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Feet pounded on the rocks. Each strike gave another lesion that tore into the foot. He could not
stop. Not for a second. His breathing became sporadic. It lacked any sense of rhythm or
coherence. His thoughts followed suit. Everything seemed blurred, as if all objects and their
colors blended with the next.
His eyes became tired. He was too old for this. He slowed down; each color gained new
perspective and shape with every step closer to stop. His breath returned with a healthy bounce.
He took one step further, stopped, and sat on the ground. He couldnt remember why he was
running in the first place. When he thought about it, he didnt remember anything. He looked
around. He couldnt familiarize himself with the setting. Darks colors echoed through each point
of his vision. He made out small, sharp lines above him and long, smooth cylinders around his
eye level. It was like he was in a forest of some kind.
He caught his breath and stood up. What was his name?
He had trouble remembering. He had trouble remembering a lot of things. He took one
step forward. He walked with great hesitation. Then he felt the burning on the bottom of his foot.
He lifted his foot and a number of tears. He looked harder and saw there were scars among the
pinky and the ring finger. The hands were dark blue, as if the life had been sucked out of them.
He could not see under the hood of the thing, but he heard a growlone that shook his legs to
start running again. He was off again.
But he didnt see the root of a tree behind him.
He tripped and landed on his face. He lifted himself off the ground in fear. He turned
around.
Oh what, sorry I didnt hear you. Robert looked at her. She had dirty blonde hair with
turquoise eyes. Im here, he stopped himself. Actually I dont know why Im here.
Same with every other person. She gave him a look like she saw through his five
oclock shadow and pasta stained collar. The only difference with you is that you came here
two hours ago ordered a drink then just sat there, not even taking a sip.
He looked around and found the bar empty. Dont tell me Ive been here for two hours.
What did I just tell you? Next time listen up. She smirked like her mouth was the
crescent moon. It reminded Robert of Claudia. He looked down at the bar and stared.
Editors Notes:
In "Midnight Chase," Robert imagines that he is running through the forest. He does not
know why he is running until he sees a creature with deformed, blue hands. He comes to reality
when the bartender speaks to him, but is still spacing out. When ask why he is at the bar, he says
he does not know. The bartender tells him that he has been staring at his drink for two hours.
When she offers him a job, he turns it down, claiming to be busy.
The amount of imagery in the story is the strongest aspect, especially when Robert
imagines himself in the forest. The weakest part, however, is that the reader knows almost
nothing about Robert. They do not know why he is at the bar, why he imagines a creature
chasing him, or why he is too busy to work at the bar. These areas should be developed further to
allow for a greater understanding of his character. What is his motivation? What is he hiding
from? Give the reader something to work off of and sympathize with so the story will leave them
with a greater impression.