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First and foremost, it is commonly seen that people are becoming fragemented as to
the frequent appearance of social networking sites in their daily life. Day-off are
spent on surfing the newsfeed of Facebook or Instagram instead of reading books or
taking part in social activities. This has led to a series of consequence on both of their
physical and mental health. Moreover, family life is also tremendously affected as
social networks interfere with their bonding activities on a daily basis. However, this
detorioration tends to grow dim in our lives since, figuratively speaking, the distance
amongst human beings is expanding and we hardly care about anything esle but our
Facebook or Instagram profile.
Second, social networks are inadvertently creating an environment for the abuse of
the cyber world. One of the problems that has arouse is cyber bullying. It occurs
when a social network user is attacked through electronic forms of contact by the
anonymous or unrelated. This is becoming increasingly common, especially among
teenagers, which has been for the past 5 years raised the warning to the society of a
decaying moral standard as well as the mismanagement of social network. Other
serious social issues that has been damaging the development of the community
includes false information, digital child abuse, hacking and so on,... can spring from
and be spread by social networks. The users are the most likely victim of the spread
of these issues.
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