I bracketed a sentence in your writing that shows a vivid Adding more focus and detail can develop arguments.

lop arguments. Find

description of a moment. Write three to five sentences to show a sentence in your entry where you think the reader would
exactly what happened in this moment. need more details to be persuaded. Write three to five more
sentences that help prove your argument.

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I noticed that you wrote about multiple moments in your
journal entry. Though I know it is sometimes difficult to decide
on only one moment to write about, focusing on one moment
will make your writing stronger. Underline one moment. Write
three or more sentences to show precisely what happens in that
one moment. Grade 6 Unit 1 Week 1
Pretend this moment happened in slow motion. Write three or
more sentences describing the small details of this moment.
Textual evidence can strengthen arguments. I have underlined
a place where you could add textual evidence to support your
argument. Add a piece of textual evidence after the underlined
sentence.
Grade 6 Unit 1 Week 4
I underlined a place in your entry where I was almost
convinced. Write two more sentences about evidence that
might convince me of this part.

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There are so many interesting moments in this entry that I’m I have underlined a moment in your journal entry where you
having a hard time imagining all of them. Write 3–5 sentences could add text to support your argument. Write three to five
just about _________________________________________ more sentences supporting the argument in your sentence or
_________________________________________________. paragraph.

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I put brackets around a section of your entry that is full of Adding more focus and detail can develop arguments. Find
intriguing moments. Underline one of those moments and a sentence in your entry where you think the reader would
write 3–5 more sentences about it. need more details to be persuaded. Write three to five more
sentences that help prove your argument.

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Find a sentence in your entry where you think the reader would As I read your entry, I believe that the argument of your piece
like to know more details. Write 3–5 sentences that show more is [that people should not be allowed to have fireworks in dry
about that sentence. areas]. I have underlined a sentence in your writing. In this
moment, write three to five sentences from the text to support
your argument.
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I was intrigued by the order you chose for your moments. I
wonder how you would transition between them if they were
in the opposite order. Rewrite the last and first sentences of the
moments in the opposite order, then write one or two sentences
that would help transition between the two.
Grade 6 Unit 1 Week 3
I marked a place where you switched back and forth between
two moments [four] times. Rewrite that section with only
________ switches between moments and see what happens.

Grade 6 Unit 1 Week 3

You caught me off guard when you moved from one moment
to the next in the place I marked. Write one or two sentences
that will help ease me into the second moment.

Grade 6 Unit 1 Week 3

I have underlined a moment in your journal entry where you
could focus more on your argument. Write three to five more
sentences about the argument in your sentence or paragraph.

Grade 6 Unit 1 Week 4

Sample Revision Assignments 1

I underlined a verb in your entry. I’m eager to know what other Find a place in your entry where you think sensory details
words you might use to describe that action. List three strong would help the reader imagine the moment more clearly. Write
verbs that could replace the underlined verb in your entry. two sentences with sensory details to help the reader picture
that moment.

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Pick three verbs in your writing that you feel could be stronger.
Rewrite those sentences with stronger verbs.
Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 1
I got the sense that you were feeling _____________________
________________ in the moment you wrote about. I wonder
what verbs you could use to capture that feeling. Rewrite two
sentences from your entry so that they use strong verbs that
have a _________________________ feeling.
Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 1
I underlined a passage in your entry where you used [over
used verb]. It sounded like you actually were doing something
very unique. Rewrite the passage in three different ways using
strong verbs.
I underlined a place in your entry where you said that you were
__________________________________. I’m curious what
you noticed with your senses when you felt that way. Write two
sentences that describe what you felt, smelled, heard, or tasted
when you felt __________________________________.
Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 4
I underlined a place in your entry where you described a lot
about what you tasted. This part made me curious about what
your other senses noticed in that moment. Imagine you had
your eyes closed in that moment and write three sentences
about what your other senses noticed.
Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 5
Find a place in your entry where you think sensory details
would help the reader imagine the moment more clearly. Write
three sentences with sensory details to help the reader picture
that moment.

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I underlined a verb in your entry. I’m curious about other words I underlined a place in your entry where you started to describe
you might use to describe that action. List three strong verbs what __________________________________. What other
that could replace the underlined verb in your entry. sensory details can you use to describe what it _____________
_____________________?

