‘Shopping programs on TV are too long.

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Do you agree?
Every time I see a good TV show, the ads pop up, just like watching a horror movie, and a ghost
face comes out instantly, and I'm very tired of it. If I change to another channel, the ads pop up
again before I'm engrossed in the drama's plot. In my opinion, shopping commercials take longer
to air than even the news every day for the following reasons.

First of all, the news is broadcast every morning at 7:30 on the dot, because most of those who
watch the act are middle-aged or elderly people, they will not miss the important daily program
news broadcast, of course my grandfather is, and early in the morning are not the time to play a
television series, so much so that in addition to the news is shopping ads.

Secondly, they would keep pushing a product for a day or more, and would broadcast the same
merchandising on other programs, which made my family feel helpless and angry when they
watched TV because my parents' greatest pleasure when they came back from work was watching
TV, lying on the couch in a comfortable position, with their eyes just looking ahead and that was
it.

Thirdly, I also believe that many people watching TV are startled by the sound of shopping ads,
and the screen suddenly popping up.

So I think there should be less TV shopping commercials on TV, more time for movies, more time
for music appreciation, more time for even TV series, and more news time if possible, because
important things happen in the world every day, not the newly produced goods today.

1. Is there a title? Is it capitalized correctly?

2. Is there indentation?

3. Where is the introduction?

Does the introduction have a general statement and a thesis statement? Yes/No
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4. How many body paragraphs do we have? 1/2/3

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 5. Do we have a conclusion: Yes/No
If yes, is it an opinion or a summary?

6. Did the writer use linking words/transitions? Firstly/secondly/moreover (and)/

in addition (and)/for example/furthermore/however (but)/nonetheless (but)?
Yes/No? Which ones?

7. Did the writer punctuate them correctly? Are there any mistakes in
punctuation?

Firstly,
I got to the airport two hours early. However, my flight was delayed.
I got to the airport two hours early; however, my flight was delayed.

However (punctuation) = in addition, furthermore, additionally, for instance, for

example, moreover, what’s more, all in all, likewise, in conclusion, to sum up, to
conclude, firstly, secondly,… etc.

Because, although, though, when, while

Because I was late, I missed my flight. (Comma after the first clause).
I missed my flight because I was late. (No comma)

8. Are there any grammar or spelling mistakes?