UPM-CALC/SEM2/2020-21/LPE2301/SCL WORKSHEET 8

LPE2301 ACADEMIC INTERACTION AND PRESENTATION

SCL WORKSHEET 8

WEEK 10 (USING SPOKEN LANGUAGE)

Name :XUE JING

Matric No. :200101
Group :55
Due date : 6 June 2021

Exercise 1

The following sentences are not concise. Based on the problem, rewrite the sentences to
achieve conciseness.

1. Problem : Sentence is too long.

Original : The point I am trying to make is sometimes public policy does not
sentence accomplish what it set out to achieve.
Revised : Public policy has not achieved its stated objectives.
sentence
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2. Problem : Sentence uses redundant or unnecessary words.

Original : For each and every problem, there will be an effective and practical
sentence solution.

Revised : For every problem, there is an effective solution.

sentence
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3. Problem : Sentence uses jargon.

Original : The patient is being given positive pressure ventilatory support.

sentence

Revised : The doctor uses a ventilator to push air (or a mixture of other
sentence gases)through the patient's airway into the lungs.

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4. Problem : Sentence uses negatives.

Original : It is not impossible to practise Zero Waste lifestyle in the university.

sentence

Revised : It is also possible to have a zero-waste lifestyle in college.

sentence
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5. Problem : Sentence uses weak verb.

Original : Before I start my presentation, let me tell you something about

sentence Himalayan Tigers.

Revised : Before I begin, I'm going to tell you something about the Himalayan
sentence tiger.

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Exercise 2

Change the sentences below from passive to active.

1. Three distinct aspects of the distribution of power within societies such as economic,

communal and authoritarian power were identified by German sociologist, Max Weber.

__Sociologist Max Weber identifies three different aspects of pooled power

within a society, such as economic communal and authoritarian

power._________________________________________________________________

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2. Employees were not expected to demand anything more than the salary, holidays,

pension, and bonuses associated with their role.

_Employees should not ask for anything other than pay, holidays, pensions and bonuses

associated with their roles.

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3. Today, extraordinary quantities of greenhouse gases are being released into the

atmosphere by one billion vehicles.

__Today, a billion cars are emitting large amounts of greenhouse gases

into the atmosphere.

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4. Listeners and viewers are now seen by media owners as consumer of their commodities

in much the same way as how customers are seen as consumers of their products by

retail chains.

___Now, media owners see listeners and viewers as consumers of their products, just as

media owners see consumers as consumers of their

products._______________________________________________________________

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5. Sweating and breathing deeply are the two examples of how energy is released by

humans.

___Two examples of how energy is released are sweating and deep

breathing.______________________________________________________________

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Submission:
Submit the completed Exercise 1 and 2 in PDF format.

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