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Nguyễn Hoàng Anh Trúc - 16E24
Topic: To what extent do you agree with the statement: ‘’School is bad for
children?’.
FINAL VERSION
Lastly, parents send their children to school with a belief that it is where
children can learn best. With interrelationship with teachers and friends, they
are more willing to participate in study (Simovska, 2004). In contrast, spending
more time at school does not always motivate students to engage in their
study but causes serious psychological damage (Gray, 2013). Education method
currently adopted is only well designed for indoctrination and obedience
training system of school which constrains children’s intellectual development
(Holt, 2005). A number of the world’s greatest scientists and innovators left
school from an early age. For example, Thomas Edison left school only after a
few months and was taught by his mother as well as self-studied through
reading books. At school, children have to hide their curiosity, listen to
teacher’s guide, have no chance to find out who they are and accept the
adults’ evaluation of them (Holt, 2005). Being corrected repeatedly, children
also get lose faith in their ability. Consequently, they cannot trust themselves
and become passive learners (Holt, 2005) which cause many young people try
to seek awareness of the world and responsiveness to it with drugs.
Medicating to surmount the obstacles of school depletes their aspiration of
figuring out who they were really meant to be.
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activity strategy for children complicit mass child neglect?. British Journal of Sports
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3. O. Leavitt, M. (2008). Physical Activity Guidelines for Americans. Centers For Disease
Control And Prevention, 18.
4. de Ro´iste, A., Kelly, C., Molcho, M., Gavin, A., & Nic Gabhainn, S. (2011). Is school
participation good for children?. Health Promotion Research Centre, 12.
5. Gray, P. (2013). Free to Learn: Why Unleashing the Instinct to Play Will Make Our
Children Happier, More Self-Reliant, and Better Students for Life (p. 5). Basic Books.
6. Levy, S. (2017). Is Too Much Homework Bad for Kids' Health?. Retrieved from
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Name of Writer: Nguyen Hoang Anh Truc Name of Partner: Phan Thi Loan
Introductory paragraph
2. Is the motive for the essay clear? x x However, to date, the most
cherished institution(school)
has been exerting destructive
effects on children’s mental,
physical and intellectual
development rather than
remarkable impacts as the
human race expected.
3. Does the thesis have a clear position? x x However, to date, the most
cherished institution(school)
has been exerting destructive
effects...
Body paragraphs
5. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence x x - However, other study shows
which explains the thesis of the that these factors are also
paragraph? worsening their mental health.
Concluding paragraph
11. Is there an effective final thought? x x There are still various common
denominators of people who
have been responsible for their
life and successfully pursuing
happiness without any
compulsory schooling process.
Language
10. Is information from outside sources cited x - they cannot trust themselves
properly? and become passive learners
(Holt, 2005)