UNIVERSIDAD NACIONAL ABIERTA Y A DISTANCIA ¨UNAD¨

Carlos Alberto Sánchez valencia

COD.9874638
Task 4

Intermediate English Two

Presented to:
Juliana Alzate
GROUP 551012_17

Bachelor in English as a foreign language

November 9th of 2020
 My personal story

As I was studying at high school, I had always been interested in studying medicine
in fact, I got ready to get good grades to get into in any public college, I got good
grades actually they were the highest from school.

I got good grades because I had been getting ready for reading and studying a lot.

When I got out of studying from school I applied to one public university immediately
for studying medicine but I didn´t get it due to, the grades weren´t high enough, I was
really break down.

I started working in a company It was named photo Japan, I had been working there
for 4 years when I was promoted to manager.

It was a useful experience because I learnt too many topics such as managing,
customer service between others.

Unfortunately, I lost encouragement for applying to a university at that time , however

I was growing up professional in a great place surrounded by good persons and
coworkers, I used to be strict in my work and with the employees.

I had been working there for 4 years when I got into UNAD college to study bachelor
in English as foreign language, I was really excited about it.

As I was studying in 4th semester at the university, I got sick due to I had been
wasting a lot of important time on activities and unhealthy habits with my friends,
which made me sick.

I had wasted much personal time since my parents moved to Manizales to live with
my mother's aunts who were getting old.

At this point I had been feeling worst on my health, however I tried forgetting those
diseases.
A bit time later when my parents had moved yet, I started getting sick, I got tired
easily, lost too much weight and I fall sick so I decided to go to hospital by myself, I
was feeling terrible and I had got dizzy many times at that moment.

When I got to the hospital, I was checked by professionals who diagnosed me with
a disease for life.

After my parents had moved I used to eat much junk food and lost too much time on
stupid things or maybe on bad friends who only were with me when I had enough
money to spend with them, I never got good time from them back.

I was hospitalized for 2 months in an intensive care unit, I was really dying, when I
got out of the hospital I had to quit working in that company.

Since then I learned to tap into every time with my relatives and enjoy meeting new
people that valued my personality instead of the money I had in pockets.

It was a traumatic experience and long time surrounded by four walls but it helped
me to grow up as a person and understand a lot from others.

After that everything on my life I assume it with responsibility actually, since then I
have been getting good grades from college and draw on every time I spend with
my family.

Fortunately, I got over this bad experience If I had the opportunity to get time back,
I´d do things better.

The teacher asked me to talk about a special experience you´re wondering why I
told you about a traumatic experience, I did it because I got a great learning from it,
and this had to occur on me to value really important things in my life and my family.

Now I´m getting used to being organized with everything, it helps me to grow up as
a person and professionally.

I wish I had realized before things were going on bad all would have been different.
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Link video:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YocTe9s6820&t=11s
 bibliographic references

Caracol, R,. (2020) [fotografía]. Recuperado de:

https://caracol.com.co/emisora/2020/05/06/pereira/1588789606_406209.html

Linares, R,. (2016) [fotografía]. Recuperado de: http://www.elacontecer.co/somos-

capaces-resilientes-nos-lo-proponemos/