This document is a critique form for a high school student's senior project paper. The mentor has reviewed the student's paper and provided feedback. [1] The mentor found no factual errors in the paper. [2] They suggested additional sources for research related to philosophy and theology. [3] The mentor recommended exploring topics like the power structures of the early church and teachings of philosophers like Aquinas to strengthen the arguments. [4] The mentor confirmed discussing their comments and feedback with the student.
This document is a critique form for a high school student's senior project paper. The mentor has reviewed the student's paper and provided feedback. [1] The mentor found no factual errors in the paper. [2] They suggested additional sources for research related to philosophy and theology. [3] The mentor recommended exploring topics like the power structures of the early church and teachings of philosophers like Aquinas to strengthen the arguments. [4] The mentor confirmed discussing their comments and feedback with the student.
This document is a critique form for a high school student's senior project paper. The mentor has reviewed the student's paper and provided feedback. [1] The mentor found no factual errors in the paper. [2] They suggested additional sources for research related to philosophy and theology. [3] The mentor recommended exploring topics like the power structures of the early church and teachings of philosophers like Aquinas to strengthen the arguments. [4] The mentor confirmed discussing their comments and feedback with the student.
Thank you for agreeing to critique this paper for Jack Feliciano. With this form, the student should provide the most recent draft of his/her Senior Project paper. Please read the paper for content, keeping in mind it will be revised. The English teacher will critique the paper for requirements, appropriate style, and mechanics. You are to read to ensure that the facts and research are accurate and sufficient.
Please make comments on the margins of the draft, answer the questions on this sheet, and feel free to add any additional comments on the back. This paper is a requirement for the student’s graduation, so your help is appreciated.
1. Is there any misinformation or has the writer made any factual errors? yes _____ no __x___ Comments:
● there is nothing that I would call misinformation but rather bad analysis ● everything is factually correct but Jack fails to consider logical counterarguments ● the arguments on scripture are somewhat invalid
2. Can you suggest sources for additional research for this topic, such as materials to read or watch and persons to interview?
3. What information can you give to help the student improve the content of the paper (including your own knowledge of the topic)?
● I’ve seen the overall structure of the paper...look into the following for stronger arguments: ○ power patterns of the early church ○ tendencies that controlled medieval societies ○ post-fall teachings and discrimination ○ teachings of non-secular philosophers ■ thomas aquinas ■ ignatius
4. I have read this paper and discussed my comments with the student. yes ___x__ no _____
Mentor’s name and qualifications: Jillian Jay; philosophy TA, youth ministry counselor at San Agustin Church Manila, ____________________________________________________ Mentor’s signature: Jillian Jay______________________________________________________________ Phone number: +639178122063_______________________________________________ Mentor’s Email Address: jillianfjay0526@gmail.com__________________________________