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Due to individual needs, people are increasingly seeking green spaces to relax,
breathe, and exercise.That is why the park has become a popular place for all
ages, not only because of its space but also because it is a place that can be
easily accessed by everyone without costing a lot of money. Unfortunately, the
more people that come here, the more problems there will be, such as waste
problems or a lack of infrastructure. There are some solutions that will be covered
in this essay to try to solve this problem that now exists in Hanoi’s parks.

 Most parks have the impression of being surrounded by a cool green color.The
parks have lots of trees, and that is the thing that will bring people to a green,
fresh-air place to feel relaxed every time they are there. The reason why we
always feel cool and comfortable in the park is because there is always a small
lake inside the park, where the steam rises and is pushed by the wind to release
cool air into the space. In addition, the coolness also comes from the shadow of
the big trees. Moreover, some infrastructure is provided by the government, which
will help the citizens have a place to exercise. Nowadays, people find that working
out in the park is more interesting than doing it at home.

The park is a green and clean space, but that is just what I used to be. Because
this is a public space, many people will come here, which means there will be
many problems.There are two problems that exist in the park at this time: trash
and infrastructure, which can affect the quality of everyone’s experience here. The
biggest issue with which people should be most concerned is the issue of the
increasing number of people littering in the park. Most people are unaware of the
importance of environmental protection; they throw garbage wherever they go,
even if a trash can is nearby.People can easily see trash cans around the park, but
due to a lack of awareness and laziness, they still decide to litter on the grass,
ground, or even into the lake, which will lead to water pollution. It is difficult to
collect garbage in the water, so it will directly affect the green space of the park.
One way to deal with this problem is that the government should increase
awareness and educate people about the harmful effects of littering.

This could be done by putting up warning signs about the harmful effects of
improperly dumping garbage that will affect the public space and, worse, the
environment. The government should also emphasize penalties for those who
intentionally litter; if found, that person should be punished appropriately. To do
that, surveillance cameras are essential. Moreover, people can create
environmental campaigns, such as exchanging plastic bottles to be properly
recycled, but also help people have more interest in and awareness about planting
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Another issue the park faces is the lack of infrastructure. Nowadays, people often
choose to exercise outdoors, not only running and cycling, but the thing that
attracts them the most is the free exercise equipment at the park because it is
suitable for everyone’s budget. However, many people come, but there are few
machines; they will have to wait for their turn for a long time. A possible solution to
this issue would be the addition of devices by the government and their placement
around the park, not focusing on one place because many people practicing in the
same palace will lose the airy atmosphere. These changes will make public places
more popular not only with the older generation but also with young people.

In conclusion, if the park wants to become popular, then change for the better is
necessary at this time. The sooner the change is made, the more the park will
attract more people, not only the elderly but also the youngsters.

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