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OVERALL BAND SCORE 7.5 5+8+8+9

SEE BELOW C&C LR GRA MODEL ANSWER
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Some people believe that no one should do the same job for all their
working life. Others argue that doing the same job brings advantages
for individuals, companies, and society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from
your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
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Original answer -
Opinions are divided on whether one should dedicate their life to a

single job or company or change their jobs frequently. In my view,
although staying at one job for an extended period of time can have
some benefits, it would be better to pursue advantageous opportunities,
at other companies or even in other fields, in the event that they
present themselves.
On the one hand, remaining loyal to a single employer can bring about
certain benefits, particularly in terms of financial stability and promotion
opportunities. Regarding the former, individuals who are employed by a
single company for the entire duration of their professional career
typically can expect to receive a stable income, which most often
increases over time along with the greater value and experience they
bring to the company. Having a high income allows salaried workers to
afford significantly nicer standards of living, such as luxury apartments or
expensive personal interests and hobbies, all of which can promote their
overall satisfaction with life. Furthermore, people who stick with their
employer for the long haul should fully understand core values of their
organization, and beyond that, their contributions and abilities are far
more likely to be recognized by their superiors and colleagues. As a
result, such devoted staff naturally earn the trust of their organization,
and are often considered first for promotion opportunities.
On the other hand, I believe that striking while the iron is hot, and
changing jobs somewhat frequently, can offer a wide range of benefits,
in terms of providing a chance for personal growth by acquiring new
skills and having more diverse experiences, eventually landing on the
most optimal career path possible. For starters, working in different
environments and industries can be extremely beneficial to one’s
lifelong career development. For example, only after accumulating
sufficient experience can one secure a high-paying job that matches
their values and long-term mission. In addition, many people struggle to
find the perfect job right out the gate, immediately after graduation.
Research has shown that a large number of students have no idea what
they will do upon finishing their degree and are not sure whether their
future career would be directly related to their major. Therefore,
through gaining experience in a diverse range of positions early in life,
graduates may come to understand themselves, their career goals, and
their personal aptitudes to a far higher level, thereby equipping
themselves with the necessary tools to choose the right path for the rest
of their lives.
In conclusion, I support the idea of being free to pursue diverse areas of

interest in work as it enables individuals to acquire new skills and
experiences, as well as find a career that is both fulfilling and
meaningful.
OVERALL BAND SCORE 7.5 5+8+8+9

TR – Task Response nb – GRA and LR errors have not been corrected
Band score 5
I’m sceptical about the original wording here. The word job implies not
just the same company but no promotion, so it’s just daft. You
mentioned both but generally assumed it meant one company, which is
reasonable. After all, if you’re talking about loyalty, it’s to a company,
not a job.
Important parts of the question are not addressed.
Some people believe that no one should do the same job for all their
working life. Others argue that doing the same job brings advantages
for individuals, companies, and society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
This question is difficult as it mentions Individuals/ companies/ society –

so that forces you to write a long paragraph, which you did, but you only
mentioned individuals.
You didn’t say anything about whether no one should do the same job
[…] , or about companies and society, so you only partially answered the
question, which means the examiner will give you a 5 for TR.
I would look at this question from the perspective of people with

different characters. People who don’t like change, or who prefer
stability in life (typically women, although I might not mention this), are
more likely to stick to one company, while ambitious young men (or
women) are more likely to benefit from opportune moves. Loyalty is
clearly beneficial for employers (companies). As for society, it’s neither
obviously beneficial or harmful. I might make the argument that having
a more highly skilled workforce (ie moving to get experience) is generally

beneficial economically.
If the question had been about sticking to one company or jumping from
one to another occasionally, I’d give you 7 as it’s not really clear why the
ideas in main body paragraph 2 outweigh those in main body paragraph
1. It’s also over general as you’re assuming that one approach is suitable
for everyone.
ADVICE ON BRAINSTORMING FOR TASK 2

As you’re planning and writing your answer, remember to constantly
ask yourself if you’re answering the question. Check back to the
question a few times as you think of ideas to make sure they’re Deleted: '
directly relevant.
• Make sure your introduction directly addresses the question.
• Make sure your ideas address all parts of the question. If the
question asks for solutions, in the plural, you must suggest at
least 2.
• Make sure your main ideas, as stated in the first sentence of the
main body paragraphs, are directly relevant to the question.
• Make sure your supporting ideas, which follow the main ideas in
the main body paragraphs, directly support the main idea.
• Make sure your supporting ideas are developed, which means
there should be more information in the form of evidence,
reasons, and/or examples.
• Very often, the optimum number of supporting ideas is 2. This
allows you to develop your ideas and your less likely to have
isolated, unsupported ideas that could get you a 6 for TR.
“some may be undeveloped/unclear” – band score 6 TR.
• Be especially careful if you’ve answered similar question before,

as there will always be important differences.
• Make sure your conclusion directly answers the question, that
it is consistent with the ideas in the main bodies, and that it
does not contradict the introduction.

