OET Preparation Guide and Sample Corrections by DR Che

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Dr Che OET writing correction samples

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10 sample 8 (Nursing) 72
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Greeting:
Original Rewrite
18/06/18 Dr Jason Robert

Dr Jason Robert Gastroenterologist
Gastroenterologist Newtown Hospital
Newtown Hospital 111 High Street
111 High Street Newtown Newtown
Dear Dr Robert
Re:Ms Anne Hall DOB: 19/09/72 18 June 2018
Dear Dr Robert,
Re: Ms Anne Hall, DOB: 19/09/72
Goop points:
A good start,
Weak points:

Remember there are different correct options for OET greeting,
Let us stick to only one from today, it would save our time, while writing the letters.
Putting date at the start is not wrong, but my proposed options is more frequent in OET letters
There are different correct ways to write a date, yours is correct but a better and more liked way to
write the date in OET is day in digits month in words year in digits (e.g. 5 December 2020) It is
advised to stick to only one style to save your time. (this is about today’s date, mean before Dear Dr
….., )
Comma after Dear Dr…..,
Comma after Re; Mr………….,
Leave a blank line before and after date
Put Newtown on the next line
Purpose:
Original Rewrite

Thank you for seeing Ms Hall, a 42-year-old Thank you for seeing Ms Hall, a 42-year-old
secondary school teacher, who I suspect has secondary school teacher, who I suspect has
a gastro-oesophageal reflux with possible gastro-oesophageal reflux with a possible
structure. I would appreciate your further structure. I would appreciate your further
assessment and endoscopy if required. assessment and an endoscopy, if required.
Goop points:
A good try to make a concise and clear purpose
, a 42-year-old (good grammar point, it is good, we use hyphens here)
Weak points:
(like in OET official samples, they write age and occupation here in the purpose) if we put, it is not
wrong, , but I usually prefer to avoid it, because BOB or age is already given in the above line,
who I suspect has a gastro-oesophageal reflux with possible structure.
(Remember we don’t need to mention ourself “I” “me” at again and again, if we mention it is not wrong,
but to make our letters more formal we would avoid them and use passive voice where possible to make
it more formal.
, whose signs and symptoms are suggestive of gastro-oesophageal reflux with a possible stricture. (this
is a far better option)
and an endoscopy, if required.

(before procedures like endoscopy, we use article “an”,
“if required” is an extra information in the sentence, we call it non-defining relative, when we use a
non-defining relative clause, we need to put comma before it.
I would appreciate your further assessment and an endoscopy, if required.

( a better option here: ( I would avoid using “I” here)

Your further management and assessment, including a possible endoscopy, would be highly
appreciated.
Our purpose for this letter should look like this:
I am writing to refer Ms Hall, whose signs and symptoms are suggestive of gastro-oesophageal reflux
with a possible stricture. Your further assessment and management, including a possible endoscopy,
would be highly appreciated.
You can also write Thank you for seeing Ms Hall, whose …..
2nd Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
On presentation today, Ms Hall has reported Today, Ms Hall reported that she had a two-
that she had a two weeks history of week history of dysphagia for solid food
dysphagia for solids food which had which appeared after an upper respiratory
appeared after upper respiratory tract tract infection, and she self-medicated
infection, and self-medicated by an over-the herself by an over-the-counter Chinese
counter Chinese herbal product with herbal product with unknown contents. Ms
unknown contents. Ms Hall also complained Hall also complained of an epigastric pain
of epigastric pain which had radiated to back which radiated to the back and T12 level.
and in T12 (..).. There are no sensation of a There was no sensation of a lump and no
lump and no signs of anxiety. She has signs of anxiety. She has recently increased
recently increased her coffee consumption her coffee consumption and takes aspirin 2-3
and take aspirin 2-3 times a month. times a month.
Goop points:
Weak points:
a two- week history (use hyphen like we used in the purpose with age…..
radiated to the back (before parts of the body we use “the” ) the heart, the back , the hand

or we can use his/her ….
which radiated to back and in T12 level. (if was not a reported speech, then we can use which radiates,
here is this case it would be “radiated”
a far better option which we can use in both cases, no need to change according to the tense.
epigastric pain which radiated to the back and in T12 level. (epigastric pain radiating to the back and
T12 level.
There are no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety
(we are talking about today’s visit, … for today’s visit we can use either present or past simple, but we
started using past, at the start and present at the end……
Last sentence is ok.
Today, Ms Hall presented with a two- week history of dysphagia for solid food which appeared after a
possible upper respiratory tract infection, and she self-medicated herself by an over-the-counter Chinese
herbal product with unknown contents. Ms Hall also complained of an epigastric pain which radiated to
the back and T12 level. There was no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety.
3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux,

reflux, Pantoprasol 40mg daily was pantoprazole 40mg daily was prescribed and I
prescribed and I advise to stop takig OTC advise her to stop takig the OTC product and
product and recommended to reduce recommended to reduce her coffee and alchol
coffee and alchol intake. intake.
Please note, Ms Hall has a history of Please note, Ms Hall has a history of dyspepsia
dyspepsia sinces 2012, depression since in 2012, and she has stopped smoking 15 years

2010, and URTI since 2010. She also had ago but drinks spirits on social occasions. She
a family history of a peptic ulcer and also has a family history of peptic ulcer and is
allergic to codeine and sulput dioxide. Her allergic to codeine and sulput dioxide Her
BMI is currently 28.2. current BMI is 28.2.
Goop points:
Weak points:
pantoprazole (look at spelling and and “p” should be small)
Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux, pantoprazole 40mg daily was prescribed and I advise her
to stop takig OTC product and recommended to reduce coffee and alchol intake.
(Medications: whose name is generic , take first small letter vancomycine, omeprazole, pantoprazole,
paracetamol, etc,, if it is trade name or commercial name: then first letter would be capital:
Augmentin, Lipitor, etc)
Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux, pantoprazole 40mg daily was prescribed and I advise her
to stop takig OTC product and recommended to reduce coffee and alchol intake.
We can make this a better paragraph:
Regarding her treatment, she was commenced on pantoprazole 40mg daily and was advised to stop
taking the OTC product. She was also advised to reduce her coffee and alcohol intake.
(look at my paragraph, the information is almost the same as in your paragraph, but here the
information goes smooth, it is coherent and the is quite professional as a doctor.
Please note, Ms Hall has a history of dyspepsia sinces 2012, depression since 2010, and URTI since
2010.
Please note, we use since, when something started in the past and still present,

(Dr Che has had hypertension since 2019. ) It stared in in 2019, I still have HTN.
But here all them (mentioned above, started and ended in the past, and they are not too relevant with
patient’s current condition.
If you wish you can mention “weight reduction,” dyspepsia, use of steroid etc.
Please note, Ms Hall has a history of dyspepsia (2012), and she has stopped smoking 15 years ago but
drinks spirits on social occasions. She also has a family history of peptic ulcer and is allergic to codeine
and sulphur dioxide. Her current BMI is 28.2.
Closing:
Original Rewrite
Please do not hesitate to contact

me if you require any further In light of the above, I would be grateful if you could
information. continue to investigate her condition and provide her
Yours sincerely, with a definitive diagnosis.
Dr XX
Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any
further information.
Yours sincerely,
Doctor
Goop points:
Weak points:
After social history or any other last paragraph, and before .. Please don’t hesitate ……. Line…

