Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis Day 2

Student 1

 Daylight savings can be the best sometimes.  To be honest, we need the time change.
The government needs to keep the time change as it is because there's longer
summers, and there's less crime! 

 Having more hours of light in the summer is great. I mean, who wants to show up to
their pool and it already be sunset? Source 3 claims, "Daylight Saving Time gives us
the opportunity to enjoy sunny summer evenings by moving our clocks an hour
forward in the spring." This proves that we have one more hour in the spring. Source
1 states when the time changes, "Daylight Saving time starts on March 10th, clocks
are moved one hour forward , at 2:00a.m. to 3:00a.m. This makes sunrise and sunset
about 1 hour later, so there is more light in the evening." More sunlight means more
things to do during the day. Like activites! Source 3 says, "More daylight in the
evening motivates people to get out of the house. The extra hour of light can be used
for recreation, like basketball, soccer running and taking walks." Summer gives us lots
of things to do and we could do that without Daylight Saving Time.

 When the day is mostly light, there is no time for crime! In the Source "Daylight
Savings Time" it says, "A study by the U.S. Law Enforcement Assistance
Adminstration found that crime was happening less during Daylight Savings Time
than during standard time. Data showed violent crime down 10 to 13 percent." This
shows how much crime exactly is being monitored. Back to Source 3, "It is clear that
for most crimes where darkness is a factor, such as mugging, there are many more
events after dusk than before dawn, so light in the evening is most welcome." So, you
could say crime is less active because most crime is done at night. Daylight savings is
good because there's less crime during the day.

 In all fairness, we need Daylight Savings.  It's clearly helpful because of longer
summers and less crime commited. Daylight Savings should be kept as a regular event
in the year.
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Questions

1. Do they have an introduction?

2. Is there a hook?
3. What is the claim?
4. Does the claim show that they are in support of or against the topic?
5. What is the first reason?
6. What is the second reason?
7. First body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
8. What evidence from the text was provided?
9. Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
10.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
11.Second body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
12.What evidence from the text was provided?
13.Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
14.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
15.Is there a counter claim?
16.What is the rebuttal?
17.Conclusion paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
18.Did they restate the reason?
19.Did they restate the claim?
20.Did they end with a summary statement that ties up loose ends, makes a final
statement or connection, or connect back to the hook? Explain.
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Student 2

In favor of keeping the time change as it is (moving ahead one hour in the spring and
falling back one hour in the fall) or stoppoing the time change (stay on one time the
whole year) it should not happen because it cause health problems, lack of sleep, and
to much time change.

 To begin with, the change in time or stops in time changes it should not happen
because of all the health problems it causes. In paragraph 7 in states "it is clear
however, that the impact of daylight-saving on people's sleep cycles can have some
nasty health affects. For example, two hospitals recently counted heart attack victims
on the first day of daylight saving." This is stating that the daylight saving can affect
people's health because of their sleeping cycle it was cause nasty health problems.

 In addition to, the change in time or stops in time change it should not happen
because of their lack of sleep. In paragraaph 9 it stated  "how serious are effects on the
sleep cycle? More serious than you might think. Clearly sleep is important to
psychological ang psychological balance. So is the lack of it. Whose brain hasn't felt
fuzzy from lack of sleep?". This stated that the lack of sleep can make your brain feel
fuzzy because you got very little sleep or no sleep at all.

 Finally, the change in time or stops in time change it should not happen because of
there is to much time change. In paragraph 13 " Widespread confusion was created
during the 1950s and 1960s when the states could start and end the change as it
desired. One year, 23 different pairs of Daylight Saving Time start and end dates were
used in Iowa alone. For exactly five weeks each year, Boston, New York, and
Philadelphia were not on the same time as Washington D.C., Cleveland, or
Baltimore--but Chicago was. And, on one Ohio to West Virginia bus route,
passengers had to change their watches seven times in 35 miles!". That states that
because of all the traveling everywhere they went it was a different time so they had
to change the time a lot.

 In conclusion, of keeping the time change as it is (moving ahead one hour in the
spring and falling back one hour in the fall) or stoppoing the time change (stay on one
time the whole year) it should not happen because it cause health problems, lack of
sleep, and to much time change. All of that meant that the time change was bad
because of everything that happened.
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Questions

1. Do they have an introduction?

2. Is there a hook?
3. What is the claim?
4. Does the claim show that they are in support of or against the topic?
5. What is the first reason?
6. What is the second reason?
7. First body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
8. What evidence from the text was provided?
9. Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
10.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
11.Second body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
12.What evidence from the text was provided?
13.Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
14.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
15.Is there a counter claim?
16.What is the rebuttal?
17.Conclusion paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
18.Did they restate the reason?
19.Did they restate the claim?
20.Did they end with a summary statement that ties up loose ends, makes a final
statement or connection, or connect back to the hook? Explain.
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Student 3

Are daylight savings good or bad for the community? Daylight savings are very
helpful in some situations but it has it's disadvantages. Daylight saving can extend
time or help stop crime but it can also cause you stress. According to paragraph 15
(source 3) "A study by the U.S Law Enforcement Assistance Administration found
that crime was happening less during Daylight Saving Time than during standard
time." In which is good for the states/country, but daylight saving can really mess up
your sleep.

