Sample (Thao)

The given pie charts describe the distribution of world population, their expenditures
and their share of resource consumption.
As in the first chart, Food solely accounts for roughly a quarter, which is the highest
percentage among all expenses. By contrast, the amount used for Clothing
comprised only 6%, just half as much as money for Housing (12%) and one-third as
much as Food spending. Transport, with 18%, came in the next position. It seems
that there are much more other expenditures that people all around the world on an
average need to pay for (40%).
As to where people are living in the world, Asia clearly has more inhabitants than
the total of other parts of the world do all together. While Europe and America had
the same percentage of 14%, 4% less than that belonged to Africa. There is likely a
contradict pattern when it comes to the third graph about consumption of resources
when world population is taken into consideration. Although the number of residents
in Europe and America is significantly fewer than Asian people, these continents
consume a great amount of 60% of resources. 40% is used by the rest of the world.
(194 words)

Sample (Hồng Lam)

The given charts illustrate the information of the world expenses, population and
consumption of Resources by nations of the world. Units are measured by Commented [LM1]: World expenses, Population and
Consumption of resources
percentage.
As regards to the World spending, the rate of Food accounts for 24%, is twice as
high as the rate of Housing (12%). Housing rate is in the next position with 12% in
spending, is two-time higher compared to Clothing, which occupies only 6% and
seems to be the most cost-saving expense. Commented [LM2]: tránh dùng những từ khách quan
“seem, appear, probably”
dùng những từ chủ quan, khẳng định cao “obvious,
In terms of World population and Consumer Resources, it can be clearly seen that apparent, clear, fact”
Asia is the leader which occupies 57% population of the world. By contrast, USA
and Europe which only comprises about 28% global population but these areas
comes out first with about 60% in the proportion of Consumption Resources.
Overall, the most striking feature needed to mention is that USA and Europe have
the few rate of population but consume most resource worldwide. Commented [LM3]: more >< less
many >< few + CN
much >< less + UN
(151 words)