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Introduction
The paragraph is one of the key structural elements in most forms of writing. Like a building block, it is
usually one of many which, put together, form the whole. Yet it is also an entity in itself, with its own internal
structure.
A well written paragraph will convey your ideas, the relationships between them, and your line of reasoning
clearly, while a poorly structured paragraph can obscure your meaning and confuse your reader.
This tutorial introduces the elements of a paragraph and shows how they contribute to the construction of a
coherent piece of writing.
Paragraph purpose
Paragraph structure
Topic sentences
Supporting sentences
Paragraph cohesion
Concluding sentences
Paragraph purpose
In any essay or assignment you are likely to have several points to make or ideas to discuss. You will both
present information and explain how your thinking developed to reach a particular conclusion. Paragraphs
are used to organise this information so that your reader can easily follow your thought processes and the
relationship of one topic to another.
Each paragraph therefore has a specific function within the overall aim of the piece of writing. It may serve to
describe a topic, explain a concept, analyse findings, support or refute a contention, qualify a claim, evaluate
a study, compare or contrast information.
When that purpose has been achieved and you move on to your next point, you generally begin a new
paragraph.
Activity
Read the following paragraphs and Identify the key purpose of each from the options given.
Paragraph 1
Rococo was a style of art that followed on from the Baroque period in the early
eighteenth century. The artists of this style typically depicted themes of "love,
artfully and archly pursued through erotic frivolity and playful intrigue".1 Both the
art and interior design of the time displayed a sense of rhythm in which
"everything seemed organic, growing, and in motion, an ultimate refinement of
illusion".2
Support a claim
Describe a topic
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Paragraph structure
Play the video below to learn about paragraph structure.
Building a paragraph
Tip
Just as with a burger, you need the 'buns' (the topic and concluding sentences) of your paragraph
to hold it together. You also need 'fillings' (supporting sentences) to develop the theme. But be
careful; if you fill your paragraph with too many 'fillings' it may fall apart.
Most academic writing is structured in paragraphs. Paragraphs break up what could otherwise be very dense
text, which is tiring to read, but their main function is to help the reader follow the development of ideas.
You were probably taught that a paragraph should contain one main idea, and that you should begin each
new or contrasting idea in a new paragraph. This is a good rule of thumb, but it is not always straightforward
to apply.
The following paragraph is from a student teacher’s reflection on her observations during a teaching
placement.
I noticed that when poorer students worked in groups they seemed to be more
enthusiastic and willing to contribute to finding a solution to the maths questions. In
contrast, when they worked alone, they needed much encouragement. One student
frequently turned to me for help, and was reluctant for me to leave her. She would
ask me to give her the answers, rather than show her how to work through the
problem. The confidence a student feels can be understood in terms of 'locus of
control'. According to Rotter (1966) motivation is increased when a person has an
'internal locus of control', that is, when the person perceives outcomes to be a result
of their own abilities. However, he argues that when a person feels that outcomes
are a result of external forces, or experiences an 'external locus of control', they will
be less motivated. When working in groups, these students demonstrated an
'internal locus of control'. They were more willing to try and work through maths
concepts in order to contribute when working in groups. They developed an
understanding of maths concepts more easily and readily than when working alone.
Good teaching then involves creating conditions where students can develop this
'internal locus of control'.
In one way, this paragraph works because it is all about the writer’s reflection on her observation; the
students’ behaviour, the relevant theory, and the conclusion she drew. However, it could also have been
presented like this:
Paragraph length
Whenever you feel you have ‘completed’ a point, begin a new paragraph.
If a paragraph fills most of the length of an A4 page it is likely covering more than one key
point, and should be broken up. Look for a suitable place to create a break, such as a shift
to a another aspect of the topic. If you really can’t find one, leave it as it is.
In academic writing you may have the occasional very short paragraph, but if you have
several in a row, you probably need to restructure your assignment.
Activity
The following paragraph is from an essay comparing and contrasting two eighteenth century
artistic periods. Identify where a paragraph break is needed.
Click the number after the sentence where you think the paragraph break should
be.
The Rococo style of art typically depicted themes of " love , artfully and archly
pursued through erotic frivolity and playful intrigue ". [ 1 ] Both the art and interior
design of the time displayed a sense of rhythm in which "[ e]verything seemed
organic , growing , and in motion , an ultimate refinement of illusion ". [ 2 ] The artists
of this period were also starting to express their feelings about the themes of
their work , with some works edging toward the ideals of Romanticism , which
flourished at the other end of the century . [ 3 ] The Romantic style was a revolt
against the sober restraint of the Enlightenment period that had preceded it . [ 4 ] It
encompassed the " desire for freedom - not only political freedom but also
freedom of thought , of feeling , of action , of worship , of speech and of taste ”. [ 5 ]
Artists wanted only to produce pure , truthful art that was " based on the
predominance of feeling and imagination ."
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Topic sentences
The topic sentence is like a mini introduction: it tells the reader what the paragraph is about. In academic
writing it is usually, though not always, the first sentence.
B. While gold is well-known for its decorative functions, it also has a range of
industrial uses.