We need to restate your purpose, it is just like purpose, but in different style, we must remind the
reader about the purpose at this point,
E.g.
In light of the above, I would be grateful if you could continue to investigate her condition and provide
her with a definitive diagnosis.
Word count: 179

Overall Overall Grade: C-/C
Imagine this student got 350 in writing after 6 letters corrected with me.
Score + (success story no. 6)
Please look at all of above points and look at your errors and my
Advice suggestions 2 to 3 times, then write this letter gain, keeping this letter
in front of you. (I means you write a letter copying from here), don’t
rush to write another letter until you have improved all points
mentioned here.
Really it took me a lot of time to correct your 1st letter, but gradually
you will improve yourself and it would take my less time, I hope so.
Individual scores:
Purpose
Description Grade Your

Score
Purpose of document is immediately apparent and 3
sufficiently expanded as required
Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently 2 2
highlighted or expanded

Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and 1
may show very limited expansion
Description Grade
2. Content

Score
Content is appropriate to intended reader and 7
addresses what is needed to continue care (key
information is included; no important details missing);
content from case notes is accurately represented
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly 5
addresses what is needed to continue care; content
from case notes is generally accurately represented
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 3 or 4
Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; 3
some key
information (about case or to continue care) may be
missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content
Content does not provide intended reader sufficient 1
information
about the case and what is needed to continue care;
key
information is missing or inaccurate
Performance below Band 1 0
3. Conciseness & Clarity

Score
Length of document is appropriate to case and reader 7
(no irrelevant information included); information is
summarised effectively and presented clearly
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and 5
reader; information is mostly summarised effectively
and presented clearly
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4 4
Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from 3
overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only
partially successful
Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of 1
many
unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not
successful
4. Genre& Style
Score
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 7
reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language,
abbreviations and polite language are used
appropriately for document and recipient
reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies;
technical language, abbreviations and polite language
are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies
Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or 3
target reader; over-reliance on technical language and
abbreviations may distract reader
The writing shows inadequate understanding of the 1
genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical
language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader
5. Organisation & Layout

Score
Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical 7
and clear key information is highlighted and sub-
sections are well organized document is well laid out
Organisation and paragraphing are generally 5
appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of
organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key
information; layout is generally good language,
appropriately with minor inconsistencies
Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, 3
creating strain for the reader; key information may not
be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some
lapses
Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; 1
or heavy reliance on case note structure; key
information is not well highlighted and the layout may
not be appropriate
6. Language
Score
Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ 7
grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not
interfere with meaning
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with 5
meaning
Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex 3
structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not
Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for 1
the reader and may interfere with meaning

Greeting
Original Rewrite
Dr. Smith Dr. Smith

Endocrinologist Endocrinologist
City Hospital City Hospital
Newton Newton
10/02/19 10 June19
Dear Dr. Smith, Dear Dr. Smith,

Re: Priya Sharma, DOB: 08.05.58 Re: Priya Sharma, DOB: 8/05/53
Goop points:
Overall good effort
Weak points:
Don’t forget to put comma after Dear Dr …., and after Re: Mrs………,

(different options might be correct, but we have to stick to only one style to save our time in real
exam)
advised to stick to only one style to save your time. (this is about today’s date, mean before Dear Dr
….., )
Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Thank you for seeing Mrs Sharma, a 60-year- Thank you for seeing Mrs Sharma, a 60-
old retired cleric, who is concerned about year-old retired clerk, who is concerned
her uncontrolled blood sugar levels. about her uncontrolled blood sugar levels.
Goop points:
Weak points:
Cleric (may be you have written clerk, but it seems to me that it is “cleric)
She is concerned about her uncontrolled sugars, but what you want the reader to do for her????
You should clearly mention what you want the reader to do. (you may say, I have mentioned
uncontrolled sugars, so the reader will know he has to correct them, but OET requires us to make it
clear to the reader)

Remember if our purpose is not clear, and we get less than 2/3 in purpose, we can’t get grade B, even
if our rest of the letter is perfect.
Also, we have not mentioned the diagnostic of the patient, why her sugar levels are high.
(look at these introductions)
I am writing to refer a 60-year-old diabetic patient, Ms. Sharma, for further management of her uncontrolled
blood sugar levels.
Or
I am writing to refer Mrs Sharma, who has poor glycemic control despite taking her medications. Your
further assessment and management, including control of her sugar levels, would be highly
appreciated.
Or
Thank you for seeing Mrs Sharma, a 60-year-old diabetic patient, for further assessment and
management of her uncontrolled blood sugar levels.
1st body paragraph:
Original Rewrite
Mrs Sharma is married and has 3 Children. Mrs Sharma is married and has 3 children.
She has been suffering from type 2 diabetes She has had type 2 diabetes mellitus since
mellitus since 1999, for which she takes 1999, for which she takes metformin and
metformin and glipizide. Please note, she is glipizide. Please note, she is allergic to
allergic to penicillin. Her family history is penicillin. Her family history is significant
significant for type 2 diabetes mellitus. for type 2 diabetes mellitus.
Goop points:

Overall you have organized social, and past history and family history very well, but it would be far
better if you put this paragraph at the end, before restating the purpose again, before “In light of the
above, …”
Weak points:
Children (you might say it is small c, but it looks capital. )
Putting these information after purpose is not wrong in a letter that is not urgent. But better option is
to put before restating the conclusion. Social history, life style, family history etc, should be mentioned
at the end. According to new OET criteria for writing, after stating the purpose, we should start 2nd
paragraph with the most important and relevant information for the reader. Remember, there are
many model letters written before new criteria and student keep copying them blindly. There are
different ways to write an OET letter, but we will practice the most common and authentic one.
She has been suffering from type 2 diabetes (remember OET don’t like word suffering in letters, you
should use some other words.) She has had type 2 diabetes
2nd Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was
worried regarding her uncontrolled blood worried regarding her uncontrolled blood
sugar levels and reported that her blood sugar levels and reported that her blood
sugar levels were ranging between 6 to 18. sugar levels were ranging from 6 to 18.
Apart a high blood pressure, no other Apart from high blood pressure, no other
abnormality was detected on examination abnormality was detected on examination
of the patient. Therefore, she was of the patient. Therefore, she was
commenced on candesartan 4mg, commenced on candesartan 4mg and some
furthermore, blood tests were ordered. relevant blood tests were ordered.

Goop points:
Your selection of relevant information is excellent, but your unable to communicate this information is
a professional way.
Weak points:
Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was worried regarding her uncontrolled blood sugar levels and
reported that her blood sugar levels were ranging from 6 to 18. (in this sentences we have used blood
sugar levels twice, this is repetition, , our sentence is not too professional and classical as in medical
letters. Also your sentence does not flow smoothly, it is not coherent. Look at the sentence below and
compare
Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma presented to the hospital complaining of uncontrolled blood sugar levels
ranging from 6 to 18.
Apart from high blood pressure, no other abnormality was detected on examination of the patient.
(again this sentence is not too professional,)
Her examination was unremarkable apart from raised blood pressure (155/100).
Therefore, she was commenced on candesartan 4mg, furthermore, blood tests were ordered.
(therefore and furthermore in a same sentence. It is too much. Furthermore is usually not used in OET
letters, we can use Additionally, In addition etc,)