single job or company or change their jobs frequently. In my view, Commented [TG1]: The question
although staying at one job for an extended period of time can have doesn’t suggest this, and in fact, the
some benefits, it would be better to pursue advantageous opportunities, second proposal is that sticking to one
at other companies or even in other fields, in the event that they job benefits x,y, & z
present themselves. Commented [TG2]: Ok, but I hope
On the one hand, remaining loyal to a single employer can bring about you’re going to refer to companies and
certain benefits, particularly in terms of financial stability and promotion society – I’d mention them in the
introduction
single company for the entire duration of their professional career Commented [TG3]: Good main
typically can expect to receive a stable income, which most often idea. I hope you’re going to mention
companies, and society
expensive personal interests and hobbies, all of which can promote their
overall satisfaction with life. Furthermore, people who stick with their
organization, and beyond that, their contributions and abilities are far
and are often considered first for promotion opportunities. Commented [TG4]: Relevant
supporting ideas
changing jobs somewhat frequently, can offer a wide range of benefits, Commented [TG5]: This only
in terms of providing a chance for personal growth by acquiring new vague refers to the advantages to the
company
most optimal career path possible. For starters, working in different Commented [TG6]: Good main
environments and industries can be extremely beneficial to one’s idea, but I hope you’re going to
address the words no one from the
question

Research has shown that a large number of students have no idea what Commented [TG7]: I know you
they will do upon finishing their degree and are not sure whether their didn’t quote figures, but:
future career would be directly related to their major. Therefore, I don’t recommend supporting your
through gaining experience in a diverse range of positions early in life, main ideas with bogus research. Even
graduates may come to understand themselves, their career goals, and if it’s real, the examiner will assume it’s
their personal aptitudes to a far higher level, thereby equipping made up. Research shows that 90% of
research in IELTS answers is made up.
The problem is that you can support
of their lives.
any daft idea with made up research.
In conclusion, I support the idea of being free to pursue diverse areas of Eg Another benefit of being a gamer is
interest in work as it enables individuals to acquire new skills and that playing computer games makes
experiences, as well as find a career that is both fulfilling and you more attractive to the opposite
meaningful. sex. One recent study showed that
individuals who play computer games
are 50% more likely to have a hot
girlfriend. Also, see here
Commented [TG8]: Relevant
supporting ideas, but you didn’t
address the question of whether this
practice is suitable for everyone
Commented [TG9]: Ok but what
about people who don’t like change
and who prefer stability. Also, what
about companies and society?
C&C - Cohesion and Coherence nb GRA and LR errors have not been
corrected
Band score 8
The organisation is excellent and easy to follow.
The paragraphs have a natural flow of ideas and clear central topics.
Use of cohesive devices with only minor errors.
The paragraphs have a natural flow which is characteristic of high band

score answer.
Inaccuracies are rare.
Opinions are divided on whether one should dedicate one’s life to a Deleted: their
single job or company or change one’s job frequently. In my view, Deleted: their
although staying at one job for an extended period of time can have
Deleted: s
at other companies or even in other fields, in the event that they
present themselves. Commented [TG10]: Good
sentence
opportunities. Regarding the former, individuals who are employed by a Commented [TG11]: Good topic
single company for the entire duration of their professional career sentence
afford significantly nicer standards of living, which means having things Deleted: such as
like luxury apartments or expensive personal interests and hobbies, all

of which can promote their overall satisfaction with life. Furthermore,
people who stick with their employer for the long haul should fully
understand core values of their organization, and beyond that, their
contributions and abilities are far more likely to be recognized by their
superiors and colleagues. As a result, such devoted staff naturally earn
the trust of their organization, and are often considered first for
promotion opportunities. Commented [TG12]: Good
most optimal career path possible. For starters, working in different Commented [TG13]: Good topic
environments and industries can be extremely beneficial to one’s sentence
lifelong career development. For example, only after accumulating Commented [TG14]: A bit
sufficient experience can one secure a high-paying job that matches informal. I’d save this for speaking
one’s values and long-term mission. In addition, many people struggle to Commented [TG15]: Don’t mix
find the perfect job right out the gate, immediately after graduation. a one and they/their/them in one
large number of students have no idea what they will do upon finishing sentence
their degree and are not sure whether their future career would be Deleted: their
directly related to their major. Therefore, through gaining experience in Deleted: Research has shown that
a diverse range of positions early in life, graduates may come to
understand themselves, their career goals, and their personal aptitudes
to a far higher level, thereby equipping themselves with the necessary
tools to choose the right path for the rest of their lives. Commented [TG17]: Good
coherent sentences
meaningful.
LR- - Lexical resource nb Some GRA errors have not been corrected
Band score 8
Vocabulary is used accurately with sufficient flexibility to show precise
meaning, and with only minor inaccuracies, which is good for a band
score 8.
Note my suggestions which show structures that would help to get a
band score 9.