 According to paragraph 17 (source 3) "A 1976 survey of 2.7 million citizens found
68% liked dayligh saving." Most people like daylight savings because they get more
time in the afternoon after school to do sports or just have more time in the afternoon.
Daylight savings can save home fires. According to paragraph 16 (source 3) "Many
fire departments encourage people to change the batteries in their smoke detectos
when they change their clocks because Daylight saving time is an esasy way to
rememer." Yeah, now you might think daylight savings are good because you get
more time after school or because it can prevent a home fire. But they actually have a
really bad health effects that is not really talked about. According to paragraph 10
(source 2) "Unfortunately, daylight saving time may disrupt body clocks long term."
In which can have major impacts on your body that can cause headaches or even heart
attacks.

 According to paragraph 7 (source 3) "It is clear, however, that the impact of daylight-
saving time on people’s sleep cycles can have some nasty health effects. For example,
two Michigan hospitals recently counted heart attack victims on the first day of
daylight saving." This is not only bad for your health it can cause you lack of sleep
which can lead you to falling asleep at work, school, & etc. According to paragraph
15 (source 3) "Data showed violent crime down 10 to 13 percent." Even though
daylight savings have it's disadvantages, it's reduced crime down in which is helpful
for the country & for society in general.

In conlusion, daylight savings can have disadvantages but is very helpful at the same
time. Daylight savings can make you lose sleep and cause you headaches. But thanks
to daylight savings crime has reduceced, prevented home fires, & gives you more time
for afterschool activities. But overall 68% people enjoy daylight savings.
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Questions

1. Do they have an introduction?

2. Is there a hook?
3. What is the claim?
4. Does the claim show that they are in support of or against the topic?
5. What is the first reason?
6. What is the second reason?
7. First body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
8. What evidence from the text was provided?
9. Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
10.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
11.Second body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
12.What evidence from the text was provided?
13.Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
14.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
15.Is there a counter claim?
16.What is the rebuttal?
17.Conclusion paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
18.Did they restate the reason?
19.Did they restate the claim?
20.Did they end with a summary statement that ties up loose ends, makes a final
statement or connection, or connect back to the hook? Explain.
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Student 4

Time change in United States?

 Most Americans lose at least an hour of sleep after setting their clocks ahead. An
hour may not seem like much. Medical research, however, suggests that it has an
impact on our bodies. Switching to daylight saving time has been linked with a
possible increase in the car and workplace accidents. It is also linked to heart attacks
and severe headaches.

Ben Franklin was the first person to suggestmoving the clock as day
lengthened.During the 1784 he argued that having daylight last longer save energy,
Nearly 100 years later George Vernon Hudson, a New Zealand artist, proposed the
idea in an 1895 paper he was an ametur insect collector and wanted more time to
collect bugs after work.Some European countries adopted it soon after. Beginning in
the 1940s, some US states adopted it. The federal government standardized the dates
in the 1960s.

 Did your body complain about Day light saving?

 What might explain these effects,the most important cue for our internal clocks is
light. When we suddenly change the time by an hour, it alters the amount of light we
see during the day. The result is our internal rhythms get off kilter. So do our sleep-
wake cycles, the timed release of hormones, and even our moods.How serious are
effects on the sleep cycle More serious than you think. Clearly sleep is important to
psychological and physiological balance. A study was just published in the journal
Proceedings of the National Academy of Sciences. It found that getting too little sleep
a few nights in a row can disrupt hundreds of genes. These include including those
tied to stress and fighting diseases.Daylight saving time may disrupt body clocks long
term.

 How does daylight help our body?

 More daylight in the evening motivates people to get out of the house. The extra hour
of light can be used for recreation, like basketball, soccer, running and taking walks.
More activity leads to healthier living. Longer nights give people more time to go
shopping, to restaurants or other events. This helps the local businesses make more
money.
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis
Classwork: Argumentative Writing Analysis

Questions

1. Do they have an introduction?

2. Is there a hook?
3. What is the claim?
4. Does the claim show that they are in support of or against the topic?
5. What is the first reason?
6. What is the second reason?
7. First body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
8. What evidence from the text was provided?
9. Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
10.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
11.Second body paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
12.What evidence from the text was provided?
13.Is the evidence cited properly (meaning are there quotation marks or use of one
of the following: according to the text, source_ states, the author from source_
says, or something similar?
14.Is there an elaboration sentence explaining or significance of the evidence or
other commentary on the relevance to the topic?
15.Is there a counter claim?
16.What is the rebuttal?
17.Conclusion paragraph is there a transition word or phrase? What is it?
18.Did they restate the reason?
19.Did they restate the claim?
20.Did they end with a summary statement that ties up loose ends, makes a final
statement or connection, or connect back to the hook? Explain.