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I noticed you used the verb said in your entry several times.
Count how many times you used said and write the number
here. Pick three sentences where you used said and rewrite
them with a different verb.

Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 2

I’m really interested in this part of the explanation. Write two
more sentences comparing what you know about your school
with other schools in your neighborhood.

Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 3

You described the sports equipment needed for your team
sport. Someone in another country will need more information
to understand the equipment. Write three more sentences
explaining how this equipment makes for a more competitive
sport.
Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 3
I’ve underlined a sentence where you start to explain an
important fact. Write two more sentences adding greater detail
to this fact.

Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 3

I underlined a place in your entry where you described a lot
about what you saw. This part made me curious about what
your other senses noticed in that moment. Imagine you had
your eyes closed in that moment and write two sentences
about what your other senses noticed.
Grade 6 Unit 2 Week 4

Sample Revision Assignments 2

What caused this event to happen? Write 3–4 sentences This character seems really ____________________________
describing the cause. ______ Try to think of another example of when this character
was feeling the same emotion. Write it below and connect the
two examples together with a transition sentence.

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This really sets up the conflict, but what happened next? Write I was reading the first paragraph I underlined and it seems to be
3–4 sentences telling the effect of these dramatic events. connected to the second paragraph I underlined. Copy the two
sentences into your Writer’s Notebook and write a transition
sentence that will help connect them.

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This argument can be made stronger if you can find a piece of This event seems to be related to the event in your next
evidence from the text to support it. Go back in the text and paragraph. Try to write 1–2 sentences to help your reader
find a quotation or dialogue that you can use to help support transition from one to the other.
your ideas presented here.

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I’m curious about the events that lead up to the place I This section seems to contrast nicely to the first section I
underlined. Write 3–5 sentences that flashback to prior events. underlined. Rewrite the two sections below. Try to connect
them using a transition sentence.

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I’m wondering what the effects of [not doing your homework
were]. Write 3–5 sentences explaining what happened as a
result of your choices.

Grade 6 Unit 3 Week 2

I wonder what effect it might have on your reader if you order
these sentences differently. Rewrite the sentences in a different
order to build tension in the scene.

Grade 6 Unit 3 Week 2

Look at the sentence in brackets. Add 2–3 more sentences to
this with specific evidence. Write about a personal experience
related to this reason or a story that you can recall.

Grade 6 Unit 3 Week 3

Look at the sentence in brackets. Think of what a reader who
thinks that you are making that up would say. Write 2–3 more
sentences that show how you would argue against it.

Grade 6 Unit 3 Week 3

I was reading the first sentence I underlined and it seems to be
connected to the second sentence I underlined. Copy the two
sentences into your Writer’s Notebook and write a transition
sentence that will help connect them.

Grade 6 Unit 3 Week 4

This section seems to contrast nicely to the first section I
underlined. Rewrite the two sections below. Try to connect
them using a transition sentence.

Grade 6 Unit 3 Week 4

Sample Revision Assignments 3

You wrote that _____________________________________. You wrote that _____________________________________.
Write 2–4 more sentences that convince me that this statement This sentence does not seem completely relevant. Rewrite it so
is true. Make sure that the new information is believable. that it relates directly to this argument.

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This interesting piece of information is not totally relevant. This is connected to your argument. Go back to your notes and
Rewrite it so it directly aids your argument. find out exactly who said this and the page where this quote
comes from. Add that information.

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This section contains an interesting piece of information that This information may be credible, but I do not know anything
might be more useful in a different section of your entry. Find about your source. Add information that shows why this is a
this sentence and write it below. Then write a replacement credible person.
sentence.

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This specific detail might not completely match your purpose. This section contains many specific details. Reread the section,
Rewrite this detail so that your reason for choosing it is very and circle the details that seem to be most relevant to your
clear. purpose in this entry.

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You wrote that _____________________. Write 3–5 more This paragraph may be appropriate at a different spot in
sentences that convince me that this statement is true. Make your entry. Reread your entry and choose a place where this
sure the information is new. paragraph might be a better fit. Place a star in the new spot to
mark your decision.

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This sentence contains a very common phrase (a cliché). Circle
it and write two original sentences that focus on this point.

Grade 6 Unit 4 Week 2

I’m really interested in the section when you wrote about
_____________________. Write two more sentences about
what happened and how you felt about the author using
dialogue in that part.

