Unit 3: Narrative Essays Page 72

Writing Task Editing and Rewriting

Date: 11/06/2022

Writer: Phạm Minh Ngọc

Peer Editor: Phạm Thị Nhung
Title: Narrative

1. Does the thesis statement prepare you for the story? How can it be improved?

2. What details does the writer provide in body paragraph 1 to bring the story to life?

“After a while, my brother and I were attracted by many games. At that moment, I forgot that my hands.

should keep on the handlebar. My brother neglected, too. As a result, my bike lost control and collided with

a large tree.”

3. What is your favorite detail in body paragraph 2? Why do you like it?

“Dad also said these falls would give me more motivation to try again.”

Because her father's encouragement helped her overcome her fear.

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4. List any time expressions in the essay. How do they help you understand the sequence of
events?

One day during summer break, my father finally told me that it was time to learn how to ride a bike.

He and I went to the park nearby our house.

I started to ride slowly and felt excited.

After a while, my brother and I were attracted by many games.

At that moment, I forgot that my hands should keep on the handlebar.

5. Underline the conclusion. What outcome does the writer explain?

“ I am more mature and in charge of my life and family.”

The writer explain “I realized that I couldn't always rely on my family. I need to learn how to care for

myself before taking care of my family.”

6. Why is the event important to the writer?

The experience helps the author overcome fear and become more mature in life.

7. Circle any verbs used in the simple past or the past continuous. Put a check  next to all that
are used correctly to indicate interrupted or simultaneous actions.

8. What suggestions do you have for the writer?

I don't have any suggestions.

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