It is clear that ‘gold’ is the topic of both paragraphs. After reading sentence A we might expect the paragraph
to review the history of gold as a decorative metal. After reading sentence B, we would expect to learn about
its industrial uses.
In long pieces of writing topic sentences can be quite complex as they also play a role in marking the
transition from one aspect of a topic to another, or even to a completely new topic.
introduces a
Jessop et al (2014), however, do not agree that such behaviour
contrasting
is related to trauma. view
Topic sentences Purposes
introduces
Similarly, residents at a rural aged care facility also found that
supporting
their concerns were taken more seriously when meetings evidence
with management were conducted formally.
marks the
The 25 participants who had given negative feedback were
move to the
then asked to reflect on what they themselves would have next step in a
done differently given another opportunity. process
narrows the
Biofiltration is increasingly being used to reduce nutrients in
topic
urban stormwater discharge to receiving waters.
A quick reading of the topic sentence of each paragraph should reveal the gist of the whole assignment.
Activity
Below are the topic sentences from a first year Criminology essay. Read them in order then
answer the question below.
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English readers expect to discover the point of a piece of writing soon after they begin reading. This is true
also of paragraphs within a longer piece of writing. The topic sentence is therefore usually the first sentence
in a paragraph.
While there can be exceptions, for example, when the first sentence has a linking function, the topic sentence
should always appear near the beginning, particularly in academic writing.
Now that you have seen what a topic sentence looks like, locate the topic sentences in the following
paragraphs.
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Supporting sentences
Supporting sentences develop or elaborate on the point introduced in the topic sentence. They can perform a
variety of different functions, depending on the purpose of the paragraph. Click on the headings below to
learn more.
Analyse
The paragraph provides evidence to show how you have arrived at the claim made in the topic sentence.
Concur
The paragraph explains why you agree with another scholar’s idea.
Define
The paragraph defines a key term or concept introduced in the topic sentence.
Describe
The paragraph builds up a detailed picture of the topic (concept, object, process, phenomenon, location
etc).
Evaluate
The paragraph assesses the strengths and weaknesses of a claim, argument, hypothesis or method.
Explain
The paragraph may explain the topic in detail or provide the reasons for a claim.
Negate or refute
The paragraph argues that another scholar’s idea, or a previously held belief, is incorrect.
Qualify
The paragraph indicates the scope of a claim or limitations to the evidence for it.
Summarise
The paragraph below describes and explains a type of behaviour observed by an education student on a
teaching placement.
The writer:
Activity
Read the paragraph. Click on the supporting sentences that describe the students’
behaviour.
Sentences found: 0 of 4
Task 2
Activity
This time click on the supporting sentences that explain concepts from the literature.
Activity
This time, click on the supporting sentences that analyse the students’ behaviour with
reference to the literature.
Sentences found: 0 of 3
Conclusion
I noticed that when poorer students worked in groups they seemed to be more
enthusiastic and willing to contribute to finding a solution to the maths
questions. In contrast, when they worked alone, they needed much
encouragement. One student frequently turned to me for help, and was
reluctant for me to leave her. She would ask me to give her the answers, rather
than show her how to work through the problem. The confidence a student
feels can be understood in terms of 'locus of control'. According to Rotter (1966)
motivation is increased when a person has an 'internal locus of control', that is,
when the person perceives outcomes to be a result of their own abilities.
However, he argues that when a person feels that outcomes are a result of
external forces, or experiences an 'external locus of control', they will be less
motivated. When working in groups, these students demonstrated an 'internal
locus of control'. They were more willing to try and work through maths
concepts in order to contribute when working in groups. They developed an
understanding of maths concepts more easily and readily than when working
alone. Good teaching then involves creating conditions where students can
develop this 'internal locus of control'.
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If you are writing about observed experiment results, you might need to:
1 Read the paragraph and click on the supporting sentences that attempt to explain the
outcome of the experiment.
2 Read the paragraph again and click on the supporting sentences that qualify the claims
made.
It was expected that our study would show a far higher rate of
decomposition in the shore zone, where there are more chances for
sediments to rub against the leaves. However the two zones show no
significant difference in leaf breakdown, although these results are non-
conclusive due to the limitations of this experiment. The two zones of leaf
decomposition were physically too close and over the incubation period,
reeds were observed growing close to the limnetic zone. This may have
negatively affected the accuracy of the results by reducing the differences
in habitat at these sites as seen in other experiments (Jones et al. 1981).
Our results also had large standard deviations, possibly due to these
physical constraints or human error in weighing leaves. Further studies
with more diverse zones and precise procedures should be undertaken in
order to explore leaf decomposition and rates of energy transfer more
effectively.
Tip
How does this sentence contribute to the purpose of the paragraph as stated in the topic sentence?
If you cannot answer this question, you may have digressed from the point of the paragraph.
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Paragraph cohesion
The cohesion of a paragraph depends largely on the order in which the ideas are presented. This is especially
true in introductory paragraphs, which should begin with the broadest statement about the topic and narrow
to the specific topic to be addressed. Look at this paragraph, which introduces an essay on the potential of
garlic to treat cancer. Can you identify the topic sentence?