Consequently, she was commenced on candesartan 4mg and some relevant blood tests were ordered.
Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was worried regarding her uncontrolled blood sugar levels and
reported that her blood sugar levels were ranging from 6 to 18. Apart from high blood pressure, no
other abnormality was detected on examination of the patient. Therefore, she was commenced on
candesartan 4mg and some relevant blood tests were ordered.
Original Rewrite
On review two weeks later, Mrs Sharma’s On review two weeks later, Mrs Sharma’s
blood report depicted a raised HbA1c level blood reports showed/revealed a raised
(10%) along with a deranged lipid profile. HbA1c level (10%) along with a deranged
Consequently, she was prescribed lipid profile. Consequently, atorvastatin
atorvastatin 20mg. Moreover, metformin 20mg was added to her medication and
and glipizide doses were increased to 500mg metformin was changed from 2 nocte to 1
b.d and 750mg b.d respectively. b.d.
Goop points:
Weak points:
On review two weeks later, (this is right, but if we only say, “Two weeks letter, “ would look better in
my opinion.
blood report depicted a raised (depicted is not a good word in this context, it is used in different way,
words given by me as alternative a good options. showed/revealed

Consequently, she was prescribed atorvastatin 20mg. In addition, metformin and glipizide dose were
increased to 500mg b.d and 750mg b.d respectively. ( your both sentences are ok, but it would be
better if we can join these two sentences together and make one compound sentence.
.. glipizide dose is 5mg b.d. and it has not changed, at the start it was 5mg b.d. and still is the same.
Look in case notes, first page above 29/12/13, these were initial medication, ,,now on 12/1/14 we only
changed metformin from 2 nocturnal to 1 b.d. ( means she was taking 2 tablets at night before, now
will take one in the morning and one in the evening) at this point they added atorvastatin.
Remember: they don’t go into too much details in doses etc, but we should write as perfect as
possible. Don’t worry about minor slips in medication etc.
Two weeks later, Mrs Sharma’s blood reports revealed a raised HbA1c level (10%) along with a
deranged lipid profile. Consequently, atorvastatin 20mg was added to her medication and metformin
was changed from 500mg to 750 mg twice daily.
Closing:
Original Rewrite
Today, Mrs Sharma’s pathology report Today, Mrs Sharma’s pathology reports
showed a normal lipid profile. However, showed a normal lipid profile. However,
Control over her blood sugar levels has not control over her blood sugar levels has not
yet been achieved. yet achieved.
In view of the above, I am referring Mrs In view of the above, I am referring Mrs
Sharma into your care for further Sharma into your care for further
management of her blood sugar levels. management of her blood sugar levels.
Please do not hesitate to contact me, if you Please do not hesitate to contact me if you
have any queries. have any queries.
Yours sincerely, Yours sincerely,
Doctor Doctor

Goop points:
Weak points:
However, control over her blood sugar levels has not yet been achieved
(you should clearly state the current values also. )
On review today, her fasting glucose levels were still high (16+) while her random blood sugar levels
are now under control.
Here after this paragraph we should write past history and family history etc, this is better place, works
for both normal referral and urgent referrals
Mrs Sharma has had type 2 diabetes mellitus since 1999, for which she takes metformin and glipizide.
Please note, she is allergic to penicillin, and her family history is significant for type 2 diabetes mellitus.
In view of the above, I would be grateful if you could assess and manage her blood sugar levels
accordingly.
me, if you (when we use if in the centre of a sentence, we don’t need to put comma)
Word count: 199

Overall Overall Grade: C+ or (harldy B-)
This student got 2 letters corrected by me, and achieved 370 in
Score + writing in real exam (success story no. 15)

As your purpose was not too clear and you have not mentioned what
Advice you want the reader to do, I am feeling very difficult to give to B-, if you
have mentioned it then it was clear B-)
Individual scores:
Purpose

Score
Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently 2 1 or
highlighted or expanded hardly
2
Description Grade
2. Content

Score
Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly 5 4 or 5

some key
information
key

Score
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and 5 5
many
successful
4. Genre& Style
Score
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 5 4 or 5

Score

Organisation and paragraphing are generally 5 5
lapses
not be appropriate
6. Language

Score
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with 5 4 or 5
meaning

Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Admitting Officer Admitting Officer

Emergency Department Emergency Department
Children’s Hospital Children’s Hospital
Newtown Newtown
18 January2014 18 January2014
Dear Sir/Madam, Dear Sir/Madam,

Re: Joshua Vance, DOB: 17 November 2013 Re: Joshua Vance, DOB: 17/11/2013
Goop points:
Excellent, no error stick to this style, it would save your time in the real exam.
Weak points:
DOB: 17 November 2013

(this is correct, but I usually prefer digits here, 17/11/2013)
Purpose:
Original Rewrite
I am writing to urgently refer Joshua, an 8 ½ I am writing to urgently refer Joshua, an 8 ½

- week-old male infant, who is presenting - week-old male infant, who is presenting
with complaints of constipation, feed with complaints of constipation and mild
refusal and mild dehydration. Your further dehydration. Your further assessment and
assessment and management including management, including rehydration
rehydration would be highly appreciated. therapy, would be highly appreciated.
Goop points:
Overall a good effort, your purpose is concise and to the point. Appropriate for the reader, the reader
will immediately know that the case is “urgent” + purpose, and diagnosis.
Weak points:
feed refusal
(this is not too important to mention it here, it will come in detail of visits not in purpose)
, including rehydration therapy (this is a non-defining relative clause, means something extra added to
the sentence, if we remove this information, our sentence is still ok and complete.) so, with non-
defining relative clauses we use comma before and after them.

who is presenting with complaints of (this is not appropriate language to write in the purpose, this
would be fine to expand symptoms of a visit.) here better options can be
, whose features are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation.
Or
, whose signs and symptoms are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation.
I am writing to refer Joshua, whose features are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation.
Your urgent assessment and management of his condition, including a rehydration therapy, would be
appreciated.
Or
I am writing to refer Joshua, whose signs and symptoms are consistent with mild dehydration and
constipation. Your urgent assessment and management of his condition, including a rehydration
therapy, would be appreciated.
I am writing to urgently refer Joshua, ……
2nd Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
On today’s visit, Joshua’s mother reported On today’s visit, Joshua’s mother reported
that he has not passed any stool for the last that he has not passed any stool for the last
5 days. In addition, she complained that he 5 days. In addition, she complained that he
has been refusing feed and not making wet has been refusing feed and not making wet
nappies. He also experienced a single nappies. He also experienced a single
episode of vomiting. Examination of the episode of vomiting. His examination

infant revealed mild dehydration and revealed mild dehydration and generalized
generalized abdominal tenderness. His pulse abdominal tenderness. His pulse rate and
rate and respiratory rate was 120 and 30 respiratory rate were 120 and 30
respectively. Please note, he currently respectively. Please note, he currently
weighs 4.1kg. weighs 4.1kg.
Goop points:
Excellent, you have started with “Today’s visit” the most important and relevant visit. This is a must for
an urgent letter.
Weak points:
. His pulse rate and respiratory rate were 120 and 30 respectively. ( We can omit “rate” at one place,
and make it plural like this
His pulse and respiratory rates were (now looks more smooth and concise) we can also write only rate
here
. Please note, he currently weighs 4.1kg. (remember: sometimes OET case notes mention some
general information with today’s visit, we don’t need to mention everything regarding that visit in this
paragraph, Only stating his weight at one place would not give too much information to the reader.
Look at your 2nd last paragraph where you mentioned weight of Joshua on his birth, if we put his
current weight there then it would be clear to understand and compare for the reader)
Please read my answer: how I have made the same paragraph more concise and coherent:
Today, Joshua’s mother reported that he had not passed any stool for the last 5 days. In addition, he
has been refusing feed and not making wet nappies. He also experienced a single episode of vomiting.
On examination, his mucous membrane was dry, and he had a mild generalised tenderness.

