Unit 6: Cause-and-Effect Essays Page 146

Writing Task Peer Editing a First Draft

Date: 03/07/2022

Writer: Phạm Thị Nhung

Peer Editor: Phạm Minh Ngọc

Title: Cause-and-effect essay

1. What is your favorite part of the essay?

“Everyone's life has to go through an adult stage.”

2. What effect does the writer introduce in the background information?

“At that time, I was in a very depressed mood. I went to work part-time at a restaurant in the city.”

3. What causes does the writer present in the thesis statement?

“ I changed my mind when I met the instructor and partly due to the impact of the covid epidemic

leading to unemployment.”

4. How does the writer explain the causes in the body paragraphs?

“Everyone's life has to go through an adult stage. We can't always be immature and naive children.”

“An event happened to me when I was 18 years old. I failed college.”

“The impact of Covid-19 led to unemployment. I met a mentor who helped me to have a better
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5. What parts of the essay could be supported with more details?

“ When I was young, I was carefree, just studying. I don't have to think about rice and money. My

parents pampered me little by little so that I had a beautiful childhood.”

6. Write down any information from the essay that does not support the writer’s thesis.

“ The impact of Covid-19 led to unemployment”

7. Why is this topic important to the writer? How do you know?

“It was a massive change in my life”. Because the writer tell all about how she change.

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