Garlic has been shown to reduce the risk of cardiovascular disease (Aboul-Enein
and Aboul-Enein, 2005), and possess anti-microbial (Sivam, 2001) and antioxidant
properties (Imai et al., 1994). This essay will explore research into garlic's potential
roles in reducing cancer risk and in treating cancer. Garlic (Allium sativum L.) has
been used for centuries for medicinal purposes. Its use for healing purposes can be
traced back as far as 1550BC when documentations of its therapeutic use first
appear in Egypt (Hassan, 2003; Rivlin, 2001). In modern times belief in the beneficial
effects of garlic on health has led to it being used for a number of conditions.
Activity
The topic sentence has now been placed at the beginning of the paragraph (sentence 1).
Rearrange the order of the other sentences to improve the cohesion of the paragraph. Drag and
drop each sentence into position.
Hint: Make sure the paragraphs flow from general to specific, and distant to recent.
Sentence 1
Garlic (Allium sativum L.) has been used for
centuries for medicinal purposes.
Sentence 2
Sentence 4
Sentence 5
Check
Just as the connection between the topic sentence and the supporting sentences in a paragraph must be
clear, so must the connections between the sentences themselves be clear. Otherwise the paragraph can
appear disjointed or even incoherent.
Repetition
One way a writer can link sentences in a paragraph is by simply repeating a keyword, but it is important
not to use this device too often.
Writers often make links between sentences in a paragraph by replacing the repeated use of the main
noun with pronouns such as 'it'.
Synonyms
Another technique is to use words with similar meanings (synonyms) in the paragraph. This is a way of
making links between sentences without using too much repetition.
Connected words
To make connections between sentences words do not have to be exact synonyms. Sometimes a writer
will use words which belong together.
Signposting
Signposts such as 'for example', 'however' or 'alternatively' indicate the meaning relationship between (or
within) sentences. They tell the reader how to interpret the information presented.
Activity
Click on the linking methods listed to see examples of how they are used to maintain cohesion in
this paragraph.
Check your own paragraphs. Does each sentence support the purpose of the paragraph as expressed in the
topic sentence? Does the paragraph flow logically and coherently?
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Concluding sentence
Not every paragraph needs a concluding sentence. When used, concluding sentences indicate that the topic -
or an aspect of the topic - is complete. They can do this by performing one of the following functions:
There is usually a variety of ways to conclude a paragraph. Your choice will depend on what you want the
concluding sentence to do - its function.
Here is a paragraph with three possible concluding sentences, each of which performs a different function.
Despite the wide availability of information on the harmful effects of alcohol on the
developing foetus, many western women continue to drink even after learning that
they are pregnant. In the USA, approximately 7.6% of pregnant women admitted to
drinking during pregnancy [12], while in Canada, approximately 15% of pregnant
women consume alcohol [13]. French figures show that up to 47% of women drank
alcohol while pregnant [14], and similar results have been seen in Australia [15].
Drawing a
These figures suggest that factors other than knowledge are at
conclusion
play.
Summing up
While the proportions of women drinking during pregnancy
vary widely from country to country, this is clearly not an
isolated phenomenon.
Transitioning
However, the situation is noticeably different in Asia.
to next topic
The relationship between the concluding sentence and the topic sentence should always be clear. If you
cannot trace the development of the theme between them, you may have digressed from the original purpose
of the paragraph.
Activity
When a concluding sentence performs a linking function, it is important to ensure that it creates
a semantic link to each of the paragraphs it connects. Look at the paragraph below. Which of the
two concluding sentence options forms the better link to the next paragraph, which is about
media influence in remote areas?
It cannot be doubted that the media profoundly influence people's attitudes and
outlooks. They convey a wide variety of information which individuals would
likely not otherwise acquire. Newspapers, books, television, radio, films, recorded
music and magazines bring individuals into close contact with experiences of
which we 'would otherwise have little awareness' (Giddens, 1989, p. 79).
There are very few societies nowadays, even among isolated or traditional cultures,
which remain untouched by the mass media.
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Paragraph structure is important in ensuring that your meaning and thought processes are clear to the
reader. The topic sentence introduces your point, the supporting sentences develop the point by providing
evidence, explanation or examples, and the concluding sentence, where used, helps connect your point to
your overall argument. Every sentence should serve a clear purpose in relation to the topic sentence.
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At university it is important to convey your meaning with absolute clarity, in a way that will be understood by
any reader, regardless of whether or not English is their first language. This tutorial will explore how to write
clearly, concisely and precisely. It will also look at how your choice of tense impacts on your meaning.
Writing clearly
Writing concisely
Writing precisely
As you go through, there will be places where you can click to reveal more information as well as undertake
activities to check your understanding.
However, we need to look to the middle east to find the building’s precedents; i.e. the buildings that have
influenced its design.
The employees suffer from a lack of motivation. Motivation is the willingness to exert high levels of effort to
reach organisational goals, conditioned by the efforts to satisfy some individual need (Robbins, Bergman,
Stagg and Coulter, 2000, p.549).
Don’t leave your reader wondering what you are talking about.
Define abbreviations
Acronyms (the initial letters of a phrase or title and pronounced as a word (e.g. TAFE) and initialisms
(when the first letters of each word are spelled out (e.g. ECG) should always be defined at the first use.