Original Rewrite
Initially, on 31.12.13, Joshua’s mother was Initially, on 31.12.13, Joshua’s mother was
concerned regarding his bowel actions as he concerned regarding his bowel actions as he
was passing hard stools every three days. was passing hard stools every three days.
Consequently, he was diagnosed with mild Consequently, he was diagnosed with a mild
constipation and her mother was constipation and his mother was
encouraged to continue breastfeeding. On encouraged to continue breastfeeding. On
his subsequent visit, his symptoms had not his subsequent visit, his symptoms had not
improved and he was commenced on improved and he was commenced on
coloxyl drops. Coloxyl drops.
Goop points:
Weak points:
coloxyl drops. (this is brand name, we need to use capital with commercial names of medication, like
Augmentin, but with generic names no capital letter, like paracetamol, atenolol etc.
Initially, on 31.12.13, Joshua’s mother was concerned regarding his bowel actions as he was passing
hard stools every three days. Consequently, he was diagnosed with a mild constipation and his mother
was encouraged to continue breastfeeding. On his subsequent visit, his symptoms had not improved
and he was commenced on Coloxyl drops.
Closing:

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Joshua was born via a normal vaginal Joshua was born via a normal vaginal
delivery at 38 weeks of gestation with no delivery at 38 weeks of gestation with no
perinatal or neonatal complications. Please perinatal or neonatal complications. Please
note, his birthweight was 3.25kg. note, his birth weight was 3.25kg.
In view of the above, please manage In view of the above, please manage
Joshua’s condition as you think appropriate. Joshua’s condition as you think appropriate.
Please do not hesitate to contact me if you Please do not hesitate to contact me if you
have any queries. have any queries.
Yours sincerely, Yours sincerely,
Doctor Doctor
Goop points:
Weak points:
Please note, his birth weight was 3.25kg.
Here you can say: Please note, his birth weight was 3.25kg, now he weighs …kgs.
Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any queries. (it would be better if we write this
sentence on a separate line. )
Joshua was born at 38 weeks via normal delivery without any complications. His birth weight was 3250
g.

In light of the above, I would be grateful if you could further evaluate and manage his condition at your
earliest convenience.
Word count: 195

Overall Overall Grade: B/B+
Score + (2nd and this one 3rd samples are both of same student, he got 370 in
the real exam)
Advice Excellent and well-organised letter, keep it up. Practice as much as
you can to ensure a similar solid B in the real exam.
Individual scores:
Purpose

Score
Description Grade
2. Content

Score

some key
information
key

Score
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and 5 5

many
successful
4. Genre& Style
Score
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 5 5


Score
lapses
not be appropriate
6. Language

Score

Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with 5 5
meaning

Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Associate Professor Simon Anderson Associate Professor Simon Anderson

Suite 65 Suite 65
City hospital City hospital
25-29 Main Road 25-29 Main Road
Centreville Centreville
05/12/20
Dear Dr Anderson, 5 December 2020
RE: Mr Daniel McCrea,DOB:
17/10/1962 Dear Dr Anderson,
RE: Mr Daniel McCrea, DOB: 17/10/1962
Goop points:
Almost perfect
Weak points:

advised to stick to only one style to save your time.
Patient’s name and DOB should be on the same line,
5 December 2020
(please leave one blank line before and after this date)
Purpose:
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I am writing to refer Mr McCrea ,a 58-year- I am writing to refer Mr McCrea , a 58-year-

old married man, whose signs and symptoms old married man, whose signs and symptoms
are suggestive of an adenocarcinoma of the are consistent with adenocarcinoma of the
ascending colon.Your urgent assessment and ascending colon. Your urgent assessment
management would be highly appreciated. and management would be highly
appreciated.
Goop points:
Excellent intro, have mentioned urgent (that we should never forget to mention)
Weak points:
who has been recently diagnosed with adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon

, a 58-year-old married man, (this is no problem to mention this info in intro, but we should mention if
it is too important for the reader to me more concise) age is already mentioned (in DOB) and married is
not too relevant.
whose signs and symptoms are consistent (in this patient, diagnosis is confirmed, don’t use word
suggestive, (it is used when possible diagnosis or provisional diagnosis) consistent with is commonly
used for confirmed diagnosis.
In this case instead of signs and symptoms, diagnosis was confirmed by biopsy.
Consider something like this.
who has been recently diagnosed with adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon
2nd Body Paragraph:
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Initially, Mr McCrea presented on 19/09/13 Initially, Mr McCrea presented on 19/09/13

with complaints of fever,sore throat,cough, with complaints of fever, a sore throat,
headache and body ache.Apart from his BMI cough, headache and body ache. Apart
of 28.1 and temperature of 39.8, rest of the from his BMI of 28.1 and temperature of
examination was unremarkable. Diagnosis of 39.8, rest of the examination was
viral infection was made and the patient was unremarkable. A diagnosis of viral
prescribed Panadol. Furthermore,he was infection was made and the patient was
advised to take rest until his fever subsides. prescribed Panadol. Furthermore, he was
On 08/02/14 the patient complained of advised to rest until his fever subsides. On
abdominal discomfort,gas, fatigue and 08/02/14, the patient complained of an
diarrhea alternating with constipation. On abdominal discomfort, gas, fatigue and
examination,vital signs were within normal diarrhea alternating with constipation. On
range. Moreover, abdominal examination examination, his vital signs were within
revealed no abnormality. Hence, CBC,Fecal normal range. In addition, his abdominal
occult blood test and colonoscopy were examination revealed no abnormality.
ordered and the patient was asked to review in Hence, CBC, fecal occult blood test and a
two weeks for discussion of his test results. colonoscopy were ordered and he was
asked to revisit in two weeks for the
discussion of his test results.

Goop points:
Weak points:
Don’t copy and paste each and every thing from case notes, no need to write patient’s all visits.
Only write relevant visits, you can give a slight touch to previous visit if not too relevant.
Is it too important to mention flu for colon cancer???
Your 2nd paragraph should start from patient’s 2 nd last visit.
(we have wasted 52 words for an irrelevant viral infection) don’t do that plz
Furthermore, he (use space here)
On 08/02/14, the (comma after date)
On examination, vital (space after comma)
vital signs were within (whose vital signs, use his)
Moreover (OET don’t like this transition signal please avoid it, use alternatives)
In addition, his abdominal (don’t miss his)
Fecal occult blood test and colonoscopy were (f small)
the patient (use patient’s name at the start, and then use pronouns, using word “patient” does not look
good in OET writing.
This paragraph is too long, please make it concise
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On today's visit, the patient is still feeling On today's visit, the patient is still feeling sick.
sick. His blood tests are normal. His blood tests are normal. However, his fecal
However, his fecal occult blood test is occult blood test is positive and the diagnosis of
positive and in colonoscopy cancer is adenocarcinoma of his ascending colon was
detected in the ascending colon. confirmed on biopsy. (you should mention
Therefore a biopsy is taken which showed other test results here, because they would be
adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon. relevant for the reader, the surgeon would
like to know his Hb etc )
Goop points:
Less grammatical errors
Weak points:
in colonoscopy cancer is detected in the ascending colon. (are you writing to a surgeon?? Surgeon don’t
know what is adenocarcinoma?, use medical terms because your reader is a doctor.)
Colonoscopy was done today?
Colonoscopy was done on 2nd last visit, sample was taken at that time. Today, we received biopsy
results.
Colonoscopy is already mentioned in your above paragraph.
His colonoscopy revealed an abnormality and malignancy was detected in the ascending colon. His
biopsy confirmed adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon.
Closing:
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Mr McCrea is a married man with no Mr McCrea is a married man with no
children. He is a smoker and he has no children. He is a smoker and he has no
family history of colorectal cancer,colonic family history of colorectal cancer, colonic
polyps and inflammatory bowel disease. polyps and inflammatory bowel disease.
In view of the above,it would be highly
valuable if you could manage his condition In view of the above, it would be highly
according. valuable if you could manage his condition
Should there be any queries, please do not accordingly.
hesitate to contact me.
Yours Sincerely, Should there be any queries, please do not
Doctor hesitate to contact me.
Yours Sincerely,
Doctor
Goop points:
Language is good, grammatically good.
Weak points:
married man with no children. Are you sure? go to case notes and correct it yourself please.
Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.

