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APPLICATION: QUARTER 1 MODULE 6
NAME: Ardiente, Kervin John D.
Year/section: 12 ABM – Pounds
Topic: Uses Appropriate Critical Writing a Critique
Directions: Read the poem “Dead Stars” by H.O. Santos. Analyze and critique the poem using either
Formalism, Feminism, Marxism, or Reader-response on your answer sheet (250-300 words).

DEAD STARS
(for Paz Marquez Benitez)
Literary Critique
by H.O. Santos
Reader-Response Criticism
(Type of Criticism)
If I still think of her today
Why didn’t I tell her long ago? Title:
I could have saved all wondering A Comprehensive Reader-
For I’d have peace if I did know. Response Criticism for
Dead Stars by H.O Santos
If I had learned of metaphors
Thesis Statement:
Before I wondered ‘bout the stars
Would I have written verses then?
Dead Stars is a poem that
induces about genuine love,
imprisoned by one’s thoughts
And worshipped Venus instead of Mars?
and painful regrets for his
beloved.
If I had found my tongue could rhyme
Would I have shown a face sans mask?
A heart unsure? But woe is me-
I’ll never know, I didn’t ask.

Source: https://www.sushidog.com/bpss/poems staff/stars2.html

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A Comprehensive Reader-Response Criticism for Dead Stars by H.O Santos
The magnificent poem written by H.O Santos, Dead Stars induces about genuine
love, imprisoned by one’s thoughts and painful regrets for his beloved. It is a poem that
highlights a guy who secretly in loved. Furthermore, his honest love and affection
towards the girl became sincere and genuine. However, he never had a chance and the
guts to tell her about his pure and genuine love.
There is a line in the poem that states, “If I still think of her today. Why didn’t I tell
her long ago?”. I certainly believe that indicates his genuine and profound love for the
girl. However, he doesn’t have the guts to tell and confess his passionate love towards
her. Until, he realized that shutting his mouth was a huge fault and mistake. He should
have confronted or confessed to her and asked if she had the same feelings too because
maybe somehow he had the chance to be loved back. But his fear triumph over his
willpower.
There also a line in the poem that states “I could have saved all wondering, For I’d
have peace if I did know”. Unfortunately, it appears to me that alongside with it there are
a lot of questions and ‘what ifs’ were running on his mind keep on bothering him and
hinders his ability to confront his beloved. Moreover, there is a line in the poem that
states, “And worshipped Venus instead of Mars?”. He also thinks of what he and her
future may be if he didn’t pretend and just let himself devote her like a goddess, tell her
sweet things and show his undying love toward her. It might be a painful scenario for
guy’s part, he is imprisoned within his thoughts and mind.
As I read the poem, I felt a profound connection with the unfortunate guy in the
poem. I truly can relate to him because I personally have low self-confidence. I can’t even
talk to girls about things without being awkward and I never tried to confess my feelings
for special someone, solely because I am afraid of being rejected and my love will not be
reciprocated. I already positioned myself on the same shoe of the guy in the poem.
Nevertheless, through this poem I reflected that sometimes we need to go out and
explore beyond your comfort zone, because there are things worth to try in order to avoid
massive regrets in the future.
Therefore, the poem Dead Stars induces about genuine love, imprisoned by one’s
thoughts and painful regrets for his genuine beloved that also mirrors about people, who
don’t have the guts go out of their comfort zone and also who are imprisoned by their
own thoughts. It teaches a lesson that their things worth to take a shot before it’s too
late.
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Rubric for the Critique
Criterion Outstanding Exceeds Meets Approaching Unacceptable
(5 pts.) Expectations Expectations Expectations (1 pt.)
(4 pts.) (3 pts.) (2 pts.)

Introduction Introduction Introduction Introduction or No

grabs sparks some provides conclusion does introduction
Introduction attention and interest and context for the not flow with the
provides effectively argument but argument of the
meaningful introduces is obvious paper
context to a reasonable and/or basic
persuasive argument
argument

Argument is Thesis Thesis is a Thesis Thesis not

clearly presents a plausible demonstrates evident
articulated reasonable argument; misunderstanding
Thesis and opinion, contains a of the prompt or
persuasive, argument is legitimate text
contains an clear and opinion, but
original focused somewhat
opinion broad and
basic

Topic Topic Topic Topic sentences Topic

sentences sentences sentences are show sentences not
Topic contribute to articulate present and misunderstanding evident
Sentences the highly precise make an or prompt text
and persuasive argument; argument
Transitions nature of the logically connected to
argument linked to the thesis;
thesis however,
ideas are
obvious and
basic

You have Your evidence Evidence is Evidence chosen Little or no

chosen, for is believable present, but does not support evidence
Evidence the most part, and superficial thesis/topic
the best convincing sentences
evidence to and supports
support your your argument
point
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Creative/ Analysis is Analysis Ideas lack Analysis not
Commentary original ideas believable and supports your development; present simply
and insights; convincing , a argument, but misunderstanding plot summary
extensive few assertions ideas are of prompt or text;
commentary, may lack obvious and illogical
refreshing, specific basic argument;
goes beyond examples, but
obvious and assertions are
basic still clearly
commentary connected to
the argument

Sophisticated Effectively Blend quoted Problems with Serious

vocabulary; blends direct material sentence clarity, problems with
Style, sentence quotation with smoothly, but redundancy; coherence and
Vocabulary, variety; explanatory sentence some quotes sentence
Sentence quotations are words and structure lack stand alone; clarity; most
Structure smoothly phrases to variety- basic some vague sentences need
blended introduce the and obvious; sentences; little revision; most
quotation and attempts to use of class quotes stand
facilitate incorporate vocabulary or alone and lack
narrative more sentence variety introduction/
flow; still advanced connection to
attempting vocabulary the paper
advanced
vocabulary

Perfect (or 1 Effective Minor Several Major

or 2 minor punctuation; problems with distracting spelling,
Mechanics errors) close to coherence, problems with grammar,
and perfect grammar, spelling, punctuation
Coherence spelling, grammar, errors;
punctuation, punctuation, distracts and
but does not citations interferes with
interfere with incorrect understanding
the of paper;
understanding citations
of paper nonexistent
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analysis.pdf