When the term is first used write it in full followed by the abbreviation in round brackets. Thereafter, use
the abbreviation. For example:
The World Health Organisation (WHO) is affiliated with the United Nations (UN). The UN provides funds
which help the WHO perform its role effectively.
Example:
The manager is deficient in interpersonal skills and invests minimal time in assisting the clerks to develop
their expertise.
The manager lacks interpersonal skills and spends little time helping the clerks develop their skills.
Generally, the active voice, in which the subject carries out the action, is ‘lighter’ than the passive voice, in
which the subject is affected by the action.
Passive: Coral reefs can be damaged by rapid and substantial climatic changes.
Active: Rapid and substantial climatic changes can damage coral reefs.
Although the difference is small, the variation in emphasis changes the perspective of the sentence. In
the passive construction, the focus is on the reefs, while in the active version climatic changes are the
focus. You need to keep this in mind when choosing between active and passive voices.
When the actor is unknown or not important: For example: The proposal was approved; The novel
Jane Eyre has been taught in many classrooms.
To avoid naming the actor: Sometimes it is tactful to avoid naming the actor. For example: The
results of this study have been misinterpreted is less confronting than: The authors of this study
have misinterpreted their results.
Sometimes we inadvertently write sentences that can be interpreted in more than one way. Look at this
excerpt from an essay on the Fourth Crusade:
The Crusaders planned to sail to Jerusalem via Egypt. However, during a sojourn in Venice, the Byzantine
Emperor persuaded them to turn their attention to Constantinople.
Read the following pairs of text. Click on the clearer text of each pair.
B. Extra-solar planet systems can be formed in two ways; the first is when a
terrestrial mass planet forms in the inner disk, while a gas giant forms beyond
the snow line, causing the terrestrial planet to be captured in a mean motion
resonance during the inward migration of the gas giant where it remains until
migration ceases. Alternatively, a gas giant can migrate through a disk of
l ti l lti i ti ith th i t
planetismals, resulting in mean motion resonances with the gas giant
sweeping through the disk of planetismals, causing material to be either
scattered out of the system or captured into these resonances.
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Activity
Try applying the strategies presented in this module to your own writing. Re-read a current or
past assignment and highlight the parts that could be rewritten more clearly.
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While this can take time, it will give your writing more impact - and also help you stay within the assignment
word limit. Click on the headings below to learn more.
Stay on topic
As you revise your work, check that the content of each sentence is both relevant and necessary. Ask
yourself, ‘How does this information contribute to the development of the paragraph as expressed in the
topic sentence?’ If it does not serve a useful purpose, or adds unnecessary detail, remove it.
Avoid wordy verbs
Be careful with verbs such as conduct, perform, carry out, undertake or complete followed by a noun. They
are often unnecessary. For example:
Many verbs also have a noun form. A common mistake is to use the noun form too frequently. This can
make your writing sound heavy. For example: Regular reviews of online content should be scheduled. In
this case, the verb ‘review’ has been nominalised (made into a noun) so an extra verb ‘schedule’ is
needed.
Alternatives:
Expletive constructions do not involve swearing (which you should not include in academic writing
either). In English grammar, they refer to sentences which begin with It is or There is. These
constructions are often used where they are not needed. For example:
There were two key tasks in the first part of the project. These were the design of the test rigs and selection
of the variables to be tested.
The first part of the project comprised two key tasks: the design of the test rigs and selection of the
variables to be tested.
'factor to consider':
A. One important factor to consider is the age at which language instruction begins.
A. The novel is preoccupied with matters such as post-colonial society and its mores, race, madness,
and family relationships.
B. The novel is preoccupied with post-colonial society and its mores, race, madness, and family
relationships.
A. In the event that dividends continue to fall, it will be necessary to reduce staff numbers.
A prepositional phrase adds description to a noun through the use of a preposition, usually “of.” For
example:
The opinion of the working group was that the budget for the project had been set too low.
Such constructions add to wordiness and can be confusing if too many appear close together. They can
usually be simplified using possessives or adjectives.
Example:
The working group’s opinion was that the project budget had been set too low.
Sometimes we use two words or phrases that say the same thing, or repeat the same information
unnecessarily. Look at this paragraph from the introduction to an Engineering site visit report.
The Key River Water Treatment Plant (KRWTP) is a state of the art facility that recycles most of the
domestic waste water produced in the area and treats the remainder before it is pumped into the sea. There
are three steps in the plant’s treatment process. Firstly, the primary solids are removed using dissolved air
floatation, clarification and sedimentation. After these large solids are removed, the water undergoes
primary filtration before second filtration using a median filter, and last of all it is disinfected using chlorine.
The plant processes 20,000 tonnes of domestic wastewater per year. Based on an average daily usage of
155L per person by the local population of 25,000, this is more than more than 3.8 million L/day from
domestic sources. Of this, on average 78% is able to be recycled. The extracted waste is disposed of at the
local landfill.
The Key River Water Treatment Plant (KRWTP) is a state of the art facility which processes 20,000 tonnes of
domestic wastewater per year. Based on an average daily usage of 155L per person by the local population
of 25,000, this is more than 3.8 million L/day. Of this,78% is recycled and the remainder is treated before
being pumped into the sea. The treatment process has three steps. First, primary solids are removed using
dissolved air floatation, clarification and sedimentation. The water then undergoes two filtration stages, and
finally chlorine disinfection. The extracted waste goes to the local landfill.
