1. Do you like my synopsis?

ID Name Responses

1 Paul Ralph It sounds good, but is a bit confusing

It's interesting, yet nearly unreadable due to the many grammatical

Jack Sayers errors. I like the idea of a scientist and a killer robot. Black eyes and
2
Shaw YELLOW pupils? Interesting choice. Usually when someone has an
unusual eye colour, it's red, but I think that may have become cliché.

3 Emma Bown You know what you need and that's better than I'm doing.

4 Micky Hyde I like it because of the content that's inside.

5 Colby Savin it's a good plot

6 James Collie The synopsis was interesting and had a lot of detail on what happens!

7 Sam Gunner I like the synopsis because it's creative and creepy

Eloise It sounds very exciting like a horror adventure. I think it would be a

8
Abercrombie good thriller to watch.

9 Ryan Cave It's very informative

Conclusion
Everyone liked my synopsis because of the plot or the idea I had. Some people thought it
was a bit confusing and there was some grammar mistakes but over all people liked it.
 2. What section of my S.O.A could be improved
4 - more explanation needed 5, 7 and 9 - more specific explanations
1 Paul Ralph
needed, they are too brief

Jack Sayers As mentioned in my answer explanation, the grammar. Oh, and the start
2
Shaw drags on for quite a bit. Fix that, if you want to.

3 Emma Bown The explanation could be clearer, maybe improve the flow of things.

4 Micky Hyde The 3 act structure could do with some refinement in terms of it's pacing.

5 Colby Savin a little more exposition of where the friends are

6 James Collie I don’t think much else can be changed.

7 Sam Gunner Maybe add a little more detail in the other sections

Eloise A proof-reader. Tell us more why you decided on DVD cover and graphic
8
Abercrombie storyboard. The skills section you can list more skills.

9 Ryan Cave none

Conclusion
People said to improve on question 4, 5, 7 and 9 to write more things down
for those questions. Other people said about the pacing of the synopsis to
make it flow better.
3. Do you have any ideas to add to it

I
Name Responses
D

1 Paul Ralph Check the synopsis for spelling/grammatical errors

Jack Sayers Maybe you could explain who Williow is and why he/she/they wants to
2
Shaw kidnap people?

3 Emma Bown No

Kill off one of the main characters to show that the story's villain is a
4 Micky Hyde
threat.

5 Colby Savin a little more world building to military base

6 James Collie No

For your synopsis, maybe make a backstory for Williow so the audience
7 Sam Gunner
can get why he is kidnapping people

Eloise
8 What are the villains’ motivations?
Abercrombie

9 Ryan Cave no

Conclusion
People says to add a backstory to Williow and add a motive of why she is
kidnapping people. Check for grammar and spelling mistakes.