Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201

Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth

Outlining
Topic: Public vs private colleges
Topic sentence: When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education,
hundreds of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university.
The differences:
1. Payment.
2. The size of the universities.
3. The admission.
4. The rule.
Concluding sentence: It’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals
and financial demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points
and weak points.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First draft
Public vs private colleges
When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education,
hundred(s) of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university. Since there’s
many answers to this question, let just compare the two popular question(s).
The question of payment is a top priority. When choosing a public university, one can
save a fortune in tuition(s) and fees. A year’s tuition at a private university can be much
higher than the cost of attending a state university. So, if the budget is on low to medium
level, it’s better to attending at the public university. However, in private university, there
are numerous scholarship and financial package(s) that can help people out there, who is
high-archiver.
Admission to state university tends to be easier. State universities are generally much
bigger, and can therefore accept more applicants. At the same time, larger university mean
larger class size. It’s especially true some class can be up to seventy students, which is hard
to study. Unlike state universities, private universities are usually fairly small; that is why
they only take on a limited number of new admissions each year. This fact explains why
private universities often seem so restrictive and why competition to enter private
universities is so high.
It’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals and financial
demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points and weak points.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First Peer Editing Sheet
Comparison Essay Outline

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor: SOUN Pisey
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. Is thesis statement clear? If not, make suggestion for changes.

A: The thesis statement is clear.
2. Does the writer use the block or the point by point method of organization? Is this method
effective for the subject? If not, make suggestion for changes.
A: The writer uses the point by point method od organization. It is effective for the subject.
3. Does each topic sentence clearly state the point of comparison? If not, make suggestions
for improvement.
A: Each topic sentence is clearly state the point of comparison.
4. Do these two subjects have enough similarities and/ or differences for a good comparison
essay? If not, why not?
A: These two subjects are enough similarities and/ or difference for a good comparison
essay.
5. The best part of the outline is
A: The best part of the outline is body part.
6. Question I still have about the outline are
A: I do not have question relate to outline.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First Peer Editing Sheet
Comparison Essay

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor: SOUN Pisey
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. In the few words, what is the essay about?

A: In the few words, the essay about Public vs Private colleges
2. Identify the hook. Is it effective? Make any suggestions here.
A: Identify the hook is When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher
education, hundreds of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university.
It is effective.
3. Does each body paragraph contain a clear topic sentence? If not, underline any sections
that need improvement.
A: Each body paragraph contains a clear topic sentence.
4. What method of organization does the writer use? List the main points that the writer
compares.
A: The writer uses point by point method of organization.
Main important points that the writer compare:
A: Payment.
The size of the universities.
The admission.
The rule.
5. Are the comparisons supported with example? (Ask who? What? What? Where? When?
Why? How? If not, put a star next to the places that need supporting information.
A: The comparison supported with example.

6. Does the writer use connector correctly? If not, circle any incorrect connectors or any
places that need connectors.
A: the writer use connector is correctly.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
7. Does the writer restate the thesis in the conclusion? If not, bring this to the attention of the
writer.
A: The writer does not restate the thesis in the conclusion.

8. In the conclusion, does the writer offer an opinion or suggestion about the two subjects?
Do you agree with the writer’s final words? If not, why not?
A: In the conclusion, the writer offers an opinion about the two subjects. I do not agree with
the writer’s final words because the writer did not use restate in conclusion.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth

Second draft
When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education, hundreds
of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university. Since there’s many
answers to this question, let just compare the two popular question.
The question of payment is a top priority. When choosing a public university, one can
save a fortune in tuition and fees. A year’s tuition at a private university can be much higher
than the cost of attending a state university. So, if the budget is on low to medium level, it’s
better to attending at the public university. However, in private university, there are
numerous scholarship and financial package that can help people out there, who is high-
archiver.
Admission to state university tends to be easier. State universities are generally much
bigger, and can therefore accept more applicants. At the same time, larger university mean
larger class size. It’s especially true some class can be up to seventy students, which is hard
to study. Unlike state universities, private universities are usually fairly small; that is why
they only take on a limited number of new admissions each year. This fact explains why
private universities often seem so restrictive and why competition to enter private
universities is so high.
It’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals and financial
demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points and weak points.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First Peer Editing Sheet
Comparison Essay Outline

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor:
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. Is thesis statement clear? If not, make suggestion for changes.