Activity
On each screen you will see two versions of the same text. For each pair, select the version that
is written more concisely.
From an Education student’s classroom placement reflection:
A. I was concerned. I spoke with the classroom teacher, suggesting that perhaps
many of the children placed too great an importance on winning the game
rather than on answering the questions correctly. This concern stemmed from
my observation of the classroom where I noticed a number of students
jumping up, claiming that they knew the answer before the question was fully
stated, or before they had had sufficient time to think about the question and
work out the answer.
B. I was concerned. I suggested to the classroom teacher that many of the children
placed too great an importance on winning the game rather than on answering
the questions correctly. This concern stemmed from my classroom
observation where I noticed students claiming to know the answer before the
question was fully stated, or before they had had time to think and work it out.
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Activity
Try applying the techniques presented in this module to your own writing. Re-read a current or
past assignment and highlight the sentences, words or phrases that could be changed or
removed to make your writing more concise. Be careful though not to remove phrases that
contribute to meaning.
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Example 1
Chinese are Buddhist. They go to the temple five times a year, live simple lives, and give money to charity.
Example 2
Many Chinese are Buddhists. Practising Buddhists go to the temple about five times a year, generally try to
live simple lives, and give money to charity when they can.
You can avoid over-generalising by using qualifying words to indicate the strength of your claims. The
table below presents some of the most common qualifiers.
High level vocabulary can be problematic as it is easy to confuse words which sound similar but have
different meanings or spelling.
Complimentary is used instead of complementary, which has a different meaning. If this were a one-off
typing error, the marker would probably be lenient. However, if it occurred throughout the report, the
writer could lose not just marks, but credibility.
Sometimes a single letter can be the difference between a noun, verb, adjective or tense. Words which
often cause confusion include:
These types of error will not be picked up by spell checkers, so it’s up to you to check your work carefully.
Some words sound similar enough to be confused and thus used in the wrong context. For example, the
student who wrote:
While studies suggest this approach has merit, its impact has clearly been conflated,
really meant:
While studies suggest this approach has merit, its impact has clearly been inflated.
Students often use a thesaurus to avoid repetition. However, the words listed will not all be an exact
match for the word you look up. They may vary in intensity, formality, part of speech, or contextual
application. Take the case of the verb ‘to conduct’. Among many other words, the thesaurus offers:
direct, lead, manage, organise, operate, carry out, perform.
Quantities
When making a general claim, words such as few, some, or the majority, often suffice. However, in some
cases, such as describing experimental methods and results, or making an important point, it is better to
use a precise number, for example: six, 10mg, 73%.
Verbs such as can, have, get, or go can have more than one meaning or application. For example, get can
mean achieve, obtain, receive, buy, become or understand. Using the most precise word is important in
academic writing to avoid ambiguity or misunderstanding.
Check for illogical constructions
In first drafts we often write statements that are not quite logical. Consider the second sentence in this
paragraph, from an essay on Jane Eyre:
As we see the novel through Jane's eyes, we only hear the story of Mr. Rochester and Bertha through
what Mr. Rochester tells Jane, which Jane then narrates to the reader. If we were to learn Bertha's
version of the story instead of Mr. Rochester's it would probably be very different.
Whether we learn Bertha’s version of the story or not has no effect on if or how it differs from
Rochester’s. In this case the illogical construction is due to mixed referents: we (the readers) and it
(Bertha’s story). Is the sentence about our reactions or about Bertha’s story? There are two ways it could
be written, each of which conveys a slightly different meaning:
If we were to hear Bertha’s version of the story, we might see Rochester differently.
Consider two options to edit your writing for sound logic: put it aside for a few days before revising or
ask someone else to read it.
Modifiers add detail about another unit of meaning within a sentence. For example, in the sentence:
Having missed the bus, Joe set out to walk to town, the phrase Having missed the bus explains why Joe
set out to walk to town.
Note that the subject of the body of the sentence, Joe, also performs the action in the modifying phrase.
Joe missed the bus and Joe set out to walk to town.
A dangling modifier occurs when the subject of the modifying phrase is not the subject of the sentence.
For example: Having set the heater to its highest setting, the room soon became stuffy.
This does not make sense. Who set the heater to its highest setting? Consider these two more precisely
written examples:
The room became stuffy after the heater had been set to its highest setting.
Having set the heater to its highest setting, Jane soon noticed the room becoming stuffy.
Activity
Read the following sentences. How would you write each one to be more precise? Think about it
before you click 'Turn' for the solution.
Turn
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Activity
Try applying the techniques presented in this module to your own writing. Re-read a current or
past assignment and highlight the sentences, words or phrases that could be rewritten more
precisely. Be careful though not to change the meaning.
Tip
It is difficult to be sure your writing is clear, concise and precise. This is because your mind
remembers and understands what you meant to say, so it will fill in any gaps or correct mistakes
as you read. There are two ways to get around this.