(leave one blank line before and after this sentence)
Word count: 223

Overall (it is fine to use 180 to 220, a bit more is not an issue unless you
include irrelevant information)
Score +
Overall Grade: C+
Advice (it was a B if you have not included 52 words of irrelevant viral
infection)
This letter was written by Dr Afsheen Ashfaq, success story no. 2, she
got 360 in writing, I marked her 9 letters, you can see how her writing

was weak at the start, then it improved gradually with my corrections
Individual scores:
Purpose

Score
Description Grade
2. Content

Score
Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; 3 3
some key
information
key

Score
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and 5 4 or 5
many
successful
4. Genre & Style

Score

Score
lapses
not be appropriate
6. Language

Score
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with 5 5
meaning

Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Dr Jones Dr Jones
Newtown memory clinic Newtown Memory Clinic
400 Rail Rd 400 Rail Rd
Newtown Newtown
19 April 2015
Dear Dr Jones, 19 April 2015
Re: Mrs. Patricia Welshman, D.O.B.:
28/03/1930 Dear Dr Jones,
Re: Mrs. Patricia Welshman, D.O.B:
28/03/1930
Goop points:
Good effort
Weak points:

Leave a blank line before and after date
memory clinic M and C capital
( Dr Mrs ) are correct with dots or without dots. (Dr is correct, Dr. is also correct) without dot is more
common nowadays, just stick to one style only, it would save your time.
Purpose:
Original Rewrite
I am writing to refer Mrs. Welshman, I am writing to refer Mrs. Welshman, a 85-

85-year-old, who is suffering from year-old lady/vidow, who has dementia with a
dementia with possible Alzheimer possible early-stage Alzheimer’s disease. (see
disease. Her full memory assessment below) Her full memory assessment and final
and final diagnosis are requested. diagnosis would be highly appreciated.
Goop points:
Your purpose is concise and clear to the reader.
Weak points:
Mentioning the age of the patient again in purpose is not wrong, but we have already mentioned age
or DOB on the above line. We can omit it here.
85-year-old, (missing noun and article here) look at correction

is suffering from dementia with possible early-stage Alzheimer disease. (better option, yours is not
wrong)
suffering from dementia with possible (OET don’t like word suffer , don’t use it anywhere in your
letter) use alternatives
who has dementia with possible early-stage Alzheimer’s disease. ( , whose features are consistent
with dementia with possible early-stage Alzheimer’s.
Thank you for seeing Mrs Welshman, whose features are consistent with dementia with a possible
early-stage Alzheimer’s disease. Her full memory assessment and final diagnosis would be highly
appreciated.
Or you can say:”
I am writing to refer Mrs Welshman,
2nd Body Paragraph:
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Mrs. Welsham has been a regular patient Mrs. Welshman has been a regular patient
of mine since 2007. Apart from mildly of mine since 2007. Apart from mildly
elevated LDL cholesterol level (2.9mmol/L) elevated LDL cholesterol level (2.9mmol/L)
and markedly low vitamin D (54nmol/L), and markedly low vitamin D (54nmol/L),
her condition has been generally her condition has been generally
satisfactory. During a follow-up satisfactory. During a follow-up
consultation in 2014, I found that she was consultation in 2014, it was noted that she
not taking her medications regularly. A was not taking her medications regularly.
webster pack to improve compliance with A Webster pack was suggested to improve
the medication was suggested. compliance with the medication.
Goop points:
A few mistakes here (can be improve a lot.

Weak points:
After purpose you should write today’s visit. Remember after purpose we should write the most
relevant and important information. In this case, today’s visit is the most important. You we move
your 3rd paragraph here.
Mrs. Welsham has been a regular patient of mine since 2007. (this is not too relevant info) it
adds nothing for the reader. We can omit it.
Avoid personal pronouns, use passive ( don’t say i did this etc)
Mrs. Welsham has been a regular patient of mine since 2007. (this is not too important to mention
here, please avoid less important information)
Initially, on 28/03/2018, Mrs Welshman’s blood pressure and cholesterol levels were not stable because
she was not consuming the medication regularly. . As a result, she was advised to start using Webster
pack, but she was reluctant to start it.
Original Rewrite
Today, on 19/4/2015, Mrs. Welsham, Today, Mrs. Welsham came to the clinic
accompanied by her daughter, complained accompanied by her daughter with a
of poor memory issue. She also reported complaint of poor memory. She also
trouble while performing daily usual reported difficulty in performing daily
activities. Additionally, significant behavior activities. Additionally, significant behavior
changes along with an impaired decision changes along with impaired decision
making ability were also reported. During making ability were also reported. On
the memory assessment, she is unable to examination using a mini memory
recall today’s date and month due to poor assessment, she was unable to recall date
short term memory. The possibility of and month due to poor short-term
Alzheimer being the cause of her memory. The possibility of Alzheimer’s
dementia has been discussed with her. She being the cause of her dementia was
has been advised to undergo a detailed discussed with her. She is/was advised to

memory assessment and is due to return undergo a detailed memory assessment
after the assessment. and is due to return after the assessment.
Goop points:
Weak points:
Today, on 19/4/2015, (no need to date with today)
complained of poor memory issue. (complain and issue both are similar things) use one of them. \
daily and usual are same things , use one of them
The possibility of Alzheimer being the cause of her dementia has been discussed with her
(improve this sentence, this info can be omitted, not too important. But including it is not wrong.
The possible cause of her dementia was discussed with her. (one of the options)
Today, Mrs Welshman presented with her daughter and complained about her poor memory such as
missing social events, dinner engagements and hairdresser appointments. Her Mini-memory assessment
revealed impaired short-term memory as she was unable to recall the date and month.
Closing:

