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Today is the coronation of King Macbeth and Queen Lady Macbeth, As i get ready to set
off to the castle. As this is a big day for everyone since the last king has passed, we have been
waiting for news of a new king and we finally know. The Thane of Cawdor is picking up the role.
It is going to be a long way to the castle. So I set off as I walked through the village and saw
many people getting ready to leave so we all came together to talk about the current news
spreading of our new king as we made our way to the castle. And as we come upon the castle
we see it strut up over the rocks, These impenetrable walls and we are being allowed in to
appraise our new king and queen. The castle is beautiful. It peaks over the rocks, you can say it
reaches the heavens. It was crafted with the utmost care. As if it was crafted by god-hands, as
all the others began to enter the castle we see gorgeous wooden long tables, with tea plates,
and wonderful Handcrafted silverware, and the beautiful hand sewn curtains are drawn open so
we can gaze upon the view that we all were so graciously invited to see. And as all of us
commoners soon began to talk and catch up and talk about the amazing scenery we were
blessed to gaze upon. The room suddenly goes quiet. We soon hear a door open, King
Macbeth and Queen Lady Macbeth enter the room. The king is in his ceremonial garments a
beautiful kilt with a royal blue that fills me with a sense of royalty and makes me gasp as I see
the accessories on his garments a beautiful gold sewn in between, And lady macbeth in a blue
silk gown she was like a ghost moving through the crowds greeting everyone. There is a
presence here that wasn’t, It feels off. The king doesn't seem too fond of his new roles, and the
Queen keeps checking her surroundings. And soon we are all seated, and the coronation
begins, and at the head of the room is sat the king and queen, and through Lady Macbeth’s
speech we see the king turn to his left and begin talking to a chair as if someone is there.
Everyone seems to notice except the queen. Almost as if she is ignoring it. I ask my peers if this
is a normal occasion, And as the room began to crawl with voices, As a whisper from one end
finally reached me that, Lady macbeth requested that we all act normal as Macbeth has
occasional visions, and to ignore his irrational behavior as it happens, But as dinner soon began
to pregrese I am unable to avoid the strange behavior coming from Macbeth he has been
talking to himself, and just seems he isn’t here. But I can see him he is there, as if he has lost
his way he is not himself something is wrong, and on every strange thing to happen tonight you
would believe Banquo would show up to a Coronation, And Macbeth it almost seems he is
becoming more insane throughout the night, But Lady Macbeth reassures everyone that this is
normal behavior, at this point me and the others just want to make it through dinner, And the
room of the coronation has slowly fell from excitement to, Feeling uncomfortable with spurts of
the Kings weird behavior, And as dinner soon comes to an end he has been talking to someone
who is not there all night so we came to the assumption that he is talking to a ghost, certainly
Macbeth has lost his mind, And unable to comprehend what has already happened tonight, As
the room suddenly goes quiet we all look to the front of the room Macbeth's face is as pale as
the dim as the moon’s glow, it was almost as if he actually saw a ghost, He begins to act
sporadic, and starts yelling at the people in the coronation whoever casted this witchcraft upon
him to remove this spell, and that it was torture but soon the room turns into panic, We dont
know what is happening and the Queen seems to not know either, This behaivior does not
seem to happen occasionally, he is new. This has never happened in public, Something
changed tonight, The Queen soon ends the coronation abruptly as she tries to calm down
Macbeth, he is staring down at his hands chanting something but I am being pushed by
everyone behind me further and further away from the current issue at hand as everyone is
running from the castle. And all I can see is him wiping his hands on a washcloth as if there is
something on his hands but I can see there is nothing he has surely lost his mind or what was
left of it. And as we are all outside of the castle we hear bloodcurdling yelling from the queen
that what has been done can not be reversed, the blood is now on his hands and will never be
washed away. And soon leaves everyone outside the castle worried. It was time to soon return
home and the Queen soon greeted everyone at the gate and apologized and I was able to get a
peek through the castle doors, Macbeth was on his knees rubbing his eyes as if he had
witnessed something. But the queen reassured us again that this was his normal behavior and
asked us all to return home.

Reflection 1: Name the two people who reviewed your draft and discuss in a minimum of five
sentences how their feedback helped you improve your writing. Two people who reviewed my writing
was my mother and my sister, They helped me revise in the way with more detail and punctuation.

Reflection 2: Compare your first draft and your final draft side-by-side. Discuss in at least five
sentences the changes you made and why your final draft is an improvement over your first draft.
The way I can compare this final revision to the first is the way that it flows a little more, and a couple
sentences that I changed were ones that didn’t sound right in the places they were in. So i had
moved them around, so it would flow better.