1 Wait a few days before re-reading your work. This will give your mind time to forget what
you meant. It can also be useful to change the way the writing looks. For example, change
the font style, size or colour before reading.
2 Share your work with your family or friends. If they understand what you mean without
having to ask you to explain anything, especially if they are not familiar with the topic, then
your writing is probably clear.
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Signposting
Much as road signs show you where you are going on a street or highway, you can use certain words or
phrases to create 'signposts' to guide your reader through your writing. Signposts show your reader the route
your writing will take, remind them of key points along the way, and point out changes in direction.
Signposts also help the reader understand the connections between the points you make, and how they
contribute to the overarching aim of the assignment.
Activity
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in gentrifying neighbourhoods. Urban Studies 52(13), 2349-2365.
Most readers find the second text easier to read because signposts make the connections between the ideas
presented. For example,‘Therefore’ shows the relationship between the points made in the first and second
sentences, and ‘first’ and ‘subsequently’ tell us that the following sentences explain how the essay will
develop. However, it is not enough to simply outline the intended structure in the introduction – you need
signposts throughout to remind the reader where they have come from and tell them where you plan to take
them next.
Signposts can also tell us how to interpret information presented in the assignment. For example, ‘Notably’ at
the beginning of the second paragraph above tells us that the writer considers the content of the sentence to
be significant.
Signposts can be simple words or phrases (e.g. however, in summary), or complete sentences (e.g. to explain
the transition from one section of your writing to another).
Tip
Overusing signposts can affect your writing negatively. You are not expected to start each and
every sentence in a paragraph with a signpost. Rather, you should use them only when you think
they add value to your text and make it easy to follow for the reader.
Major signposts
Major signposts are used to indicate important elements of your writing,
such as your purpose, your position, your main points, and your
conclusions.
Examples:
Transition sentences
Transition sentences are used to explain how and why you are moving from
one idea to another.
Examples:
Linking words
Linking words are used to identify the connections between ideas. They tell
the reader what to expect next, or how to interpret what they read. You can
use them to connect ideas within sentences, between sentences or
between paragraphs.
Examples:
Types of linking
Examples
words
Reminders
Reminders help the reader remember the content that you have already
covered. This is particularly useful in longer essays.
Examples:
In summary…
So far…
As we have seen above…
We saw in Section 2 that…
Summing up is another kind of reminder. This is useful to help the reader consolidate the content of one
section or chapter before moving on to the next.
Examples:
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Summary
We have seen that signposts help the reader make sense of a piece of writing in a variety of ways. Use:
major signposts to indicate important elements such as your purpose, position, main points, and
conclusions
transition sentences to explain how and why you are moving between ideas
linking words to identify the connections between ideas
reminders to remind the reader of content already covered.
Tip
When writing, it is easy to assume the connections between points are clear when in fact they
may not be. It can be useful to have someone else read your work. If they can follow your
argument or reasoning without help, you have signposted clearly.
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Introduction
In your assignments you will be expected to draw on the writing of experts in your field of study to
demonstrate your understanding of key concepts, ideas and debates. You will also use this material as
evidence to support your arguments and justify your claims.
Care is needed when incorporating the work of others into your assignments to avoid plagiarism. The
techniques that will assist you to achieve this are: paraphrasing, summarising and quoting combined with
correct referencing.
Tip
Rewording some technical terms or specialised vocabulary (e.g. direct instruction and liquid
chromatography in the following examples) might not be easily possible because replacing them
with similar words can alter the original meaning or not communicate the same meaning.
EXAMPLE:
The following tips will help you write effective notes and avoid plagiarism. Click on the headings below for
more details.
Record the bibliographic details of the source (e.g. author name, year of publication, title, page number)
that you need for your reference list or bibliography on the same page or app that you are using to record
your notes. This saves you having to search for the details later and makes it clear where the content
originally came from.
As you read, ask yourself: What is the key message of each paragraph or section? Record the main
points without the detailed explanations that accompany them.
Hint
When you can express the key information presented in the original text in your own words
briefly, you are ready to make paraphrased notes. If you can’t do this, you probably haven’t
understood the text and need to re-read it.
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Consider: Is this information relevant? Remember that you are making notes for a specific assignment. It
is unlikely that everything you read will be useful, so be selective. As you make notes, include brief
comments on their relevance to the assignment.
Remember that these are notes - they do not have to be complete sentences. Use dot points, symbols,
diagrams, and other graphic representations. This way you will naturally use your own words when
writing the assignment.
If you do write in full sentences, be sure to use your own words, not those in the original text. Of course,
this doesn’t apply to discipline specific or technical terms which must be used as they appear in the
original source. Always check spelling, dates, numerical values, etc.
Hint
Not looking at the original text while making notes will assist you to take notes in your own
words and avoid plagiarism. However, after taking notes, compare your notes to the original
text to make sure you have retained the original meaning.
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Include page numbers beside your notes. This will save you time later if you need to double-check
information or need a quote. Some referencing styles require page numbers for paraphrasing as well, so
it is important to have them available.
As you gather information for your assignment, you may have questions related to the concepts,
arguments or study that you are reading about. Include these in your notes so you do not forget them.
