Malaysia, a Unique Country

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Malaysia is a multiracial country. Malaysia has a population of 23.27 million consisting of 61 percent
Malays, 30 percent Chinese, 8 percent Indians and 1 percent of other ethnic groups. Malaysia is
unique because of its diversity of races, religions and cultures, the stability of the country and many
places of interests. Besides, there are many international achievements which are the pride of our
nation.

Diversity of races, religions and cultures is a significant characteristic of our nation. Malaysia is a
multiracial country with a rich cultural heritage. Unique to Malaysia is the 'Open House' concept
where during the various cultural and religious festival like Hari Raya, Chinese New Year, Deepavali,
Gawai Day and others, friends and families and even strangers would visit the homes of those who
are celebrating the festival, to wish them well and enjoy the feast prepared by the hosts. Although
the visitors may be from different races, they still can tolerate with each other and live under the
same roof where they celebrate the festival together. This will help to strengthen the ties among
themselves.

Moreover, the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is also a uniqueness of us. We live
harmoniously in a country where there are no wars and conflicts among Malaysians. War is dreadful
and it may deteriorate humans' lives. We are fortunate that our country is safe and runs off the war.
So, people can live safely here. Somehow, Malaysia is a paradise for those Iraqis or Pakistanis.
Besides, our country is freed from natural disasters such as earthquakes. Earthquakes may bring
death and destroy many buildings. Therefore, Malaysia is unique because of the stability and
peaceful environment.

On top of that, there are many places of interests in country such as beaches, islands and rain forest.
Malaysia's rain forest is considered as the oldest in the world. The diverse species of animals and
plant life continue to excite a great deal of scientific research. Many believe that some undiscovered
plant may hold cures to many currently incurable human diseases. There are many islands in our
country such as Pulau Langkawi, Pulau Redang, Pulau Ketam and many others. Pulau Langkawi has a
lot of historitical informations. Those who are in favour of history can go there to explore the history
of that place. All the beaches in those islands are beautiful. The sand is soft and white. The
accommodation is well-established and that makes those islands ideal places to visit.

Following this, there are also international achievements of our country. Those achievements
include the existence of Kuala Lumpur International Airport (KLIA), Formula One (F1) racing circuit
and the Petronas Twin Towers. KLIA is unique because it has all that is needed for business,
entertainment and relaxation within its boundaries. The airport is part and parcel of the Multimedia
Super Corridor where high technology industries are being actively developed. Nevertheless, there is
a Formula One Race Track near the airport, so foreign car racing enthusiasts from all over the world
can come for a visit to gather here. Besides that, Petronas Twin Towers which is a building that soars
452 metres into the sky is once upon a time, the tallest building in the world and yet it is a national
pride to the people of Malaysia.

In short, Malaysia is unique that it has diversity of races, religions and cultures, a stable and peaceful
environment, places of interest and some internal achievements. Those are important characteristic
of our nation. It is rich of cultural heritage; it would be worth to play a visit here.

Corrections made in the essay above:

Do not put an extra hyphen - multiracial is correct, multi-racial and multi racial are wrong
Use noun instead of adjective - diversity of races, religious and cultures is wrong; it should be
diversity of races, religions and cultures; a unique of us is wrong, a uniqueness of us is correct
This sentence is wrong because there should be two phrases in the sentence where you use
the conjunction although - Although the visitors may be from different races. However… It should be
‘Although the visitors may be from different races, they…’
Article – an unique is wrong, a unique is correct
Subject-verb agreement - the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is should be the stability and
peacefulness of Malaysia are – Wrong: there is no wars and conflicts. Correct: there are no wars and
conflicts
Use adverb instead of noun – we live in a harmony country should be we live harmoniously in a
country or we live in harmony.
Singular or plural - humans' life is wrong, humans’ lives is correct, human beings is more appropriate
No plural form – Wrong: historitical informations. Correct: historical information
Avoid using informal word - has lots of is informal, has a lot of is formal

Essay Rating: 3.5

Good points and examples are discussed in the essay. However, there are some gross and minor
grammatical and spelling errors. Gross errors include subject-verb agreement errors and wrong use
of nouns and adjectives. All in all, there is still room for improvement. Keep up your writing effort!

malaysia, a unique country

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