Original Quotation​: “Many colleges . . .

do not ensure that students acquire [work

readiness] skills. One survey of employers, for example, found that recent college graduates
lack basic workplace proficiencies like adaptability, communication skills, and the ability to
work in groups and solve complex problems. The National Association of Manufacturers
reports that its members are most in need of employees with strong basic employability
skills (such as timeliness and work ethic)” (Stone 6).

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structure columns.

Instructor’s Used more general The instructor uses Original quotation

Paraphrase: terms instead of a single word such says that employers
Currently, colleges citing specific as “currently” to lack the basic
seem to be failing to claims and surveys. replace longer workplace needs
prepare students for The instructor’s phrases such as such as
many of the social example was also “found that recent communication skills
aspects of the more general instead college graduates”. whereas the
workplace. For of using concrete instructor says the
example, employers examples. The employers are not
have indicated that language is also getting it at all. The
they want—and aren’t changed to a more instructor has a more
getting—basic conversational tone, direct and stronger
workplace skills, such whereas the original claim.
as teamwork and statement had a
communication skills, more formal tone.
from their new
college-educated
employees.
*Modified from Suzanne Lane’s​ ​IWAC 2014 Presentation​ Handout
 Original Quotation:​ ​For the most part, corals are extremely chaste; they reproduce asexually,
by “budding.” The annual spawning is thus a rare opportunity to, genetically speaking, mis things
up. Most spawners are hermaphrodites, meaning that a single polyp produces both eggs and
sperm, all wrapped together in a convenient little bundle. No one knows exactly how corals
synchronize their spawning, but they are believed to respond to both light and temperature
(Kolbert 145).

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Group’s We changed the We changed the We put “generally
Paraphrase: language of the structure by corals harmonize
Generally, corals original quotation recording the main their reproduction
harmonize their by making it contain idea of the last cycle...” where the
reproduction cycle less jargon and sentence and original quotation
based on making it more moving it to the first says “No one knows
environmental factors understandable for sentence of our exactly how..”
such as lighting and those with less paraphrase.
temperature. Corals education in corals.
have both female and
male sexual organs
which allows them to
reproduce asexually.