Note connections
It is important to connect the ideas presented in different sources to each other and to your unit and
assignment. Record your own comments about how each author's research supports or contradicts the
work of other researchers you have read, or what you have learned in lectures. Be careful to clearly
distinguish your ideas from those of the author.
Hint
Put your own thoughts, ideas and questions in a different colour or font so they are easily
distinguishable from the ideas of the researcher that you have recorded.
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After you have taken notes from your different sources, organise them into groups to match your
research questions.
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Essay Question
Definitions of 'homeless'
* Definition of home - "where one lives permanently" - permanent residence
(OUP, 2017)
* The NYC recommends - expand and increase funding supported accom. (NYC,
2008, p.20)
References
When planning and writing your assignment, use only your own notes which are written in your
own words. This will help you avoid plagiarism.
Activity
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Paraphrasing
Paraphrasing means expressing information or ideas from other sources in your own words in a similar
number of words as the source text. Paraphrasing is NOT simply replacing words with synonyms or
rearranging the structure of sentences. It involves rephrasing a text substantially while retaining the original
meaning. Paraphrasing involves acknowledging the original source with proper referencing.
Tip
1 The first step in paraphrasing is to read the original text and get a full grasp of it. You may need to read
the original text a few times and check the meaning of key words to fully understand it.
2 While you are reading, think about the overall meaning of each paragraph or section - don’t just focus
on the individual words and sentences.
3 After each paragraph or section, put the reading aside and state it in your own words.
4 When you can do this, you are ready to write your paraphrase.
5 Finally, proofread, revise and edit your paraphrase as necessary.
Hint
Don't forget to include a proper citation when paraphrasing and be careful not to change the
author’s meaning.
Activity
The paragraph below is a paraphrase written by a student. Its aim is to support one of the key
contentions in their essay on learning motivation among older students studying off campus.
Compare the student’s paraphrase to the original text and answer the following question.
Original source:
True False
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Activity
Below is an extract from a text which a student intends to use in an assignment, followed by two
attempts at paraphrasing it. Read through these, then indicate which you think does a better job
of paraphrasing.
Assignment topic
Original text:
Paraphrasing - Example A
Paraphrasing - Example B
Example A
Example B
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Summarising
Summarising means briefly outlining the main points of a reading in your own words without adding your own
ideas or changing the author’s meaning. Summarised information must be accompanied by a citation.
Tip
A summary is particularly useful if you need to refer to the main idea/argument presented in a
source (e.g. a book/chapter/article, etc.).
Here is how to summarise:
1 Similar to paraphrasing, the first step in summarising is to read the original text and get a full grasp of
it. You may need to re-read the original source a few times and look up the meaning of key words to
fully understand it.
2 When reading, ask yourself: What is the overall message? What are the key points?
3 Concentrate on the essentials and leave out details and examples.
4 Put the source aside and state its key points in your own words.
5 When you can do this, you are ready to write your summary.
6 Finally, proofread, revise and edit your summary as necessary.
Hint
Don't forget to include a proper citation when summarising and be careful not to add new points
or change the original meaning.
Activity
The following paragraph is a summary of the original source below written by a student as part
of a report on the dietary habits of Australian adolescents. Compare the student's summary to
the original text and answer the question.
Original source:
True False
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Activity
Read this section of an article and choose which option from the answers below best
summarises it.
Original source:
Longitudinal studies have also confirmed the role of beliefs in teacher
practice. The impact of previously held beliefs was found to be enduring
when four school teachers were observed over a two-year period
implementing a new and specific method of teaching reading (Stephens et
al., 2000). Despite the teachers receiving special training, new practice
was not comprehensively sustained, with one teacher reverting to
practice based on prior-held beliefs at the end of the training period.
Similar reliance on earlier beliefs has been observed in studies of
preservice teachers. In a two year study on development of professional
belief systems about reading instruction the teachers appeared to create
fictive images of themselves as teachers consistent with their prior
knowledge of teachers and reading, and the experiences they had on
teaching practicum (Stoube, 2009). These factors seemed more important
in forming these teachers’ notions about teaching reading, than formal
reading courses undertaken as part of teacher training. In a similar
fashion, research with preservice teachers at two American universities
found that previous, personal experience and beliefs continued to
influence content and instructional choices of these participants (Barnyak
& Paquette, 2010).
McHardy and Chapman (2016) prove that teachers find it impossible to change
their approach to teaching reading to adults despite being trained in alternative
methods. They always return to the practices they believe are best. Their views
are supported by at least three other studies.
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Tip
Remember: Read the text carefully and check anything you do not understand. Your summary
will not be accurate if you have misunderstood the work. Also, be careful not to let your own
ideas get mixed up with those of the author’s.
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Quoting
Quoting means repeating the author’s exact words. In some disciplines, such as literary studies and history,
quoting is used frequently to support an argument. In most others, especially science and technology, it is
used sparingly, if at all. Make sure you understand how quoting is used in your discipline. If unsure, ask a
lecturer or tutor.
the author has devised and named a new theory, model, concept, technique or scale
the author has provided a definition of a concept
the author’s words have unusual impact and would be difficult to express in any other way
the author is a notable authority on the subject and their words will lend weight to your argument
you are expected to use examples to justify your interpretation or analysis of a literary work.
