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Computer games are very popular for all ages and nationalities. Parents think this has little educational value and it will be
harmful for children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays IT technologies are rapidly developing. Such aspect as computer games also are no exemption. Especially often
young people prefer digital entertainments to traditional ways. The statement about intellectual uselessness of computer
games is really controversial. Honestly, I believe that such games have a lot of significant advantages.

Some years ago children and also teenagers spent more time out of apartments. As a consequence they have a lot of friends
and familiars, they were more physically fit and maybe also happier then now. Presently the young generation more prefer
online meetings and games. They were swallowed up by the digital world and this fact has destroyed influence on their mind
and fit too. For instance, on the market a lot of really awful and dangerous game products. Violence in computer games is one
of the main reasons of phycological problems of teens.

Nevertheless, the young people who are interested in virtual games and reality have some important skills. For example,
usually such people have an excellent and so fast reaction on actions around. Gamers also have a good online communication
experience. Moreover, it is not only way for spending your free time but also kind of sport. Cyber sportsmen have a really
good wage and future perspectives for their career in IT area.

In general, we cannot say that computer games are useless for developing of children’s personality. Besides, we live in the age
of technological progress and game industry is one of parts of the process. From my point of view, parents have to help their
young gamers to minimize negative impact of virtual world on their unstable minds.

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