Band 7 IELTS essay sample

{School provides a student’s first exposure to the outside world and

knowledge acquired at school} has a huge impact on a child’s development.
There are conflicting views on whether private schools should receive
government funding just like government schools.

I strongly disagree with this view and this essay will discuss with valid
arguments as to why government funding is not required for private schools.
Private schools are known to have better infrastructure, better future
opportunities and well trained teachers [which in turn leads to better standard
of education compared to state or government schools.] To provide all these
facilities, they have higher fees structure [which only a certain group of
population can afford]. For example, CEOs of multinational companies can
certainly afford spending on their child’s education and so can celebrities. This
enables children of financially sound parents to receive good education [which
makes them more successful in future].

On the flip side, government or state schools have to rely on/найдах/

government funding for their day to day operations [as they provide basic
educational qualification to all people at bare minimum or no cost at all]. For
example, children of labour class have to rely on state schools if they want to
learn. In my opinion, instead of funding private schools, the government
should increase funds provided to state schools so that they can appoint
better qualified teachers and better facilities. {There should be no
disparity/ялгаа/ between standard of education} and {people from all
socioeconomic classes can receive education of the same standard}.

To sum it up, private schools can function/үйл ажиллагаагаа явуулах/

without government funding [as=because they charge a fee for providing
education]. Government schools, on the other hand/нөгөөтэйгүүр/, provide
free education and depend on government funding.
Band 7.5 IELTS essay sample
Although there are public schools which are completely funded by the
government, private schools are not supported by the government and have
hefty fee structure. In my opinion, private schools ought to be funded by the
government too. This will be highly beneficial for those children who are not
able to afford to study in the private schools.

Firstly, by providing financial aid to the private schools, the government can
make sure {that there are some seats available for those students who have
weak financial background}. This will bring equality within the society and
[poor families [who are not able to afford] will not be left behind]. This will be a
positive step for a developing society and nation.

Secondly, it is seen that in many countries such as India public schools have
poor infrastructure, while private schools have far better facilities. Hence, if the
government provides financial support to such privately owned schools, poor
families too will be able to send their offspring to private schools and they will
also be able to use the same infrastructure. A better infrastructure is
indispensable for a better future and growth. Moreover, it can be seen that
children from privileged backgrounds know better about the technologies and
study options, and hence through regular interaction with such students, poor
students can also learn a lot more.

To conclude, if the government funds private schools, poor students will be

able to enroll in them and that will be hugely beneficial for the society.

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