PROJECT-1

Project Title : Deconstruct Essay Structure

Project Description : This project aims at internalizing the essay structure, unity and
coherence. The students in pairs evaluate the assigned essay.

Output : A video recorded of presenting evaluation results, that is

published on Youtube. Then the link is linked to LMS
unram.ac.id. The analysis results with this template should be
submitted after completing the analysis.

Time : 10-16 March 2023

TASK#1 : Analyze the essay structure with the following template. This template can
be modified to adjust the essay structure. The procedures are retyping the text
(make sure it looks like the original text), and give the number of each
sentence.

Book Title : Bahasa Inggris work in progress

Grade : 12
Genre : Academic
Page : 149-150
Group : 14
Members : Lisa Juniarti (E1D022206)
M.Faizal Wirinata (E1D022110)

Class :2D
Introductory paragraph Sentences in the essay
1. Hook The hook is interesting because in the first sentence
the author has made the reader curious about what is
being discussed, namely the Baduy tribe.
2. Background Info Because the author wants to provide information that
in indonesia there is a secret group that rejects the
world in the current era of globalization.
3. Thesis Statement There are communities that have turned away from
modern technology. The thesis statement is strong
because gives the authors opinion or states an
important idea about the topic.
Main Body Paragraphs
1. Main point_1 Living in voluntary isolation
a. Supporting Because they are a secretive group who turn away
point_1.1 outsiders.
i) Details The Baduy Luar act as a buffer zone to stop visitors from entering the sacred
Inner circle, Baduy Dalam.
 b. Supporting_1.2 Society rules
2. Main point_2 Prohibition of bringing electronic devices for visitors
a. Supporting_2.1 usually visitors who are stubborn sometimes ignore
the ban, so that they often get into trouble
Concluding Paragraph
1. Summary Yes there is a summary
2. Restatement of No, there is no restatement
thesis statement
3. Prediction in Yes there is a suggestion
future/suggestion

TASK#2: Evaluate the unity and coherence of the assigned essay with the following
criteria and template!

a) Explain whether all the sentences within the paragraphs are

connected or not.
b) If they are connected, what makes all the sentences
connected (cohesive devices: signal words, pronoun,
repetition, deletion)

Introductory SENTENCES Remark Cohesive Arguments

Paragraph Devices
Sentences 1 & 2 Little more than Connected What Because the
three hours away is/are the author wants to
from Jakarta there is cohesive tell you that in
a traditional devices indonesia there is
community that has a community that
turned their back has turned away
away from modern from modern
technology. They technology like
don't own phones, now.
use the Internet,
wear shoes or listen
to the radio.
Sentences 2 & 3 They don't own Unconnected What Because the
phones, use the is/are the second sentences
Internet, wear shoes cohesive talks about
or listen to the radio. devices technology that
Living in voluntary they don’t have
isolation, they are a while the third
secretive group who sentence talks
turn away outsiders. about their
rejection of
outsiders.
Sentences 3 & 4 Living in voluntary Connected What Because the third
isolation, they are a is/are the and fourth
 secretive group who cohesive sentences both
turn away outsiders. devices deseribe a
This group lives close community called
to the city of Banten the baduy tribe.
and they are known
as the Baduy people.
Main Body
Paragraphs
PARAGRAPH 1
Sentences 1 & 2 Generally, the Baduy Connected Because the first
are divided into two sentence
groups: the Baduy generally informs
Dalam and the that the Baduy
Baduy Luar. The tribe is divided
Baduy Luar act as a into 2 and the
buffer zone to stop second sentence
visitors from explains the
entering the Sacred function of one of
Inner circle, the the Baduy tribe
Baduy Dalam. groups
Sentences 2 & 3 The Baduy Luar act Connected Because the
as a buffer zone to second sentence
stop visitors from explains the
entering the Sacred function of one of
Inner circle, the the groups and
Baduy Dalam. Even the third
though both groups sentence tells us
are barefoot, it is so that one of the
easy to differentiate groups is easy to
them. distinguish
Sentences 3 & 4 Even though both Connected Because the third
groups are barefoot, sentence tells
it is so easy to that this group
differentiate them. can be
Baduy Dalam wear distinguished and
white and black cloth the fourth
as clothing, sentence explains
meanwhile Baduy that the Baduy
Luar wear black and group can be
other colors of distinguished
clothing just like us from the clothes
they wear.
Sentences 4 & 5 Baduy Dalam wear Connected Because the
white and black cloth fourth sentence
as clothing, tells how to
meanwhile Baduy distinguish the
Luar wear black and group and the
 other colors of fifth sentence the
clothing just like us. author tells the
Some people say opinion of some
that the black cloth people why one
the Baduy Luar of the groups
people wear is an uses the clothes
indication that they they wear and
are not pure explains why they
anymore, that they wear clothes like
are breaking some that.
rules of the
community, such as
their willingness to
accept modern
influence into their
daily lives.
PARAGRAPH 2
Sentences 1 & 2 Right after we go Connected Because in the
into the outermost first sentence the
village of Baduy author tells us
called Kaduketu, we that when we
can sense a different enter the village,
atmosphere straight. we will feel a
away. We can see different
middle-aged women atmosphere and
walking around with in the second
a log over their sentence the
shoulder and kids author explains
chasing each other what kind of
with big smiles on atmosphere is in
their face. the village
Sentences 2 & 3 We can see middle- Unconnected Because in the
aged women walking second sentence
around with a log the writer
over their shoulder explains the
and kids chasing atmosphere,
each other with big while in the third
smiles on their face. sentence the
Traditional Baduy writer
houses in Kaduketu immediately
are made of bamboo diverts the
that is bound with conversation to
rattan wood. the traditional
house there
Sentences 3 & 4 Traditional Baduy Connected Because in the
houses in Kaduketu third sentence
are made of bamboo the author talks
 that is bound with about traditional
rattan wood. It is houses made of
impossible to find a bamboo and the
concrete house fourth sentence
inside Baduy tells that there
territory. are no houses
made of concrete

