Paragraph Practice

Instructions: The paragraphs below have several types of mistakes. Correct them and rewrite
the paragraph. Improve any of the sentences that can be improved (hook, topic sentence,
supporting sentences, concluding sentence). Include indentation. You will show your corrected
paragraphs to the rest of the class, later on.

Paragraph 1
My university is beautiful and has a large lake and two small ponds on the campus. The lake is
round in shape and the ponds are square, but one pond has a large fountain and there is a
garden around it that has three rose bushes and two large magnolia trees that smell wonderful!
There is a seating area for students next to the lake that has a hard bench and many very soft
and comfortable chairs. There is a large and brown covered area that is to protect the students
from the sun and the rain, and the campus also has a very large grassy area that is soft and
green. The beautiful lake, ponds, and grassy area are where
the students like to study and spend time with their friends.
- Topic sentence.
- Supporting sentence 1.
- Supporting sentence 2.
- Supporting sentence 3.
- Concluding sentence.

Paragraph 2
There are many reason why insects are so successful at
surviving. Their ability to adapt allows them to live in extreme temperatures and environments.
An insect can eat a wide range of naturals and artificial foods that include paints, pepper, glue
book, grain, cotton, other insects, plants and animals. They can hide in tiny spaces because
they are small, and a strong, hard, but flexible shell called “exoskeleton”, covers their soft
organs while it also protects them from chemicals water and physical impact. Their wings allow
them to fly away from any dangerous situation, but they can
also be used to get food or even a mate.
- Topic sentence.
- Supporting sentence 1.
- Supporting sentence 2.
- Supporting sentence 3.
- Concluding sentence.

Paragraph 3
There are some very important things that children need to keep in mind when they are on a
computer at home or at school. First, they should never give out personal information such as
their name, address, school or telephone number. Also, they should never send a picture of
themselves to someone they chat with on the computer without their parents permission, nor
should they write to someone who has made them feel uncomfortable or scared. Aditionally,
they should not meet someone or have them visit them without the permission of their parents.
The problem is that people sometimes misrepresent
themselves on the internet.
- Topic sentence.
- Supporting sentence 1.
- Supporting sentence 2.
- Supporting sentence 3.
- Concluding sentence.
Paragraph 4
Pharmacists sell medicine to people who are sick when doctor says that they need it. They tell
people how to use the medicine correctly, though sometimes they mix it themselves most often.
They sell medicines that have been made for them, and usually work in clean drug stores that
have a lot of light. Many of them stand while they work and often wear gloves and masks when
working with things that could hurt them. Some pharmacists
work at night or on weekends because sick people may
need medicine at any time.
- Topic sentence.
- Supporting sentence 1.
- Supporting sentence 2.
- Supporting sentence 3.
- Concluding sentence.