Memoir Common Assessment Task

TERM 1

Student Name: Ian Okot

This COMMON ASSESSMENT TASK will be used to measure your achievement against the skills and understandings
we studied during this learning sequence.

You are required to complete each part of this assessment, and finish within the 3 periods allocated.

You need to work through the assessment from beginning to end, using the scaffolds and instructions included with
each part of the task.

Use your rubric and feedback from your teacher to guide you from one part of the assessment to the next.

Complete the thinking document by hand first.

Once you start typing your piece, make sure you read over each paragraph, looking for better words and deleting
unrelated ideas. Once you have finished, edit your writing by fixing up the grammar, punctuation and spelling as be
can.

This is an independent task but you may ask questions to clarify the requirements of the task. Remember that your
teacher will NOT do the work for you; he/she will help you with the thinking you need to employ to complete the w

Remember to organise your time appropriately so you can complete as much of the assessment task as possible in
time given.

You are permitted to use the following resources during the Common Assessment Task:
 Computer
 Your Writer’s Notebook
 A completed ‘Thinking Document’
 Dictionary
 A Reviewing and Editing Checklist

During the Common Assessment Task period, the conditions you will work under will be:
 Individual and silent work
 All work to be carried out during class
 Conferencing with the teacher

Common Assessment Task Overview

Write a memoir by expanding a ‘seed’ idea from your writer’s notebook. First, complete the ‘Thinking Docume
hand and then use a computer to draft, revise and edit your memoir.

Subject: ENGLISH Year Level: Year 7

BEFORE HANDING IN YOUR WORK, SIGN THE FOLLOWING DECLARATION:

I declare that this assessment is my individual work after seeking and receiving feedback from my peers and
teacher. I have not copied from another student’s work or from any other source, except where due
acknowledgement is made explicit, nor has any part been written or completed for me by another person.
Student Name: Ian Okot
Student Signature
Date: 29/03/2023
 Year 7 Memoir Thinking Document
Your task is to write a memoir. Before you begin, complete this thinking document:
Summarise the In my primary school I and my friends when to hoop time and play about 6 different
event you will matches on basketball we won 4, lost 2 and tied 1 but we made it to districts.
be writing
about:
Where and And a basketball stadium
when did this
event take Last year in the second semester
place?

List some of the Basketball ring

people and Friends (Tadhg Nathaniel Stefan Blaze William
objects you are Other school students
going to
describe in
detail:

List some of the Happy

thoughts and Nervous
feelings you Mad
had at the time Scared
of the event:

List some of the Happy

thoughts and Nervous Proud
feelings you Happy
now have Laughter
looking back on
that event:

Reflect on the
moment.

Explain why
this event was Because that day was the day I could show my friends my basketball skills
significant to
you:

Was it a ‘first’ Yes it was very competitive and interesting

experience?

Did the event

teach you Yes to always be ready and practise a lot
something?

Have you
changed since Yes I have been practising even more and now I’m better then before
then? How?

Think about
structure:
How will you
begin your It was the day I was waiting for a day I was ready to play basketball and expectedly a day to
memoir? have fun.

Will you start

with dialogue
or grab your Get my readers attention so they will get interested
reader’s
attention with a
surprise?

How will you

end your piece?
This was a day I would never forget

What title could

you give your Hoop Time!
piece?

Show your teacher your completed thinking document before you start
your first draft.

Good luck!

Use the Reviewing and Editing checklist below to revise your work before
your final submission.
 Reviewing & Editing Checklist
Before submitting your memoir check and tick off the following:
Tick
1. Does my memoir contain a clear beginning, middle and end?

2. Is my memoir written in clear paragraphs, each containing one

main idea?

3. Do some of my sentences start with time phrases?

4. Does my memoir contain detailed descriptions of people,

places and things?

5. Does my memoir contain noun groups?

6. Does my memoir contain strong, specific verbs?

7. Does my memoir contain original similes and/or metaphors?

8. Is my memoir written in the first person throughout?

9. Have I used the RadarRADaR to review and improve my

writing?

10. Have I edited my work for spelling, punctuation and grammar

errors? Some things to consider are:
 Spelling patterns
 Verb agreements
 Apostrophes
 Sentence and clause punctuation (capital letters,
commas and full stops)
 Hoop Time!

It was the day I was waiting for a day I was ready to play basketball and expectedly a day to have fun, It was Hoop
Time. At my primary school we got invited to a basketball event and when I heard about it, I was very excited, and my
friend were to. Me and my friends Tadhg, Nathaniel, Stefan, Blaze, William, Aideen, and Damon were put in a team
as the all-star boys because my teacher knew we were the best players and we all decided on what position we were
going to be in. I was a point guard, and my friends were others we all got ready, and we practiced everyday during the
lunch breaks we had till it was time.

Finally, it was Hoop Time, and my school went to Dandenong stadium which also was a stadium, friend Tadhg plays
a club for called Dandy Ranger and he is known as the best on his team. We arrived there and straight away we started
practising, getting our the positions ready and seeing who will be off and on in subs. The first game started and we
were vising an all-girls school we got in 4 hoops in the first half and got 3 In the last half. My friend Tadhg was filling
so confident that he when for a shot last second and went for a buzzer beater. 321 and he Got it in the hoop we felt so
happy for the first match and were hipped for the l next one. The was 2 more matches left and we were confident for
it.
The on second match we were vising Narre warren all-star boys and they looked like professionally. The match started
and we were on a bad started. They got the ball first and got the first goal. And it was 2-0 in the first half was our
defend was not good, the last half we tired, and I got a lucky shot and scored when there was about onl20 seconds left.
Luckily, we won but it was a very hard match and difficult.

We had the last match and in the first half we got the ball and got a goal. We were off to a good start, but when all off
a sudden in the first half there for 3 goals but only scored 2 times it was weird. We went for the last half match scored
2 but in the last 30 seconds they scored about 2 but the scores showed they got 3 goals. The lady that was putting the
scores put an extra point and we did not get the win.
Hoop time was fun and I got to show out my skills.