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Getting Started
What a personal statement is
What it is NOT
Japanese has never come easily to me. Honestly, it’s a brutal language to learn. But
despite the countless challenges I’ve faced, I’ve devoted more than half of my life
to learning it. Sure, I’ve experienced the occasional outburst; I’ve sobbed because I
couldn’t understand a Japanese sentence, no matter how hard I tried to dissect it.
I’ve also cursed. A lot. The journey to fluency is tough. But I can’t imagine a life
without Japanese—and I don’t think I’d ever want to.
I waited patiently by the bench in what all Harvey Mudd chemistry majors call the
"Super Lab," staring for what seemed to be hours at a small flask bubbling with
something that looked like a cross between Pepto-Bismol and whipped cream. I
was waiting for the color to turn just the right shade of blue before I could go home
for a late dinner, but it was obvious that this solution was as far from blue as
baseball is from rugby. I realized then that "Super Lab" was not so Super, and
neither was a career as a chemist.
Body Paragraphs
❖ give strong, specific reasons as to why you want to study the course at that
institution.
❖ show what makes you stand out as a candidate
I took my first Japanese class when I was twelve. Initially, my interest in the
language was superficial; I loved anime and manga and thought Spanish was
boring. Over time, however, I developed a far deeper connection to Japanese
culture. But despite my growing passion for Japan, my career goals remained
convoluted. I knew I wanted to write and translate, but what exactly? On top of
that, I was still a somewhat taciturn conversationalist. And as for kanji, well, let’s
just say kanji and I have a rocky relationship.
After studying Japanese for five years in junior high and high school, I entered
college and declared a double major in English and East Asian languages and
cultures. I received As in my Japanese classes, but I couldn’t shake the feeling I
was an impostor. After all, I wasn’t really good at Japanese; I was just good at
doing homework. It was a feeling I’d harbored for years.
The conclusion should sum up your main points, reflect on your main
accomplishments and clearly show your desire to study.
If you began with an anecdote, then the conclusion should refer back to that
anecdote in some way, to take the reader full-circle.
Conclusion Example
Do: Be professional
❖ Create a balance between a positive/enthusiastic tone while
remaining formal
Don’t: Have spelling/grammatical errors!
❖ Typos and small errors will betray all the hard work you have done,
and make you seem unprofessional.
Example 1 Example 2
'I was inspired by the Universitys 'I was inspired to study Animal
world-renowned researchers and Biology because of the
world-leading facilities. The University is groundbreaking work into the
very highly-ranked in Biology, which is behaviour of bees that is being led by
what I have dreamed of studying since I Sussex Professor Francis Ratnieks. I
was a little child. I would be excited to follow the work of the University of
study with professors who are so Sussex Laboratory of Apiculture and
well-known in there field. I realize your Social Insects and would be proud to
institution is a selectively permeable study in such a renowned department
membrane, but I think I’m just the right and contribute to its highly ranked
kind of organism to get through!’ research.'
Brainstorming Exercise
Focused free-write:
2) A specific anecdote that illustrates why you are interested in the course
3) Why does this anecdote show that you will make unique contributions to the
course? What are some other specific work/curricular experiences you’ve had that
make you a good candidate?
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