Original Rewrite
Kindly note Mrs. Welsham has a significant Kindly note Mrs. Welsham has a
family history of Alzheimer disease. significant family history of Alzheimer’s
Based on the above, I would appreciate your disease.
cooperation in full memory assessment and Based on the above, I would appreciate
establishment of the final diagnosis of Mrs. your cooperation in her full memory
Welsham. assessment and establishment of the
Please write me if you need any further final diagnosis.
clarification. (look at comments)
Your sincerely,
Doctor Please write me if you need any further
clarification.
Your sincerely,
Doctor
Goop points:
Weak points:
(look at this better alternative)
Based on the above, it would be appreciated if you could further assess her memory and provide a
definitive diagnosis
If you have any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. (better option)
((leave one blank line before and after this sentence)
Please include other relevant points of social history , also you have not included her current

medications which are very important for the reader to know
Socially, she is a widow and lives alone. She was diagnosed with osteoporosis and her current
medications are osteo-vit-D , atorvastatin, ibuprofen, metoprolol and paracetamol. Her family history is
also positive for Alzheimer's disease.
Based on the above, it would be appreciated if you could further assess her memory and provide a
definitive diagnosis.
Word count: 207 (good control)

Overall Overall Grade: B- (borderline B)
It is hardly a B, means about 340, 350, 360
Score + Practice more to ensure a solid B.
Advice (this letter was written by Dr Asad Raza, success story no. 10, I marked his 7
letters, he got 360 in writing in the real exam)
Individual scores:
Purpose

Score
Description Grade
2. Content

Score
some key
information
key

Score
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and 5 4 or 5
many
successful
4. Genre& Style
Score
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 5 5

Score
lapses
not be appropriate
6. Language

Score
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with 5 4 or 5
meaning

Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Ms Jessica Riley Ms Jessica Riley

Physiotherapist Physiotherapist
Chastonfield Physiotherapy Chastonfield Physiotherapy
88 School Road 88 School Road
Chastonfield Chastonfield
5 December 2020
Dear Ms Riley 5 December 2020
Re: Mrs Janet Craven, aged 69
Dear Ms Riley,
Re: Mrs Janet Craven, aged: 69 years
Goop points:
Almost perfect, keep it up
Weak points:
Leave a blank line before and after date (may be due typing error, but I have to mention it.)
Don’t forget to put comma after Dear Dr ….,
Colon after aged: (:)
If we put years with age, it would be better (yours is not wrong)
Things I mentioned are better options; we need to stick to only one style to save our time in the real
exam.
Purpose:
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I am writing to refer Mrs Craven, who was I am writing to refer Mrs Craven, who was
admitted following transient ischaemic admitted following a transient ischaemic
attack into your care for follow up attack, into your care for follow up
physiotherapy sessions. She is scheduled for physiotherapy sessions. She is scheduled for
discharge today. discharge today.
Goop points:
Almost perfect, your purpose is clear to the reader, it is concise, fluent and according to reader’s
profession. Keep it up.

Weak points:
who was admitted a following transient ischaemic attack (remember this clause is a non-defining
relative clause, we need to put comma before and after it.
2nd Body Paragraph:
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Upon admission, Ms Craven presented Upon admission, Ms Craven presented with a

with a history of difficulty in talking, 4-hour history of difficulty in talking,
numbness and weakness of the right side numbness and weakness of the right side. Her
since 4 hours ago. On examination, blood
physical examination was unremarkable except
pressure was elevated, some aphasia noted
and her body mass index was suggestive elevated blood pressure (164/100), a mild right
of an obese person. bruit in her neck and some aphasia. At that
time, her body mass index was 32.
Goop points:
A good effort to organize the information and select only relevant ones, you have tried to be more
concise.
Weak points:
4-hour history (this is a better option and looks more professional in OET letters. )
blood pressure was elevated, (we can put its value in brackets there)

On examination, her blood pressure was elevated, some aphasia (it would be far better if you mention
here that her rest of the examination was normal),
Her physical examination was unremarkable except elevated blood pressure (164/100) and some
aphasia. At that time, her body mass index was 32.
You have missed an important information here, ( mild right bruit in neck)
I would add it here:
Her physical examination was unremarkable except elevated blood pressure (164/100), a mild right bruit
in her neck and some aphasia. At that time, her body mass index was 32.
Look at my sentence, it looks too professional, it flows smoothly and includes all relevant
information.
Original Rewrite
During hospitalization, the electrocardiogram During hospitalization, the echocardiogram

was done and it revealed mild concentric left was done and it revealed a mild concentric
ventricular hypertrophy. A CT scan showing left ventricular hypertrophy. A CT scan
no evidence of carotid artery stenosis was showing no evidence of carotid artery
performed. She has progressed well and has stenosis was performed. She has progressed
started ambulating with the help of a well and started ambulating with help of
physiotherapy. Mrs Craven was started on inpatient physiotherapy. Mrs Craven was
low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to
weight. help reduce weight.(read comments)
Goop points:

Weak points:
During hospitalization, the echocardiogram was done and it revealed mild concentric left ventricular
hypertrophy. (your sentence is correct, I am just giving a better, if a test was done and showed
something in its result, we don’t need to tell “it was done”
, the echocardiogram revealed a mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy.
(this sentence is more professional and formal)
. A CT scan showing no evidence of carotid artery stenosis was performed.
(this sentences does not go smooth and is not quite professional)
We can change it and also we can add it with first sentence of this paragraph to make a compound
sentence.
, the echocardiogram revealed a mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy and her CT scan showed no
evidence of carotid artery stenosis.
. Mrs Craven was started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce weight.
(You are confused here, this was not done during her admission, according to case notes, this is a plan
for the patient on discharge, means these are recommendations for her that she would follow after
discharge.)
Also you can start a new paragraph for her discharge plan. (as you have moved information
regarding physio with conclusion, if you wish you can keep this sentence here)
Mrs Craven was started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce weight.
After discharge, Mrs Craven is advised to reduce her weight and eat food which is low in fat and
cholesterol.
Closing:
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Socially, Mrs Craven is married and has 3 Socially, Mrs Craven is married and has 3
children. She is a retired lab assistant. She is children. She is a retired lab assistant. She is
a non smoker. a non-smoker.
In light of the above, it would be greatly In light of the above, it would be greatly
appreciated if you could assist with follow appreciated if you could assist her with
up physiotherapy in order to improve follow-up physiotherapy in order to improve
muscle strength and flexibility and her muscle strength and flexibility, and to
improvement of balance and co-ordination. increase her balance and coordination.
Do not hesitate to contact me with any Do not hesitate to contact me with any
further questions. further questions.
Yours sincerely
Nurse Yours sincerely,
Nurse
Goop points:
Weak points:
In English grammar “parallelism” means parts of sentences connected together should be of same
type. (read it from google), after “order to” in first part we used “bare infinitive” means 1st form of verb,
and we should also use same form in the second part. (in your sentence, 2nd part is a noun, that is wrong,
Look at my correction.
in order to improve her muscle strength and flexibility, and to increase her balance and coordination.
Yours sincerely,
(comma here)
Word count: 177

Overall Overall Grade: C+
Score + Look at my corrections and suggestions carefully and improve, you

have to practice a lot and get feedback on your letters to ensure a
solid pass in the real exam.
Advice
Individual scores:
Purpose

Score
Description Grade
2. Content

Score
some key
information
key

Score
many
successful

4. Genre& Style
Score
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and 5 4 or 5

Score

lapses
not be appropriate
6. Language

Score
meaning

Greeting:
Original Rewrite
The Director The Director
Blue Nursing Service Blue Nursing Service
207 Sydney Street 207 Sydney Street
West End West End
Date: 21 May 2009 21 May 2009
Dear Mr/Madam, Dear Mr/Madam,
Re: Ms Annette MacNamara, DOB: 14/06/1936 Re: Ms Annette MacNamara, DOB: 14/06/1936

Goop points:
Weak points:
Date: (no need to write “Date” everybody knows it is a date)
Don’t leave blank line between “Dear Mr/Madam,” and “Re…….’
Purpose:
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I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, a 73- I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, a

year-old Single pensioner women, who lives 73-year-old pensioner, who lives alone to
alone to request daily visits by the Blue request daily visits by the Blue Nurses and
Nurses and provide Support for her. provide Support for her.