Keep the quote as brief as possible, and integrate it into the development of your argument or discussion.
This means commenting on the quote to show how it connects to your point. All quotes require page
numbers in the citation.
Hint
Different citation styles have different definitions of short and long quotes. Check your citation
style or ask your tutor or lecturer if you are unsure.
Short quotes
For a short quote (up to two or three lines), place the relevant words in quotation marks and incorporate them
into your sentence.
It is not a failing of the author when one of the characters acts in an unusually
audacious way. As Jane Austen’s character, Mrs Croft, says, “We none of us expect to
be in smooth water all our days” (1992, p. 71). There are many examples in real life
as well as fiction of a normally cautious person finding themselves enjoying an
adventure.
Tip
You do not need to place technical terms or specialised vocabulary in quotation marks if you use
them as a part of a paraphrase or summary in your assignment.
Quotes of more than 30 or 40 words (depending on the citation style you are using) should be:
set apart from the rest of your text, usually by leaving one blank line before and after
indented, usually by five spaces
possibly typed in a smaller font.
Generally, the quote should be preceded by a colon. Check the referencing style guide for your unit.
Kotler comments on the tendency of many Americans to assume that everything in
the United States is better than elsewhere:
A nation that is great does not need to boast about it! It will be known without
promotion. Other nations don’t appreciate hearing, by implication, that their
country offers much less than the U.S. does. The citizens of many countries
actually prefer their country’s ways and culture to U.S. culture. Many
Europeans, especially the French, feel their lives are more satisfying (Kotler,
2016, p. 168).
Hint
Never end a paragraph with a block quote. You should always explain how the quote fits into your
argument.
Activity
Each of these four attempts at quoting has an error. Drag the error the writer has made (on the
right hand side) and match it to the quote on the left.
Activity
Look at the following examples of long quotes. Indicate whether the quote has been used
appropriately. Hint: This activity requires you to consider more than just the formatting of the
quote.
The nineteenth century witnessed the rise of rationalism. This led to a new
approach to scientific research. Darwin describes his research process as
follows:
These facts seemed to me to throw some light on the origin of species - that
mystery of mysteries, as it has been called by one of our great philosophers …
something might perhaps be made out of this question by patiently
accumulating and reflecting on all sorts of facts which could possibly have any
bearing on it (Darwin, 1860, p.11).
This process is familiar to modern scientists, who examine and analyse data in
order to draw conclusions.
No.
Yes.
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Information-prominent citation is used when what (i.e. the information) you want to convey is more
important to your purpose than telling the reader who (i.e. the author) wrote that information. In this case the
citation follows the content. For example:
For example:
The eminent linguist, Noam Chomsky has warned that a narrow definition of the
natural sciences as the ‘science of meter reading’, fails to acknowledge the complex
cognitive processes that observable behaviour is based on (2006, p. 57).
Activity
Author-prominent.
Information-prominent.
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In any assignment you will most likely use a mix of these techniques to convey what you have read. However,
there are other considerations which will affect the way you present this information:
Naturally you will select the information which best supports your purpose in relation to the
assignment. You might use only part of the information provided in a given source and you will often
need to incorporate information from several sources to fulfil your purpose, whether it is to support
your argument, to explain a concept, or to refute another writer’s ideas.
The words you choose to introduce and comment on the information you present, as well as the way
you synthesise information from various sources, will show your attitude to the content. This is often
referred to as your 'voice' which provides clues to the readers about how they should interpret what
they read.
Look at the example below. The purpose of the paragraph is to introduce the concept of homelessness and
lead into a discussion of policy development and service provision. Note how the writer has incorporated
materials from several sources.
Homelessness can be defined in a number of ways. These extend from the want of
shelter (ABS, 2012), which may or may not include temporary shelter such as
couchsurfing and crisis accommodation (Mission Australia, 2017), to a lack of
permanency, membership of a family or social unit, or sense of historical belonging
(OUP, 2017). The difficulty of agreeing on a definition is reflected in the complexity
involved in developing effective policies and services for those deemed to be
homeless (ABS, 2012).
Activity
Respond True/ False or Agree/Disagree to the following statements with reference to the
paragraph above.
The inclusion of information from several sources helps the writer paint a well-
rounded picture of the situation described.
True False
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Activity
Now read the version below. This time we can hear the essay writer’s voice in the way the
information is conveyed.
Click on the words, phrases or sentences that indicate the writer’s attitude.
Homelessness is more than the want of a roof over one’s head. A multi-
faceted concept, it can be defined in a variety of ways, most simply as
merely the want of shelter (ABS, 2012), including or not including those
who are couch surfing or in crisis accommodation (Mission Australia
2017). However, four of the six entries under ‘home’ in the Oxford Living
Dictionary (OUP, 2017), emphasise permanency, membership of a family
or social unit, or historical association. These additional elements reflect
the influence of cultural and historical factors on our understanding of
what constitutes a home (ABS, 2012) and, by extension, what is lost when
one becomes homeless.
Phrases Found: 0 of 5
Answer true or false to the following statement about the paragraph above.
The sole purpose of this paragraph is to indicate the writer’s stance on what
constitutes homelessness.
True False
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References
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