single job or company or change their jobs frequently. In my view,
Commented [TG18]: Better
although staying at one job for an extended period of time can have without this – redundant
Commented [TG19]: Simpler and
at other companies or even in other fields, in the event that they better: when
present themselves. Deleted: career
On the one hand, remaining loyal to a single employer can bring about Deleted: income
certain benefits, particularly in terms of financial stability and promotion Commented [TG20]: This is a bit
opportunities. Regarding the former, individuals who are employed by a unnatural. I’d just use afford with a
single company for the entire duration of their professional careers modal – I can’t afford.
typically can expect to receive a stable incomes, which most often I’d just say have / enjoy here
increases over time along with the greater value and experience they Commented [TG21]: Simpler and
bring to the company. Having a high income allows salaried workers to better: a better standard of living/ a
middle-class life
Commented [TG22]: See C&C
expensive personal interests and hobbies, all of which can promote their Commented [TG23]: Better: and
overall satisfaction with life. Furthermore, people who stick with their provide the best for their families
organizations, and beyond that, their contributions and abilities are far Deleted: organization
On the other hand, I believe that striking while the iron is hot, and Commented [TG24]: This looks a
changing jobs somewhat frequently, can offer a wide range of benefits, bit forced
skills and having more diverse experiences, eventually landing on the Commented [TG25]: If you want
most optimal career path possible. For starters, working in different an idiom, maybe when opportunities to
move arise, one should seize the day in
order to […]
Commented [TG26]: I’d use it as a
non-countable noun – more varied
their values and long-term mission. In addition, many people struggle to experience
Research has shown that a large number of students have no idea what Commented [TG27]: See C&C
they want to do upon finishing their degree and are not sure whether Commented [TG28]: Simpler and
their future careers would be directly related to their majors. Therefore, better: after graduating
by gaining experience in a diverse range of positions early in life, Deleted: will do
graduates may come to understand themselves, their career goals, and Deleted: career
Deleted: major
Commented [TG29]: Wide
of their lives.
Deleted: through
experiences, as well as find a career that is both fulfilling and Commented [TG30]: Maybe
meaningful. develop / pursue
GRA - Grammatical range and accuracy nb Some LR errors have not

been corrected
Band score 9
Grammar is used accurately a wide variety of structures, which should
be good for a band score 9.
Punctuation is use correctly throughout.
Appropriate structures are used throughout.
Opinions are divided on whether one should dedicate their life to a Commented [TG31]: This is
single job or company or change their jobs frequently. In my view, correct, as should is in the question.
although staying at one job for an extended period of time can have I’d probably say it is better to
some benefits, it would be better to pursue advantageous opportunities Commented [TG32]: No comma
at other companies or even in other fields, in the event that they Deleted: ,
present themselves.
single company for the entire duration of their professional career

expensive personal interests and hobbies, all of which can promote their Commented [TG33]: See C&C
overall satisfaction with life. Furthermore, people who stick with their See LR
employer for the long haul should fully understand core values of their Commented [TG34]: Better: get
organization, and beyond that, their contributions and abilities are far to / will
most optimal career path possible. For starters, working in different
Research has shown that a large number of students have no idea what
they will do upon finishing their degree and are not sure whether their Commented [TG35]: See LR
future career would be directly related to their major. Therefore,
through gaining experience in a diverse range of positions early in life,
graduates may come to understand themselves, their career goals, and
of their lives.

meaningful.
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IELTS Corrections Page 1 of 15

OVERALL BAND SCORE 7.5 5+8+8+9

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Write at least 250 words.

Opinions are divided on whether one should dedicate their life to a

In conclusion, I support the idea of being free to pursue diverse areas of

OVERALL BAND SCORE 7.5 5+8+8+9

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

This question is difficult as it mentions Individuals/ companies/ society –

I would look at this question from the perspective of people with

a more highly skilled workforce (ie moving to get experience) is generally

ADVICE ON BRAINSTORMING FOR TASK 2

• Be especially careful if you’ve answered similar question before,

Opinions are divided on whether one should dedicate their life to a

sufficient experience can one secure a high-paying job that matches

The paragraphs have a natural flow which is characteristic of high band

Inaccuracies are rare.

like luxury apartments or expensive personal interests and hobbies, all

Opinions are divided on whether one should dedicate their life to a

GRA - Grammatical range and accuracy nb Some LR errors have not

afford significantly nicer standards of living, such as luxury apartments or

In conclusion, I support the idea of being free to pursue diverse areas of

None available for the question you did

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