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Your CV Critique

Katie Warren <katie@topcv.com> April 9, 2020

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Hi FrançOis,

This free CV evaluation is intended to give you an honest, straightforward assessment

with some suggestions to help in your job search. I personally review hundreds of CVs
each month so I'm able to provide insight into how you compare to other job seekers
competing for the same positions.

Visual Presentation and Organisation

We've all been told that looks don't matter as much as substance, but in the case of your
CV this just isn't true. I found your design to be visually uneven. The appearance is not
polished, and it doesn't say "high potential" as your experience suggests. Remember that
your CV is your marketing tool. It's the first impression a potential employer has of you.

I liked your use of bullets to add emphasis, but you probably want to consider limiting
them in some areas to increase the impact to the employer. If they see too many bullets,
they might find it difficult to zero in on the most important information. Size and type of
bullets are also a consideration. Although seemingly minor, visual impact of a CV is the
key to ensuring that an employer reads it thoroughly.

Having a References section with a list of names and contact details, or even having a
note reading 'References Available' is unnecessary. Employers typically assume that you’ll
have this on hand during interviews.

CV Writing

You need a career summary section to define you as a professional and cover those areas
most relevant to your career level and job target. A career summary should provide hiring
managers with a brief, yet detailed synopsis of what you bring to the table.

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From the way the CV is worded, you come across as a "doer," as opposed to an
"achiever." Too many of your job descriptions are task-based rather than results-based.
This means that they tell you what you did, instead of what you achieved. This is a normal
mistake for non-professional CV writers. To be effective and create excitement a great
CV helps the hiring executive envisage you delivering similar achievements at his or her
company. Here are some examples of task-based sentences in your CV:

“Manage the relationship with the financial institutions and key commercial
stakeholders Responsible for reports on taxes, Financial analysis banking and labors”

“Company valuation statements, and other financial reports to assess accuracy and”

Employers want to know about your previous contributions and specifically how you've
made a difference. More importantly, they want to know how you are going to make a
significant difference at their company.

When I read your CV, I did not find the kind of compelling language that would bring your
work to life. Instead, I saw passive words and non-action verbs.

Phrases like “Responsible for” and “Manage” are overused, monotonous, and add little
value to your CV. Strong action verbs, used with compelling language to outline
exemplary achievements, are essential parts of a well-constructed CV.

Now, let's put it all together. Here's a real life example taken from a former client's CV. By
changing the language, we helped to improve the perception of the candidate.

Passive language / Doing: “Negotiated contracts with vendors”

Action language / Achieving: “Slashed payroll/benefits administration costs 30% by

negotiating pricing and fees, while ensuring the continuation and enhancements of
services.”

A change like this makes a dramatic improvement.

It may not seem obvious, but a regular review of every word and sentence in your CV is a
good idea. Hiring managers are looking for an excuse to eliminate you as a candidate.
You may not be able to see awkward phrases and grammatical errors if you've already
spend a lot of time with your own CV.

Digital Readiness

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Your CV is 698 KB in size. About 98% of CVs are smaller than yours, so you might want to
trim down pieces that make the file bigger. Sometimes, this is as simple as standardising
fonts or formatting.

CV F I L E SIZE, C OMPA R E D TO OTH ERS

698 KB

Your CV is saved in PDF format. 19% of CVs look like yours. While this may make viewing
consistent for recruiters, some older applicant tracking systems (ATS) have problems
reading them. If you have the ability, you might consider saving your document in
Microsoft Word format for some online submissions.

CV Scan Test Results

93% of all Hiring Managers use CV scanning software called

applicant tracking systems (ATS) to filter candidates from the application pool. To
illustrate how you stand up to the automation, I passed your CV through the very same
software that Hiring Managers use to filter the real talent from the hundreds, sometimes
thousands, of candidates that apply for a single open position.

Continue below to view how applicant tracking systems present

you...

REW R I T I N G PACKAGES

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PROF E S S IONAL GROWTH

An expertly written and keyword-optimised CV that sets you apart.

CARE E R EVOLUTION

All the elements you need, including a CV, cover letter & two revisions.

EXEC U T I VE PRIORIT Y
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CV, cover letter, and LinkedIn profile, created by an executive writer.

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The raw data, pulled directly from your CV.

“ François NNEMETE's experience appears to be

concentrated in Finance / Lending, with exposure to
Business Operations and General Business / Management
Activities or Functions. François NNEMETE has 5 years
of work experience, with little or no management
experience. ”

DOE S T H I S LOOK LIKE YOU?

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The content of this section has been pulled directly from your CV by an applicant tracking system that is used by
many Fortune 500 companies. If this is not a proper representation of who you are as a candidate, we're here to
help.

Email me with any questions!

Full Name
François NNEMETE

Most Recent Employer

PEC&OSP consulting, Yaoundé

Most Recent Professional Position

Financial analyst and Company owner

Contact Info
699084305
sadousimplice@yahoo.fr

Location
NOT FOUND

Experience
5 total years

Most Recent Education

Amity University

Management Score
25/100

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What the Tracking Systems think of you as an

Applicant
Hiring Managers use applicant tracking systems (ATS) to automatically designate a Best
Fit based on your experience level and the kinds of keywords spread throughout your CV.
The ATS will also assign a weighted score to Key Skills & Competencies from your CV to
paint a picture of who you are as a potential employee.

I passed your CV through the very same software that hiring

managers use. Here is how your CV stacks up...

WHER E T HE ATS TH INKS YOU FIT:

67% Finance

8% Business Operations and General

Business

25% Other Professional Industries

Does this properly describe the career you’re pursuing?

If not, check out real-life examples where we helped someone change their story.

TOP K E Y WORDS & S KILLS

financial analyst financial reports

forecasting exchange contracts

OTHE R C ORE COMP ETENCIES

feasibility finance financial management training

retail performance analysis project management

LESS W E I G HTED SKILLS

accounting budget collection calibration credit

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equities financial analysis

Is this the skillset that you want to convey to employers?

If not, email me! I'm here to help you land more interviews so you can get more job
offers.

Recommendations & Next Steps

FrançOis, for a professional with 5 years of experience, your CV undersells you. This is
the most important tool in your job search and it needs to clearly communicate your
expertise, unique experience, accomplishments, and career goals.

HERE A R E THE MA JO R ISSUES HOLDING YO U R CV B AC K :

Show the outcomes of your efforts. Your CV focuses too much on what you’ve
done, not what you’ve achieved.

Your CV does not make a strong visual impression. Your CV should appear
clean, uncluttered, and appealing to the eye.

Your CV needs to include more keywords and skills to help categorize you as a
stronger candidate.

TopCV writers are experts at fixing these kinds of problems. Consider

working with a professional writer to get a CV that sets you up for success.

Get an expert to rewrite your CV

Please feel free to email me with any questions. We're here to help you put your best foot
forward.

Thank you,

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Katie Warren
CV Expert, TopCV
katie@topcv.com

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