UPM-CALC/CEL2103/SEM 1 2019-20

WP TASK 3 BODY PARAGRAPH – DRAFT 1

CEL 2103
WRITING ACADEMIC TEXTS

SEMESTER 1, 2019/2020

WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 3: BODY PARAGRAPH FORM (DRAFT 1)

1. Forms Required
 Body Paragraph Form (Draft 1)
 Self-editing checklist
 Body Paragraph Form (Draft 2)

2. Task Description
a. Develop two body paragraphs of an argumentative essay based on your chosen topic using the
BODY PARAGRAPH FORM (DRAFT 1).
b. The body paragraphs should contain the following:
 supporting points (opposing view & rebuttal arguments) that are relevant to the topic/issue
 supporting details (opposing view & rebuttal arguments) with APA in-text citations that
support the arguments

3. Your BODY PARAGRAPH FORM (DRAFT 1 & 2) must be typed using font Arial 11 with 1.15
spacing.

WEEK TASK 3

 Write statements for the opposing views and the supporting points to elaborate on
Week 5 the views.
 Complete BODY PARAGRAPH FORM (DRAFT 1).

 Write topic sentences for the rebuttal arguments and the supporting points to
rebut the opposing view.
 Look for excerpts from reliable scholarly sources (e.g: books or journal articles;
Week 6 printed or electronic) which will be used as supporting details to support the
supporting points (rebuttal arguments).
 Mark (highlight or underline) the relevant sections of the excerpts.
Complete the BODY PARAGRAPH FORM (DRAFT 1).

Week 7 &
Paraphrase the excerpts using APA in-text citation format
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Week 9 Submit Writing Portfolio Task 3: Body Paragraph (Draft 1 & 2)

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NAME AISYAH BINTI MOHD KHAIR

MATRIC NO. 192789

GROUP NO. 23

THESIS STATEMENT:
Although some say cosmetic surgery has help them a lot in enhancing appearance and making their life
better, there is some evidence that cosmetic surgery produces negative results in reference to their
mental health and the risk of undergo it.

BODY PARAGRAPH 1

OPPOSING VIEW:
Many say that cosmetic surgery is becoming safer nowadays.

SUPPORTING POINT (OPPOSING VIEW):

The arguments stated that the technology in cosmetic surgery is improving. The scare stories the
proposition talk about are the worst examples of thirty years ago as they are nothing to do with cosmetic
surgery today.

TOPIC SENTENCE 1 (REBUTTAL ARGUMENT):

In contrast, there are dangers involved in any kind of surgery.

SUPPORTING POINT 1 (REBUTTAL ARGUMENT):

The dangers may not be seen during the surgery but there will be implications in the future.

SUPPORTING DETAIL 1: EXAMPLES/ FACTS/ STATISTICS

[Original Excerpt]
"When things go wrong someone can end up disfigured or even dead", Rawson added. "A facelift can
lead to your eyes or mouth not opening and closing properly. I've seen patients whose lower eyelid isn't
resting against the eyeball after they've had facial surgery. Breast implants can result in oddly shaped
breasts. And post-surgical infection is a risk, as is severe psychiatric injury."

SOURCE:
Campbell, D. (2011). The dangers of cosmetic surgery. Retrieved from
https://www.theguardian.com/lifeandstyle/2011/feb/09/dangers-cosmetic-surgery

PARAPHRASE OF THE EXCERPT:

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BODY PARAGRAPH 2

OPPOSING VIEW:
Those who encourage cosmetic surgery say that cosmetic surgery is a surgery where makes people
happier and more secure in themselves.

SUPPORTING POINT (OPPOSING VIEW):

Their confidence level increase as they feel better in themselves and more accepted in public.

TOPIC SENTENCE 2 (REBUTTAL ARGUMENT):

However, it is an addictive procedure where an individual is too concerned and too obsessed with their
appearance that leads them to undergo cosmetic surgery.

SUPPORTING POINT 2 (REBUTTAL ARGUMENT):

They are preoccupied with how they look, but in a negative way where they see themselves to be ugly,
malformed, misshapen, or hideous.

SUPPORTING DETAIL 2: EXAMPLES/ FACTS/ STATISTICS

[Original Excerpt]
“Many researchers have found that the majority of people who are addicted to cosmetic surgery also
suffer from co-occurring BDD. Body dysmorphic disorder is a rare psychiatric condition that is
characterized by persistent and intrusive preoccupations with an imagined or small defect in one’s
appearance. While the severity of the disorder varies, it causes many sufferers real emotional distress
and can have a devastating impact on their lives. The level of distress an individual with BDD
experiences regarding his or her appearance is vastly out of proportion to any real physical “defect” on
the face or body.”

SOURCE:
Hilliard, J. (2018). Plastic surgery addiction: an unhealthy obsession with perfection. Retrieved from
https://www.addictioncenter.com/community/plastic-surgery-addiction/

PARAPHRASE OF THE EXCERPT: