Activity 1

Rewrite the sentences below to achieve conciseness.

Example :

Problem : Using long sentence

Original sentence : In the eventuality of a fire, it is imperative that all persons evacuate the
building without undue delay.
Revised sentence : In case of a fire, it is important that everybody leaves the building at once.

1. Problem : Using jargon

Original sentence : All teachers at this school are expected to achieve high
standards in their instructional duties.
Revised sentence : all school teachers are expected to achieve high standards in their teaching
task.

2. Problem : Using negative sentence

Original sentence : The group assignment cannot be completed because some students are not
doing their parts.
Revised sentence : The group assignment will be abandoned without cooperation .

3. Problem : Using redundant or unnecessary words.

Original sentence : He was really late to his English class due to the fact that he had to finish his
Science test.
Revised sentence : He was late to his English class due to finish his science test.

4. Problem : Using long sentence

Original sentence : My brother, who is employed as a nutritionist at the University of Florida,
recommends the daily intake of megadose of Vitamin C.
Revised sentence : My brother works as a nutritionist recommends daily intake of Vitamin C
megadose.
5. Problem : Using weak verb
Original sentence : There are many benefits of using social medias in teaching and learning.
Revised sentence :Many benefits of using social media in Education.

Activity 2
Rewrite each of the following sentences using active voice.

1. The current status report has been attached by the auditor.

The auditor has attached the current status report.

2. Several steps have been taken by the employees to correct the errors found in the self
audit reports.

The employees have take several steps to correct the errors found in the self audit reports.

3. The participants were greeted by Rita Chong, and the keynote speaker was introduced by
her.

Rita Chong was greeting the participant and introduces the keynote speaker.

4. Part of the colleges should have been renovated by the management.

The management should have renovated part of the colleges.

5. The current status report has been attached, and I have highlighted the important figures.

I have highlighted the important figures and has attached the current status report.