Grade 6 Unit 4 Week 3

Write two more sentences explaining why you agreed with a
decision the character made.

Grade 6 Unit 4 Week 3

I’ve underlined a sentence where you describe an important
moment about the character, Araceli. Write two more
sentences explaining how she showed her personality in that
part.

Grade 6 Unit 4 Week 3

You wrote that _____________________________________.
Pretend that you are a crime investigator. Write three questions
that you might ask the suspect in order to prove that this
statement is true.

Grade 6 Unit 4 Week 4

Sample Revision Assignments 4

This sentence contains many specific details. Reread the section I’ve underlined a sentence where you start to explain an
and circle the details that seem most relevant to your point of important fact. Write two more sentences adding greater detail
view. to this fact.

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This interesting piece of information is not totally relevant. This tells me where this happened. Write 3–5 sentences that
Rewrite it so it directly aids your argument. show important details about the setting.

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This section contains an interesting piece of information that Write 3–5 sentences that describe the setting. Try to include the
might be more useful in a different section of your entry. Find feel, who else was there, and what others were doing.
the sentence and write it below. Then, write a replacement
sentence.

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This sentence helps set the context for your argument. It could Pretend that you are watching this moment from the outside.
be more convincing. Add two more sentences with relevant Write 3–5 sentences that describe the scene you are taking in.
details from the story.

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This sentence contains two distinct ideas. Rewrite this sentence This specific detail might not completely match your purpose
and use a conjunction (and, but, or, then, yet) to connect these for writing this piece. Rewrite this detail so that your reason for
ideas. choosing it is very clear.

Grade 6 Unit 5 Week 2 Grade 6 Unit 5 Week 4

This sentence starts to give me a sense of the scene around This section contains many specific details. Reread the section
you. I would like to know even more. Write three more and circle the details that seem most relevant to your purpose
sentences to convince me of where you are. in this paper.

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It seems like this takes place recently, but I am not really sure. Write 3–5 more sentences to convince me that this is true.
Rewrite the first three lines so I can clearly picture the setting. Include some specific information about the [particular event}.

Grade 6 Unit 5 Week 2 Grade 6 Unit 5 Week 5

Reread the beginning of your piece of writing. Look for a place This paragraph contains many different ideas. Reread the
where you can explain the situation that you are discussing. paragraph and add at least one sentence that joins these
Write 2–4 sentences that link the situation to your argument separate ideas.

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I’m really interested in this part of the topic. Write two more This sentence starts to give me a sense of the scene around
sentences explaining why it is important. you. I would like to know even more. Write three more
sentences to convince me of where you are.

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You described one particular type of volcano using an example
that seemed to interest you. Try adding that example to your
introduction after the place I underlined.

Grade 6 Unit 5 Week 3

Sample Revision Assignments 5

Reread this sentence and change it to a question. Circle the subject and underline the predicate. Now, rewrite the
sentence by rearranging the subject and predicate.

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This sentence contains some extra words that make it All the sentences in this section follow the same subject-verb
confusing. Rewrite the sentence, making sure that the pattern pattern. Revise three of the sentences so that they start with a
of the sentence stays consistent. clause instead.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 1 Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 5

Include dialogue in this section so you will have a variety of Rewrite this sentence three times, changing the verb each time.
ways to interest your reader.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 1 Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 5

Rewrite this passive voice sentence in two different ways. Circle Circle the subject and underline the predicate. Now, rewrite the
your favorite. sentence by rearranging the subject and the predicate.

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Rewrite this sentence in the form of a question. Try it two
different ways as a question.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 2

Rearrange the beginning of the sentences in this section. Five of
the sentences start with the same word. Write new beginnings
for three of the sentences.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 2

Look at the sentence in brackets. Add 2–3 more sentences to
this place to state why you think someone would disagree (a
counter point of view) and write how you would respond to this
point.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 3

Look at the sentence in brackets. Add 2–3 more sentences to
show why the reason you gave for your point of view is valid.
Write about a personal experience related to the reason, an
anecdote that you can recall, or cite some evidence.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 3

This sentence contains some extra words that make it
confusing. Rewrite the sentence making sure that the pattern of
the sentence stays consistent.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 4

Three of these short sentences set up a rhythm. Reread the last
sentence and change it to match the pattern.

Grade 6 Unit 6 Week 4

Sample Revision Assignments 6