Jasmine Castellanos

ENGL 363-01 16853

Scholar’s Notebook #3

March 25th – April 15th

March 25th, 2021 (Week 9 Part 1) - “Paraphrasing and Attributions”

Original Quotation:  “Many colleges . . . do not ensure that students acquire [work readiness] skills. 
One survey of employers, for example, found that recent college graduates lack basic workplace
proficiencies like adaptability, communication skills, and the ability to work in groups and solve
complex problems.  The National Association of Manufacturers reports that its members are most in
need of employees with strong basic employability skills (such as timeliness and work ethic)” (Stone
6).

USE LANE’S STRATEGIES A-E, How did I change the How did I change Did I accidentally
pg. 1 here, to fill in the language? the structure? change the
language and structure meaning?  How? 
columns.

Instructor’s Paraphrase:  c) phrases in the d) Sentence two in The meaning of the

Currently, colleges seem to paraphrase are more the original quotation did not
be failing to prepare students formal. For example, quotation is broken change. The
for many of the social aspects using the terms team into two sentences paraphrase has less
of the workplace.  For work instead of “the in the instructor’s jargon than the
example, employers have ability to work in paraphrase. original quotation
indicated that they want— groups”.  but gets the point
 By using a
and aren’t getting—basic across.
 Changed the precise verb
workplace skills, such as team
“ability to “indicated”  A possible
work and communication
work in it implies change in
skills, from their new college-
groups” to that the meaning
educated employees. 
“teamwork” writer is could be the
and removed referring to addition of
some of the another employees
listed skills study   being
college-
educated.

*Modified from Suzanne Lane’s IWAC 2014 Presentation Handout

 

Original Quotation:  For the most part, corals are extremely chaste; they reproduce asexually, by
“budding.”  The annual spawning is thus a rare opportunity to, genetically speaking, mis things up. 
Most spawners are hermaphrodites, meaning that a single polyp produces both eggs and sperm, all
wrapped together in a convenient little bundle.  No one knows exactly how corals synchronize their
spawning, but they are believed to respond to both light and temperature (Kolbert 145).

USE LANE’S STRATEGIES How did we change How did we change Did we accidentally
A-E, pg. 1 here, to fill in the language? the structure? change the meaning? 
the language and How? 
structure columns.

Group’s Paraphrase:  We changed The last sentence We removed the

asexual reproducing about the function of theorized spawning
Corals produce offspring
to the actual coral spawning was mechanisms and just
through one individual
description of what moved as a transition mentioned how it is
parent through a process
that mechanism to how they are debated. There is no
called budding. The
entails. Another hermaphrodites.  mention about the
factors that trigger
change in language genetic “mess up.” 
synchronized coral
is “sperm and eggs”
spawning are debated;
to be gametes. 
however, most corals
have all the necessary
gametes to generate
offspring. 

Works Cited

Kolbert, Elizabeth.  The Sixth Extinction:  An Unnatural History.  New York:  Picador, 2014.
Stone, James R. III.  “More than One Way:  The Case for High-Quality CTE.”  American Educator.  Fall
2014:  n. pag.  Web.  30 Oct. 2014.