Goop points:
Weak points:
Your purpose is unclear, you have asked the reader what you want from them, but you have not
provided the reason why you want visits etc????
I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, who was admitted for severe injuries after a fall. Your daily
visits for her showering and dressing of her wound would be highly appreciated.
Purpose should be clear to the reader like this. What was wrong with the patient + what you want from
the reader for the patient
2nd Body Paragraph:
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Ms MacNamara was admitted in our Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on

hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall 20/05/2009 following a fall while
down while descending staires. An X-ray descending stairs. Her X-ray showed a
was submitted and a fracture on her right fracture of her right wrist, and there was a
wrist confirmed, among with laceration on laceration on her left hand which was
her left hand which was caused by Broken caused by a broken glass. She presents also
glass. She presents also a severe Bruising in a severe Bruising in her right shoulder and
her right shoulder and her lower back. her lower back. Kindly note, a requirement
Kindly note, a requirement of stitches was of stitches was provided.
provided.
Goop points:

Weak points:
Her X-ray showed (we can use showed/confirmed/revealed)
Her X-ray showed a fracture on her right wrist, and there was a laceration on her left hand which was
caused by a broken glass.
(it look that the X-ray also showed laceration, ,,,, first write observation the X-ray)
She had a laceration on her left hand which was caused by a broken glass, and her X-ray showed a
fracture of her right wrist.
In the next two sentences, you did the same thing, first already told about X-ray, now again talking
about her symptoms.
Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending stairs. She
had a laceration on her left hand which was stitched and there were also severe bruising on her right
shoulder and lower back. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist. She was prescribed with
Normisson 100mg for insomnia, if required, and 2 Panadol every 4 hours for pain.
Original Rewrite
Ms MacNamara has a history of high blood Ms MacNamara has a history of high blood
pressure which is currently controlled with pressure which is currently controlled with
prescription of Karvea 150mg every morning Karvea 150mg daily in the morning. During
day. While her hospitalisaton, she was her hospitalisaton, she was treated with
treated by Normisson 100mg with 2 panadol Normisson 100mg and 2 Panadol every 04
every 04 hours for insomnia and pain hours for insomnia and pain respectively.
persistent respectively.

Goop points:
Weak points:
We don’t need to make a separate sentence for medication, her relevant medications I included with
her current history and hypertension , I will include in past history etc.
Closing:
Original Rewrite
In view of the above, it would be greatly Please note, Ms MacNamara would require
appreciate if you can provide an assistance to your assistance in her daily showering and
her Ms MacNamara in her daily showering dressing of her wound. In addition,
and the dress of her hand wound. In addition physiotherapy and a social worker will be
to this, a social worker will be given her a visit required to organise her meals on Wheels.
for organizing her meals on wheels and a Also, she has her next appointment for the
physiotherapy. Please note, she has her next removal of her stitches on 31/05/2009 at
appointment for removing the stitches on 10:30 AM.
31/05/2009 at 10130 AM.

Goop points:
Weak points:
her daily showering and dressing of her (make parallel sentence, on both sides of the “and” the words
should be similar, ing for or infinitives or nouns.
Look at my rewrite how smoothly the information flows and it is coherent and well organized.
Closing:
Original Rewrite
Thank you for agreeing to assist in this queries, Based on the above, I would be grateful if
if you should require further information, you could help her accordingly.
kindly Contact me.
Should there be any queries, please don’t
Yours sincerely, hesitate to contact me.
Grace Jones Yours sincerely,
Charge Nurse Charge Nurse
Princess Alexander Hospital
Goop points:
Weak points:

I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, who was admitted for severe injuries after a fall. Your daily
visits for her showering and dressing of her wound would be highly appreciated.
Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending stairs. She
had a laceration on her left hand which was stitched and there were also severe bruising on her right
shoulder and lower back. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist. She was prescribed with
Normisson 100mg for insomnia, if required, and 2 Panadol every 4 hours for pain.
Please note, she lives alone and she recently moved to a small flat in new suburb. Her niece, Stella
Attois, lives and works in Southport and generally visits her once a fortnight. She is hypertensive and
takes Karvea 150mg daily in the morning.
Please note, Ms MacNamara would require your assistance in her daily showering and dressing of her
wound. In addition, physiotherapy and a social worker will be required to organise her meals on
Wheels. Also, she has her next appointment for the removal of her stitches on 31/05/2009 at 10:30
AM.
Based on the above, I would be grateful if you could help her accordingly.
Should there be any queries, please don’t hesitate to contact me.
Yours sincerely,
Charge Nurse
(202 words)
You have missed her social history that is very important because this is the reason we are asking for
help.

Word count: 211
Overall Overall Grade: C
Score +
Plan well before you write the letter, organize information in
Advice paragraphs, write in a concise and professional way. Don’t
rush to write many letters and get corrected. Write this letter
again and send me.
Individual scores:
Purpose

Score
Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently 2 1 or
highlighted or expanded hardly
2
Description Grade
2. Content

Score

some key
information
key

Score

many
successful
4. Genre& Style
Score

Score
lapses
not be appropriate
6. Language

Score
meaning

OET speaking feedback by Dr Che (MD) and an OET expert
First I do a role play like real exam on Zoom, I become the patient, my
students was the medical professional, at the end of role play I gave
general advice and feedback, I also recorded the call (like it is done in real
exam, and is marked by other examiner, not the interlocutor who
conducts the role play), then I listen to these recordings again and give
detailed feedback like below sample. I will also send the recording to my
student.
Feedback on recording:
Now SAMPLE feedback
Timeline 00:51: you said: Hello, good morning, I am Dr………..

(that is not bad, we can do one better thing here, , only Say: Hello, Good morning,
with more energy and enthusiasm, and wait the patient to respond and participate)
that would build rapport and involve patient with you.
One of the doctors ( not doctor)
Take it easy, like your real consultation with a patient

Aaaaaiiiiiiinnnnnn may I know your name (no need to this hesitation, go smooth
with confidence)
Timeline: 1:07: Mr Smith, aaaa ooooooonnn (avoid this hesitation) how can I help
you today
Again: 1:30 aaa ooooo before saying I am sorry to hear that
1:33: let me to ask some question ( remove “to” , questions) aaa ooooooo
(hesitation) regarding your general health
Do you ( lot of hesitation here, aaaa ooooo , verb is missing use “have”) diabetes or
any bowel disease or disease in your gut (good point you used common words, not

