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Professor Doutherd
English 5M
October 18, 2017
Revision Summary
Going based off on the peer review comments and revisions, there were a few
things that needed to be changed and added on the Rhetorical Analysis paper. To start off
in part 2 of the essay, the bullet point that consisted of stating how exigence, context, and
audience were perceived were missing. Therefore those details were added in with
explanation and detail. Also in part 2 there was a point where personal style was being
used and that had to be changed to detached impersonal style to make the essay sound
formal from that point and on. The requirements for this writing assignment were to
make sure to have 2 quotes and 2 paraphrases throughout parts 1 and 3. One paraphrase
was missing in draft one and now it is missing none. Last but not least the essay was
reread to make sure there were little to no grammatical errors that made the writing
difficult to understand. What was done was that a few sentence word choices were moved
around because they did not sound grammatically correct. There were a few that were
pointed out on the comments written on the draft 1 essay and were addressed. Not much
was changed in part 3 besides grammatical errors because no comments needed to be
addressed in that section. Overall with the few changes that were made the 2nd draft is
more understandable and now has all requirements included in it.
PART 3
In high school, when a writing assignment is turned in it tends to look perfect until it is
actually reread months or years later. Looking back at the essay that was chosen in part 1, it
would not be a good idea to turn it in to an instructor in the Arts and Humanity field. In the
article, Writing and Reading without Authority by Anna M Penrose and Cheryl Geisler, Janet
and Rogers style of analyzing claims are different. For him, reading was a process of
identifying, sorting, and evaluating the claims made by the authorsJanets goal, however, was
not to evaluate claims but to search for facts(509-510). Looking back at the essay from part 1,
the claim was not thoroughly evaluated. The essays requirement was to show textual evidence
based on the claim and that is all that was done, instead of further analyzing the claim. Another
reason why it would not be a great idea to turn in the essay is because its missing more of the
personal style and flow. Incorporating a personal experience in the paper which proved the
author wrong would have made the essay argumentative and more interesting. Last but not least
there are excessive grammatical errors that can be fixed.
Writing over the years makes you realize how much improvement you have made.
Principles that must be kept in mind for future writing assignments is to keep the intended
purpose and audience in mind. Doing so will allow for the reader to fully understand what is
trying to be said and understand the overall goal. In Rhetorical Situations and Their Constituents
by Keith Grant Davie, Davie states, I include objectives as part of the exigence for a discourse
because resolving the exigence provides powerful motivation for the rhetor(353). Keeping the
purpose and goal clear will be beneficial to others. Getting comfortable with asking questions
and challenging the claims of the authors is another principle that needs to be practiced. This
will lead to the learning on how to better analyze readings. Even though the chosen essay was
not good enough to turn in, at least the principles are in mind to better improve for future writing
assignments.