Name: Melissa Ordoñez Rincón

INTRODUCTION
 Please specify the 2 effects in your thesis. The Hook and Background are OK.
 The Introduction is missing one of the components. Please read the examples in the
workshop to identify them.
 Very good introduction with complete components. Please correct the mistakes
(symbols).
 The three sections of the introduction are complete, but you had too many mistakes.
BODY PARAGRAPH 1
 The paragraph is missing the closing sentence. Also, please correct grammar and
vocabulary mistakes.
 The supporting ideas are not related to the effect mentioned. Besides, closing sentence is
incomplete.
 There is a clear topic sentence and closing sentence. Please check mistakes in the
supporting idea Incorrect
 The paragraph has all its components but there are some mistakes that need revision.
BODY PARAGRAPH 2
 In general, the paragraph has the necessary components, but grammar is terrible.
 The paragraph Supporting Idea does not explain the Topic sentence. Please adjust.
 The paragraph is missing the Topic Sentence. Please complete and also correct the
mistakes.
 Very good paragraph with clear components. Please check and correct the highlighted
mistakes.
CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH
 There are grammar mistakes that affect the understanding of the concluding paragraph.
Please check and rewrite. Incorrect
 Great concluding paragraph. Please correct some few grammar and vocabulary mistakes
detected.
 The Summary of Main Points has many inconsistencies. Please complement Restatement
of Thesis too.
 Good summary of main points and concluding sentence. However, Restatement of Thesis
is missing!