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    The document provides feedback on a candidate's analysis of a text. It awards scores in four categories: knowledge and understanding (5/5), analysis and evaluation (4/5), focus, organization and development (3/5), and language (5/5). The feedback notes that the candidate demonstrated a sound understanding of the text but could have strengthened their analysis by mentioning how the advertisement establishes ethos and credibility. It also suggests adding more emphasis on the global issues addressed and Chevrolet's vision to make the argument more persuasive.

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    The document provides feedback on a candidate's analysis of a text. It awards scores in four categories: knowledge and understanding (5/5), analysis and evaluation (4/5), focus, organization and development (3/5), and language (5/5). The feedback notes that the candidate demonstrated a sound understanding of the text but could have strengthened their analysis by mentioning how the advertisement establishes ethos and credibility. It also suggests adding more emphasis on the global issues addressed and Chevrolet's vision to make the argument more persuasive.

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    Being The IB1 Paper Examiner 2

    Uploaded by

    Arva Malpani
    The document provides feedback on a candidate's analysis of a text. It awards scores in four categories: knowledge and understanding (5/5), analysis and evaluation (4/5), focus, organization and development (3/5), and language (5/5). The feedback notes that the candidate demonstrated a sound understanding of the text but could have strengthened their analysis by mentioning how the advertisement establishes ethos and credibility. It also suggests adding more emphasis on the global issues addressed and Chevrolet's vision to make the argument more persuasive.

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    A.

    Knowledge, B C D
    understanding Analysis and evaluation Focus, organisation and Language
    and development
    interpretation

    5/5 3/5 5/5


    The candidate shows a 4/5 The points were well
    sound understanding of The analysis and organized and focused. The language is fluid,
    the text. And he/she has evaluation was very The development of the formal and direct. There
    been able to pick the effective. The candidate points throughout the has been a use of subject
    nitty-gritty details such provided compelling copy was astute. specific terminology.
    as the mentioning of the points that supported its However, the underlined And the candidate has
    year ‘2007’ and thesis statement. part in the fourth expressed his/her ideas
    Chevrolet was one of its However, mentioning of paragraph is repetitive. effectively.
    kind. ethos and how it adds Mention the fact that the
    The figurative language credibility to the advert Chevrolet car kept under
    is correctly pointed out would add more the lightning draws the
    and interpretations do meaning to the attention of the reader
    match Chevrolet’s vision candidates point of view. and compels them to
    behind the Moreover, stressing focus on it. Moreover,
    advertisement. more on the global issue this shows that the
    -- how non renewable company adds a picture
    energy resources are of the car along with the
    depleting and mankind description to compel the
    should focus more on consumers to purchase
    renewable energy the car. This would
    sources—which is being entice consumers to
    advocated by Chevrolet check out the car.
    through electric
    automobiles. Though the Mentioning of these
    GI of ‘climate change’ is points would help the
    mentioned, adding more candidate make a more
    emphasis and conveying developed and focused
    Chevrolet’s vision in the argument.
    conclusion would help
    the candidate earn full
    marks and make his/her
    argument more
    persuasive.
    Name: Arva Malpani

    Total- 17/20

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