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Statement of
Transmittal Enclosed is the final revision of the Urban Design report
for Major Assignment #1.
Explanation of
Editing and Request
for Revision The Urban Design report was edited for numerous
mistakes, varying in type. These mistakes have been
categorized by paragraph. Within each paragraph, the
mistakes are categorized by error type. This report has
been edited to improve its readability and improve its
professionalism.
Punctuation Errors
Insert a comma after economic sector
Delete the comma after government agency, and
replace it with a period
Capitalize instead, and place a comma after it
Delete the hyphen in co-operative and close the
word up
Delete the comma after effort
Add an apostrophe before the s in everyones
Add an s apostrophe after resident and an
apostrophe after officials
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Paragraph 4
Spelling and Word Choice Errors
Change that to which
Change criterion to criteria
Change tailered to tailored
Change farther to further
Change applicibility to applicability
Insert but after rather
Punctuation Errors
Delete the hyphen in on-going and close up the
word (Oxford Dictionary)
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Paragraph 5
Spelling and Word Choice Errors:
Change generaly to generally
Change thru out to throughout
Change requires to require
Change visability to visibility
The words thru out are the informal and incorrect spelling
of the word throughout. This shows a lack of
professionalism within the report. Throughout is the
appropriate word choice.
Punctuation Errors:
Delete the period in the listed item Neighborhood
business districts
Grammatical Errors:
Delete a in a strong historic identity and replace it
with their
Delete having an in having an unusual cultural
background and replace it with their
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The items being listed are all subjects. The final item has a
verb phrase. This doesnt agree with parallel structure.
Alignment Errors:
Embed the list into the text, and use numbers in
parentheses to create an embedded list.
Grammatical Errors:
Insert the word by between and and the spaces
Punctuation Errors:
Insert a comma after Grand City
Lower-case East-West (not proper nouns)
Remove the hyphen between East-West and
replace it with the word to
Add an em dash before that and after companies
(creates emphasis)
Insert a colon after They are (Used if a list is next in
the text)
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Grammatical Errors:
Delete the word intersects and replace it with cross
(Parallelism)
Delete assets totaling and replace with with assets
of. Do this to all of the other list items that dont
follow this structure (Parallelism)
Punctuation Errors:
Delete the semi-colon after topography and
replace with a colon (List)
Put Southeasterly in lower-case (Not a proper
noun)
Capitalize river (Part of a title/proper noun)
Insert a comma after Unfortunately (pause in
sentence/helps reader)
Delete the semi-colon after form and replace with
a comma
Grammatical Errors:
Insert the words of the city after the varied
elevation (Parallelism)
Delete our energies are directed and replace with
direct our energies (Parallelism)
Punctuation Errors:
Insert a comma between years and urban
Add an apostrophe s to city (Possession)
Delete the comma after following and replace with
a colon (List)
Insert parentheses around especially in the inner
city (Substantial information)
Delete the comma between town and the Bend
Rose area
Grammatical Errors:
Delete raising of and replace with rising
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Spellings and Word Choice Errors:
Change appropiate to appropriate
Change accessable to accessible
Change improvment to improvement
Delete They and replace with Urban designers
(Reiterates who the subject is and makes the
sentence sound less ambiguous)
Punctuation Errors:
Insert an em dash before allied and after
Commerce
Insert parentheses starting before e.g., and ending
after areas
Put Working in lower-case.
Grammatical Errors:
Insert parcels of land between and and at least
(Parallelism)
Insert By before Working (Indicates a function)
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Request For
Response I expect a graded copy of this revision of by Thursday,
October 27, 2016. Email me andyjwooten@gmail.com
if you have any questions.