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DIRECTIONS: The following sentences contain documentation errors. Based on what you've learned about
SMT’s tutoring principles and developing the TRF, please develop responses for each item through pointing
out the issue, explaining why revision is necessary, and showing how to revise. Create responses that look
like parts of actual tutorials; please assume that the errors recur in the drafts. Hence, each tutorial should
start with a sentence like these:

Your in-text citations include unnecessary pieces of information.

Some entries in your reference list are missing pieces of information about your sources.

Also, please end each tutorial by referring the student to a relevant chapter of the Writer’s Handbook. Here is
an example:

If you want more information on how you can cite your sources properly, please see this lesson in our
Writer’s Handbook: APA Style.

* Sue 8200860 has requested that you respond to the Use of Resources:
The study concluded that “some types of bacteria that are either commonly consumed or already found in
guts of humans can create electricity”. (Light, 2017)
Note about the assignment: Sue is supposed to follow APA style.

Your in-text citations are missing information that is important for readers to be able to search for the
information in your sources. {Make you I-step clear and concise so that the student can easily
understand what she needs to work on. Here are some examples: Your in-text citations do not
follow APA format. Your in-text citations lack important elements. Then, remember to always
engage with the draft. It’s ideal to quote or summarize the part of the draft that illustrates the
issue after your I-step. You can then explain why the excerpt is weak or faulty and why it needs
to be revised after presenting the excerpt.} Since you are following the APA style, your in-text citations
should contain the author’s last name, the year the source was published and the page number (use the p.
abbreviation for page). {Remember to also qualify your explanation. In APA, locator information,
such as page numbers, is only required when citing direct quotations, so you could’ve clarified
that.}Alternatively, if the source is not paginated, then you may instead put the section from where the
quote/information was obtained (if the source has sections) and the paragraph from which you obtained that
information. Take these as examples:

(Hope, 2010, p. 100) – For paginated sources.

(Hope, 2010, Intestinal Health section, para. 4) – For non-paginated, sectioned sources.

(Hope, 2010, para. 4) – For non-paginated, non-sectioned sources. {It will be better if you present
sample citations in sentences so that you can also show the student proper punctuation
placement.}

Using the proper citation format will help your readers find the information you are citing in the work that
you are using as a reference as well as boost your paper’s credibility. If you want to learn more about how to
cite your sources properly in this style then please see the APA Style section of the Writer’s Handbook.

Here’s a sample lesson for your reference:

You do not properly cite the direct quotations in your essay according to APA style. Let’s look at
this sentence from your first body paragraph:

The misconduct in question is found to be “a manifestation of the student’s disability.” (Chapman,

2007)

Here, you present a direct quote from Chapman, but you only include the author’s last name and
the publication year in your citation. Remember that in APA, we also include the page number
(preceded by “p.”) when citing a direct quote if the source is paginated. Locator information such
as the page number will help readers easily locate where this quote in Chapman’s work is in.
Here’s an example to help you:

A lot of people testified that “love sees, but it doesn’t mind” (Grey, 1966, p. 143).

In my example above, I included the author’s name, the publication year, and the page number in
my citation. Notice that I also placed the period after the citation since the citation is still part of
the sentence. Now, what page is Chapman’s direct statement from? See the rest of your draft for
similar concerns. For more help, feel free to visit this link: APA Style.

* James 8512369 has requested that you respond to the Use of Resources:
After Percy mentions Hermes, Luke's “face turned the color of pepperoni”.
Note about the assignment: James, who is comparing several printed books that have the same theme, is
supposed to follow MLA style.

I’ve noticed that your quotations from the books are not properly formatted.{Make sure that you also
identify the issue correctly. In James’ case, there isn’t a citation at all. Then, again, which
sentence from the draft illustrates the issue?} This presents an issue because it can end up confusing
your readers on which quotes are from which book, especially considering that the books you are reviewing
have the same themes. To resolve this, you can include a signal phrase before each quotation that tells your
readers which book or author is being quoted. {Provide complete guidelines. Aside from the author’s
name, what else is required when citing paginated sources in MLA?} For example:

In Rick Riordan’s The Sword of Summer, the main character asks his sword “Can you do a glamour and
turn into something smaller?” (Riordan 100).

Alternatively, you may instead choose to put a short quotation directly within your sentence. Here is an
example:

The main character in Rick Riordan’s The Sword of Summer asks if his sword can “turn into something
smaller” (Riordan 100). {Your examples aren’t completely accurate as you cite the author’s
name twice in each sentence. In MLA, if the author’s name is already mentioned in the signal
phrase, it doesn’t need to be included in the parenthetical citation. Hence, the parenthetical
citation should only include the page number.}

Remember to put the author’s name and the page number in parentheses after the quotation. If the work
has no pagination, you may simply put the author’s name and the paragraph number (if provided) in the
parentheses. {Tailor your lesson to the student’s sentence/case. Per the assignment, the student
needs to compare printed books, so that means that all his sources are paginated.} If you wish to
learn more about citing in the MLA style, please consult the Writing Handbook section on MLA Style
documentation.

Here’s a sample lesson to further help you:

The direct quotes in your essay lack proper citations. Here’s an example from your second body
paragraph:

At first, readers would think that Mrs. Mallard is mourning the death of her husband as “she sank,
pressed down by a physical exhaustion that haunted her body and seemed to reach into her
soul.”

Here, you present a direct quotation from a story, but you do not cite it. As a result, readers are
clueless about where this quote is from. For improvement, remember that in MLA, we use the
author’s last name and the page number when citing sources. If the author’s name is introduced
in the signal phrase, we enclose the page number in parentheses and place it at the end of the
sentence. Here’s an example:
Grey believes that more and more teenagers nowadays are being addicted to social media (75).

Otherwise, we enclose both the author’s name and the page number in parentheses at the end of
the sentence. To help you further, here are some examples:

He also believes that more and more teenagers nowadays are being addicted to social media
(Grey 75).

Given these examples, who is the author of the quote above? What page is the information from?
Make sure that your other citations also follow MLA style. For more help, feel free to visit this
link: MLA Style

* Anne 7778548 has requested that you respond to the Use of Resources:
The study concluded that ‘some types of bacteria that are either commonly consumed or already found in
guts of humans can create electricity’ (Light p. 5).
Note about the assignment: Anne is supposed to follow Harvard style.

Your in-text citations do not follow the Harvard style format. They are missing important pieces of
information.

The study concluded that ‘some types of bacteria that are either commonly consumed or already found
in guts of humans can create electricity’ (Light p.5).

While your citation includes the author’s name and the page from where the information was cited, it does
not include the year that the work was published. This might cause some confusion for your readers, as the
lack of a publication year in the citation makes it difficult to know which of the author’s works you are
referring to.

For Harvard style, you need to cite the author’s last name in every in-text citation, followed by the year of
publication directly after the author’s name. Here are some examples:

Watson (2004) found that the gastrointestinal system is full of bacteria that live in the appendix.

The study was unable to find any correlation between vulnerability to diarrhea and a lack of an appendix
(Gabor 2003, p. 15).

Ilrow (2000 para. 2) concluded that the stomach is too full of acid for most bacteria to live in.

For more information about the details of writing and citing in Harvard Style, please consult our Writer’s
Handbook section on the Harvard Style.