A: This thesis statement is not clear enough. It will be better if the writer mentions about
environment at colleges however as we already knew that some private universities cost
lower than the public one.
2. Does the writer use the block or the point by point method of organization? Is this method
effective for the subject? If not, make suggestion for changes.
A: I think shouldn’t change, the writer uses point by point method of organization, that
impressive writing one and yes, it’s effective for the subject.
3. Does each topic sentence clearly state the point of comparison? If not, make suggestions
for improvement.
A: Each topic sentence the writer made it clear enough to state the point of comparison.
4. Do these two subjects have enough similarities and/ or differences for a good comparison
essay? If not, why not?
A: These two subjects the writer seems to not mentioned about similarities but it’s good that
the writer compared the differences things between these two subjects so for this comparison
I can’t say that it’s a good comparison because a good comparison is about comparing both
similarities and differences.
5. The best part of the outline is
A: the best part of outline is body part
6. Question I still have about the outline are
A: due to this sentence provided an ideal with support whole of writing.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
Comparison Essay

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor:
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. In the few words, what is the essay about?

A: public vs private colleges
2. Identify the hook. Is it effective? Make any suggestions here.
A: When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education, hundreds of
students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university.
3. Does each body paragraph contain a clear topic sentence? If not, underline any sections
that need improvement.
A: yes, and so attractive for reading and clearly in whole essay.
4. What method of organization does the writer use? List the main points that the writer
compares.
A: the writer uses point by point method
Main important points that the writer compare:
A: A, Payment
B, The size of the universities
C, The admission
D, The rule
5. Are the comparisons supported with example? (Ask who? What? What? Where? When?
Why? How? If not, put a star next to the places that need supporting information.
A: No, the writer does not use any example.

6. Does the writer use connector correctly? If not, circle any incorrect connectors or any
places that need connectors.
A: Yes, the writer use connector correctly.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
7. Does the writer restate the thesis in the conclusion? If not, bring this to the attention of the
writer.
A: the writer restates the thesis in the conclusion.

8. In the conclusion, does the writer offer an opinion or suggestion about the two subjects?
Do you agree with the writer’s final words? If not, why not?
A: Yes, the writer offers an opinion or suggestion about the two subjects. I agree with the
writer’s final words.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
Final draft
When it comes to the moment to enter university and get to the higher education,
hundreds of students face a dilemma; Public university or private university. Since there’s
many answers to this question, let just compare the two popular question.
The question of payment is a top priority. When choosing a public university, one can
save a fortune in tuition and fees. A year’s tuition at a private university can be much higher
than the cost of attending a state university. So, if the budget is on low or medium level, it’s
better to attending at the public university. However, in private university, there are
numerous scholarship and financial package that can help people out there, who is high-
archiver and want to attend at private university.
Admission to state university tends to be easier. State universities are generally much
bigger, and can therefore accept more applicants. At the same time, larger university mean
larger class size. For example, in some class in state universities, the quantity of student up
to seventy students. According to nowadays experience, a state university of doctor has the
quantity up to two hundred students for foundation year, which is hard to study. Unlike state
universities, private universities are usually fairly small; that is why they only take on a
limited number of new admissions each year. This fact explains why private universities
often seem so restrictive and why competition to enter private universities is so high.
Apart from studies, each university pays attention to creating a student community by
means of extracurricular activities. Some private universities do have the activities are
slightly higher than the state universities. Additionally, the higher quantity of activities does
not put the advantage for private universities. Indeed, students don’t seem to pay their
attention much to this point.
Briefly, it’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals and
financial demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points and
weak points.