Daliyah Middleton

Eric Marshall
Blue Writing
July 11th, 2017
Peer Review-Maria Estevez

Peer Review-Maria Estevez

Summary of Paper:

Hi Maria, I can see that you are writing about the reality of stereotypes in our society. Without
simply stating that stereotypes have a negative connotation, you create an argument that
stereotypes are a result of one story that isnt complete. You recognize the plurality of our
identities with a quote from Amartya Sen, Identity and Violence: The Illusion of Identity,
furthering your argument against one story stereotypes. You bring up really general statements
that the reader can easily relate too, making the argument universal and applicable for a variety
of generations and cultural identities.

Letter to Author:

Dear Maria,
I really enjoyed reading the introduction of your paper. I never really viewed a stereotype
as one story that people tend to believe, creating distorted views of a plethora of groups in our
society. You did an excellent job choosing sources that create a unique argument against
stereotypes. I like how your sources dont necessarily focus solely on the idea of stereotypes but
varying aspects that contribute to developing a stereotype (identity, culture, and diversity).
Your proposition is at the end of your introduction paragraph, in which you state The
dangers of a single single story change the way people see you because it eventually leads to
stereotypes and others are lead to believe that you only have one identity. Despite your use of
reliable sources that contribute to the discussion, you never stated exactly why it dangerous to be
known for a single story. You should possibly include a counter-argument to show that you
recognize the other side of the argument in order to further your own argument. I also think that
specificity will also enhance your argument if you describe exactly what the single story is that
Chimamanda Ngozi experienced.
In your conclusion paragraph you create an assertion that we always associate Muslims
with terrorism. Who are the we that you are referring to in your paper? Are you addressing
your audience? This statement may come off as offensive or racists if you do not specify exactly
who you are considering your audience members. Make sure to make the distinction between
we and everyone.
Overall, your essay has really strong sources and references to different aspects of
stereotypes. When you write the draft to your essay I advise you to work on the creating a more
precise argument, including a counter-argument, and recognizing your audience.
Daliyah Middleton
Eric Marshall
Blue Writing
July 11th, 2017
Peer Review-Maria Estevez
Cant wait to read your next draft!
-Daliyah M.

Writer's Response:

After reviewing your essay Maria, I do believe that your thesis statement could be more
precise. How does the dangers of a single story make others perceive you? Are these perceptions
all negative? What are the advantages of being known as a single story. These may seem as
obvious questions, but when reading your paper Im not exactly sure of the dangers created when
being perceived as a single story. Focus on the overall argument that being known as a single
story is danger rather than examples of people who have been known as single story. You did an
excellent job introducing sources into your argument but you have to use these sources to further
your own argument. You ended the third paragraph of your paper with an argument from
Amartya Sen without responding to the quote or connecting it back to your proposition. Again,
you create really general statements throughout your paper by saying all and we without
addressing your specific audience. Im also confused about whether or not your essay is just an
argumentative paper or a PSA against stereotypes. Towards the end of your paper you state that
We all most come to terms with this reality, making your paper seem like a public service
announcement rather than an argumentative paper. I think you should make this distinction
because it will help your overall project in the paper.