CONNECTION Explain what makes

BETWEEN the paragraphs are
PARAGRAPH connected
Concluding
Paragraph

c) Identify the number of sentences in the paragraphs. Then

classify them into four categories (a. simple sentence; b.
compound sentence; c. complex sentence; and compound-
complex sentence) by using the following table.

Introductory Simple Sentence Compound Sentence Complex Compound-

Paragraph Sentence Complex Sentence
Sentence 1 Little more than
three hours away
from Jakarta there is
a traditional
community that has
turned their back
away from modern
technology.

Sentence 2 They don't own

phones, use the
Internet, wear shoes
or listen to the radio.
Sentence 3 Living in voluntary
isolation, they are
a secretive group
who turn away
outsiders.
Sentence 4 This group lives close
to the city of Banten
and they are known
as the Baduy people.
Main Body
Paragraphs
PARAGRAPH 1
Sentence 1 Generally, the
 Baduy are divided
into two groups:
the Baduy Dalam
and the Baduy
Luar.
Sentence 2 The Baduy Luar
act as a buffer
zone to stop
visitors from
entering the
Sacred Inner
circle, the Baduy
Dalam.
Sentence 3 Even though both
groups are
barefoot, it is so
easy to
differentiate them.
Sentence 4 Baduy Dalam wear
white and black cloth
as clothing,
meanwhile Baduy
Luar wear black and
other colors of
clothing just like us.
Sentence 5 Some people say
that the black cloth
the Baduy Luar
people wear is an
indication that they
are not pure
anymore, that they
are breaking some
rules of the
community, such as
their willingness to
accept modern
influence into their
daily lives.
PARAGRAPH 2
Sentence 1 Right after we go
into the
outermost village
of Baduy
called Kaduketu,
we can sense a
different
atmosphere
straight away.
Sentence 2 We can see middle-
aged women walking
 around with a log
over their shoulder
and kids chasing each
other with big smiles
on their face.
Sentence 3 Traditional Baduy
houses in Kaduketu
are made of bamboo
that is bound with
rattan wood.
Sentence 4 It is impossible to
find a concrete house
inside Baduy territory
PARAGRAPH 3
Sentence 1 With many great
views and fresh
air, Baduy offers a
lot of things for us
to explore
Sentence 2 You can take a bath
down the river or
simply walk around,
observing the
interesting Baduy's
daily life
Sentence 3 The Baduy relies on
farming to meet their
daily needs.
Sentence 4 During harvest
season, they will
keep their paddy
into the barn
CONNECTION Explain what makes
BETWEEN the paragraphs are
PARAGRAPH connected
Concluding
Paragraph
Sentence 1 If we're thinking
about what to do
when we come
here,then we need
not worry because
there are lots on
offer, like enjoying
the true relaxing
times and the
feeling of being
isolated from
modern technology
and man-made
things.
Sentence 2 One favorite thing
to do might be
observing
communal life in
the settlement.
Sentence 3 It is a very relaxing
experience and
sometimes visitors
find themselves
missing the
simplicity and
beauty of the place.

GROUPS AND TASK

Bookss Page Topics Group

Bahasa Inggris 11-12 Cristiano Ronaldo 1
Kelas X
34-36 Task 3 Read and 2
Rearanggement
109-110 Expository Text 1 3
110-112 Expository Text 2 4
135-136 Little Red Riding Hood 5
137-140 Little Red Riding Hood 6
(Part 2)
Bahasa Inggris 28-30 Bullying: A Cancer that 7
Kelas IX must be eradicated
50-51 Speech at the opening of 8
the Bandung Conference
92-93 Letter to God 9
Bahasa Inggris 180-182 Parents upset and 10
Kelas XII disappointed with online
school registration
134-136 Persian Pottery 11
102-103 Task 1 (Tsunami) 12
114-115 Teenage Bullying 13
149-150 Task 2 14