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Lily LeDuc
Mr. Smith
Junior English
1/18/23
writing assignment my skills were in the foundational to proficient level. My most recent
assignment I had only one skill in the foundational level, one skill in the advanced level, and the
rest in proficient. I am not quite where I want to be yet but I have seen a lot of improvements so
In terms of the strengths in my writing during semester one, I best demonstrated them in
my “Great Gatsby Symbolism Paragraph”. The evidence I used in this paragraph was put under
the category “Exemplary” meaning that I included specific and meaningful evidence throughout
this paragraph. I was able to use my evidence to help prove my claim which was that “In the
novel The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald, the green light is used to illustrate Gatsby’s
desire to be with Daisy again”. I used specific examples from the book to prove this. Another
writing piece that demonstrates another one of my strengths this semester was the “American
Dream Essay”. In this essay for fluency and MLA format I was also put under the advanced
category.
“In the article “American Dream Faces Harsh New Reality”, Shapiro says “The story of the 20th
century is one of the American Dream gradually being extended to more of the
population”(Shapiro).” In this example I stated where the article was from and integrated it into
my essay so it didn’t read choppy, everything was placed well and I also did the in-text citation
correctly. I used to not integrate my quotes/evidence to fit into my essays. I would just simply
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put them in to fill space but now I feel myself using my evidence and quotes with a purpose and
making sure they fit in and read smoothly so that my writing makes sense.
One aspect of writing that I struggle with is my analysis and synthesizing my sources. For
example, in my “Great Gatsby Synthesis Essay”, I did not fully synthesize my sources at the end
of each paragraph “Trower explains how it wasn’t Gatsby’s wealth that made him successful, he
used his wealth to attract Daisy's love. Callahan adds that before Gatsby reunited with Daisy he
idolized himself and the idea that he could become anything. As soon as he reunited with Daisy
his focus changed and he now idolized her and their relationship. Despite all of the wealth and
luxury items Gatsby had acquired he wasn't truly happy and content with his life until he was
reunited with Daisy.” I compared the two sources and explained how they added on to each other
and did not contradict each other but in my other paragraphs I was very brief, for example,
“Sjöström demonstrated how Tom used his mansion in East Egg to be successful in terms of
social standings and how others viewed him. Fitzgerald adds that Tom also used his wealth to
take advantage of others by offering to buy them things.” This synthesis was very vague
compared to the one above. It talked about how the different ways Tom used his wealth but
didn’t show how this difference connects to my thesis. Another aspect of writing that I struggled
with was my thesis. For example, in my “Great Gatsby Symbolism Essay” my thesis was graded
in the proficient level meaning that it appeared in the first paragraph and establishes a topic and
claim, “In the novel The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald, the idea of success based on wealth
is questioned. The Great Gatsby displays a contradiction of wealth; for Tom, wealth is success,
while Gatsby views wealth as a means to success.” I explained what the contradiction was and
used that as the guide for the rest of my essay. In order to improve this I need to establish a more
complex claim.
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Next semester I really want to work on adding more complexity to my claims so that I
can broaden the topics I write about but doing so using specific examples. I also really want to
focus on my analysis and synthesis. Working on improving my analysis will help me connect my
evidence to my thesis making sure my ideas are clear and make sense. I also want to work on
synthesizing my sources. The Great Gatsby synthesis essay was the first time I had ever
synthesized sources. After looking at the rubric and seeing what I did wrong I now understand
more of what synthesis really is. As far as grading I want to continue to build off of my
improvements from the first semester, my goal is to get more of my skills in the advanced