrageous symptoms that makes them turn into to monsters essentially, having no control of their emotions. Since they were initially not too happy with being shut off from the world the influenza sends this emotion into hyper-drive and this virus controls them off of this anger. When the influenza died out and hype of the epidemic died down scientists researched and studied it and even tried to recreate it so that the world would be more well equipped if it decided to make a re-appearance. The end of the movie will be a not-so-happy ending; it could even be called it a cliff-hanger. At the end of the year when the flu is no longer prominent the
Comment [GPD1]: Dont forget to include MLA format in final draft and cite any sources used. Comment [GPD2]: The writers concept is clearly set out, the Spanish influenza. I think that it is well highlighted that the reader should clearly understand its the main topic.

Comment [GPD3]: To make uniform I would say field only once e.g. medical and scientific field Comment [GPD4]: Dont really quite understand what it is that you are trying to say in this sentence, you may have just forgotten to type some words, but it honestly makes no sense.

Comment [GPD5]: Try to include a transition here, whether it be a couple of sentences or a paragraph, because it just seems to end an idea and then pick up a completely different one. Needs to be sync.

Comment [GPD6]: *comes Comment [GPD7]: Try to incorporate the methods that the military use to quarantine the affected people.

Comment [GPD8]: I would phrase this part of the sentence differently, I think what you are trying to say is that they were sent out in/by masses on public transportation.

audience is brought back to Outscope Labs when scientists can be seen working in a lab. The viewer soon learns they are trying to recreate the deadly strain of the influenza so they can learn more about it. One of the scientists is handling the virus alone with no mask when the vile rolls off of the table and hits the floor shattering in tiny pieces and being released into the air. He quickly cleans up the mess and leaves the lab heading towards the parking lot with a heavy, deadly sounding cough. In the concept introduced in the movie

Comment [GPD9]: What I find confusing is the order in which you chose to set the paragraphs, I think it would run more smoothly if you began with an overview of how the flu started, reached the city of Chicago, the effects/symptoms that the epidemic had on people, the effect on the family and friends of Barney and Sherin, then talk about why it is that they wish to become involved in finding a cure, & how they go about doing this. Kind of like a chronological order, so that it is easier for the reader to follow. Comment [GPD10]: When revising your paper I would just pay attention to the order of things make sure that everything runs smoothly and just remember to include as much detail as possible to keep the reader from becoming lost.