Student 1

Ima Student

Instructor

English 11

3 November 2014
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character, Bella, must choose between two strapping young men, Edward and

Jacob. Each fellow has endearing and harmful qualities which adds to Bella’s struggle to

choose. The overly enthusiastic fans of this series have takena stance

and are either a member of “Team Edward” or “Team Jacob”. Fans, Thesis – needs to state your
positionandclaims on how
and Bella alike, should be on “Team Edward” because he is a supreme to prove that position.

model of a man, is valiant and is compassionate.

Edward Cullen is an almost perfect specimen of a man. Topic sentence and claim #1

Granted, Jacob Black is also very

Counter-claim of claim #1
attractive upon first glance,

but Edward has the overall package. He has beautiful eyes

The majority of the paragraph should have
evidence to prove your claim as being a
that at times were blackand then would turnliquid golden
valid argument to prove your position.
Remember when quoting to ICE –
topaz, butterscotchand even green (Edward Cullen). The
Introduce, Cite, Explain.

colors of his eyes and his intense stare are mesmerizing, but

his peepers aren’t his only beautiful quality.

When Edward speaks, Bella states that “his Book parenthetical citation
– in parenthesis
at end of sentence with author’s last name
voice was like melting honey” (Meyers 102). His and page number.
Period always comes
after end parenthesis.
voice is especially hypnotizing when he

quotes classic authors, such as William

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Shakespeare. His skin, according to Bella, is “like marble” and sparkles like diamonds in the

sunlight, which is a trait of all vampires. Edward’s hair is stylishly disheveled and is a rich

mahogany color and his smile is “dazzlingly

“slender with a
Internet parenthetical citation
– since I
could notlocate an author, the title of
In addition to his
the article goes in parenthesis. Always
crooked”. He’s tall with and
try to find an author first!
wealthy (money
muscular build” (Edward Cullen).
to have), which
enamoring looks, he is also quite isn’t everything, but

it sure is nice means he has a great ride and a fancy abode. Transition sentence
– speaks to main
point of current paragraph and leads
Edward is the complete reader into the next.
quite a hero in disguise.
package deal with just looks alone, but he is also

Repeat format from body paragraph Edward could be considered a modern day knight in shining
#1 in remaining body paragraphs:
Topic sentence, evidence (using ICE armor. He has a sixth sense in knowing when his true love Bella is in

method), transition sentence. danger. Unlike Jacob who just turns into a werewolf when he’s angry,

Edward comes to Bella’s rescue on numerous occasions saving her from vampires trying to drink her

blood who are not “vegans” like the Cullen vampire clan. Vegan vampires have trained to overcome their

lust for human blood and feed on animals, such as deer. Edward is also selfless and courageous in the fact

that despite being Bella’s “soul mate”, he tries to stay away from her in an attempt to keep her safe from

other vampires (Edward Cullen). Adding to his chivalry of

opening doors for others and being ever so polite, he is also quite strong and faster than a

cheetah. He can stop cars with his body, kill other very strong vampires and run at top speeds to

save others from danger. Edward has incredibly valiant qualities, but his sensitive side could

perhaps be argued to be the most winning characteristic.

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Edward, despite his sometimes scary vampiric attributes, is a soft and caring individual.

Even though Jacob appeared to care about Bella, he was really only captivated with her looks,

rather than her true self, which is what Edward loved the most. Edward would sweetly watch

over Bella at almost all times during the day. He would not only keep his eyes on her during

school, but would also sometimes sneak in through her bedroom window and quietly watch her

sleep. He never tried to hurt her, but would just watch her peaceful face as she slept. He also

waited a very long time before he gave in to holding Bella’s hand, let alone kissing her, in spite

of her unsubtle advances. His compassion for her is also displayed when he saves Bella’s life

(more than one time); however, the most fantastic concerned save was when Bella was bitten by

a non-vegan vampire. Because she was bitten, Bella would have turned into a vampire which is

not only painful physically, but emotionally. Because Edward did not want Bella to go through

this experience, he took the chance of having to bite her in order to suck the venom out. He had

to hold back his deep seeded need for human blood to save her and because of his love for her,

he was able to be selfless. He always puts Bella’s needs first which goes to show just how

wonderful of a person he really is.

Being a part of “Team Edward” is a privilege and something

Review of main points in conclusion,
to stand by for as long as Twilight exists. This timeless piece of including restating thesis in a different
Call to action!
way than in introduction.
literature not only shows the world of vampires, good and evil,

but also shows the unique personalities of people. Through the

trials and tribulations presented in this series, one can easily see that Edward Cullen is far

superior to that of his nemesis, Jacob Black, in that Edward is more strikingly handsome, more

courageous and more caring. Join “Team Edward” immediately to show allegiance to his cause!
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Works Cited

“Edward Cullen.” Twilight Vampire Lovers. Wet Paint, 17 February 2009.

www.wetpaint.com/article_no_longer_there. 3
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Meyers, Stephenie. Twilight. Thorndike Press, 2009.

Works Cited: needs to be in

alphabetical order. Must follow
specific format depending upon
source. Check MLA rules for form at
(for instance, OWL at Purdue).

You also need to make sure it employs

“hanging indent” which indents the
lines after the first for each entry.