medical terms, explained bowel to gut) but lot of hesitation, be more smooth and
confident:
Timeline 2:00 as you failed to ask me a bit more details about my ulcers, that is why
I am helping your there with explanation (interlocutor try to help like this in the real
exam)
Time line: 2:40, based on my ….. your history (say history a bit more clear) clinical
examination was not done, no need to mention, ,,, again lot of hesitation here
One more thing: instead of talking at one pace, try to put stress on important words,
your voice should go up and down (that is called intonation)
Aaaa oooo these are aphthus ulcers, do you hear about that ( good point is after
telling a medical term, you asked the patient to tell what he/she already knows
about that before explaining, you can question like this: have you heard about
that? Do you know about that?
3:10: (you are explaining the diagnosis) too much hesitation here aaa oooo it is one
kind of ulcers ( ulcer ; no plural) but aaaaa oooooooo in summary
Lot of hesitation in explaining the diagnosis, don’t make it too long, keep it simple
and to the point,
4:04: this kind of disease (these kind of )……….. 4:10 there is no know causes of (
there is no known cause or there are no know causes of)
4:50 aaaaaa aaa I understand your concern ( no need of hesitation here) One more
thing, as I told you on live call, you have called me by name throughout the role play
( we should address the patient by name, that builds relationship and good rapport)
You can say: ok Mr Smith, I can understand your concern…………
You said “ I am afraid this might not go in 24 hours” instead of directly destroying
my hopes of getting well, first we can do echoing ( that is just giving the expression
that I understood your concern) we can
Ok Mr Smith, I can understand your concern, that you a very important meeting in
24 hours, but I am afraid……….
Timeline: 5:00 but aaa oooo we will aaaaa I will aaaaa aann do something
management, some measures to you ( management is too formal word for this
common patient, avoid hesitation)
Say “measures” clearly, give some stress on your words

Is that ok Mr Smith ? (good you asked my feedback + you called by my name
5:16; Firstly ( say this word clearly) you can aaaaa , I can aaa treat (avoid hesitation
here)
5:23: this following steps ( you can just say “by these steps”)
Paracetamol ( pronounce it a bit more clearly)
5:49: I am telling too much things doctor( you know why I am saying this??? Because
you have explained all treatment in one go, please don’t do so, give information to
the patient in chunks means in pieces, in bites, …and keep checking patient’s
feedback, he understands or not)
e.g. first tell me about rinsing of mouth…. then check my understanding Then other
thing………
6:12: now you are becoming more fluent with less hesitation
6:22 for your pain relief, so that your pain get relieved (repetition here, avoid it)
6:28: lot of hesitation after explaining the treatment of anti-inflammatory (it looks
are blank now, you are searching for words) be smooth and coherent)
6:45: I am afraid of that (delete “of”)
7:00 speaking better way (pronunciation of “better” looks like bitter,) please speak
with confidence and coherently
7:12; I am just asking I have some questions, in response you are showing a lot
hesitation, you should confidently say: Yes Please
7:30 again hesitation
Please improve a little bit pronunciation, speak words clearly
Your speaking speed is not too fast nor too slow, it is ok, but speak clear words and
improve pronunciation
8:10, I asked, when can I do so that these ulcers don’t occur again?
Your replied: yes I understand your concern (this is good point)
8:32: at the end you asked do you have any other concerns ( good thing to ask at the
end)
I: Linguistic Criteria
Description Grade
1: Intelligibility

Score
6
• Pronunciation is easily understood and prosodic
features (stress, intonation, rhythm) are used
effectively.
• L1 accent has no effect on intelligibility.
5
Easily understood.
Communication is not impeded by a few pronunciation
or prosodic errors and/or noticeable L1 accent.
Minimal strain for the listener.
4 4
Easily understood most of the time.
Pronunciation or prosodic errors and/or L1 accent at
times cause strain for the listener.
3
Produces some acceptable features of spoken
English.
Difficult to understand because errors in
pronunciation/stress/ intonation and/or L1 accent
cause serious strain for the listener.
Often unintelligible. 2
Frequent errors in pronunciation/stress/ intonation
and/or L1 accent cause severe strain for the listener.
1
Almost entirely unintelligible.
NO response 0
Goop points:

Weak points:
Please improve pronunciation, stress on words and sentence, don’t speaking at one
speed
Make words and things clear to the patients, for examples (read above comments)(
2. Fluency

Score
6
Completely fluent speech at normal speed.
Any hesitation is appropriate and not a sign of searching
for words or structures.
5
Fluent speech at normal speed, with only occasional
repetition or self-correction.
Hesitation may occasionally indicate searching for words
or structures, but is generally appropriate.
4 4-
Uneven flow, with some repetition, especially in longer
utterances.
Some evidence of searching for words, which does not
cause serious strain.
Delivery may be staccato or too fast/slow.
3
Very uneven.
Frequent pauses and repetitions indicate searching for

words or structures.
Excessive use of fillers and difficulty sustaining longer
utterances cause serious strain for the listener.

2
Extremely uneven.
Long pauses, numerous repetitions and self-corrections

make speech difficult to follow.
1
Impossible to follow, consisting of isolated words and
phrases and self-corrections, separated by long pauses.
NO response 0
Goop points:
Weak points:
There was lot of hesitation. Speaking and information was not fully organized. Speaking smoothly
An in organized way, lead the role play,
3.Appropriateness
Score
6
Entirely appropriate register, tone and lexis for the
context.
No difficulty at all in explaining technical matters in lay
terms.
5
Mostly appropriate register, tone and lexis for the
context.
Occasional lapses are not intrusive.
4 4/4+
Generally appropriate register, tone and lexis for the
context, but somewhat restricted and lacking in
complexity.
Lapses are noticeable and at times reflect limited
resources of grammar and expression.
3
Some evidence of appropriate register, tone and lexis,
but lapses are frequent and intrusive, reflecting
inadequate resources of grammar and expression.
2
Mostly inappropriate register, tone and lexis for the
context.
1
Entirely inappropriate register, tone and lexis for the
context.
NO response 0
Goop points:
Weak points:
This part can also be improved a lot,
4. Resources of Grammar and Expression

Score
6
Rich and flexible.
Wide range of grammar and vocabulary used accurately
and flexibly.
Confident use of idiomatic speech.
5
Wide range of grammar and vocabulary generally used
accurately and flexibly.
Occasional errors in grammar or vocabulary are not
intrusive.
4 4
Sufficient resources to maintain the interaction.
Inaccuracies in vocabulary and grammar, particularly in
more complex sentences, are sometimes intrusive.
Meaning is generally clear.
3
Limited vocabulary and control of grammatical
structures, except very simple sentences.
Persistent inaccuracies are intrusive.
2
Very limited resources of vocabulary and grammar, even
in simple sentences.
Numerous errors in word choice.
1
Limited in all respects.
NO response 0
Goop points:

Weak points:
That was not too bad, but need improvement in this part, use accurate words and tenses, and make
good sentences that are easy for the reader to understand, join sentences with connectors, and
transition signals, use linking words, organize your interview very well, don’t keep searching for words
and tenses
II: Clinical communication criteria:
A: Indicators of relationship building
A1: Initiating the interaction appropriately (greeting, introductions, nature of interview)

A2: Demonstrating an attentive and respectful attitude
A3: Demonstrating a non-judgemental approach
A4: Showing empathy for feelings/predicament/emotional state

Score
3
Adept use
2 2-
Competent use
1
Partially effective use
0
Ineffective use
Goop points:
Weak points:
Call the patient by name, built good rapport, ask patient’s feedback and understanding, call the
patient by name, please patient’s concerns deeply, actively listen to your patient

B. Indicators of understanding & incorporating the patient’s perspective
B1: Eliciting and exploring patient’s ideas/concerns/expectations

B2: Picking up the patient’s cues
B3: Relating explanations to elicited ideas/concerns/expectations

Score
3
Adept use
2 2-
Competent use
1
0
Ineffective use
Goop points:
Weak points:
Involve patient in your conversation, give information in chunks and keep involving your patients
C. Indicators of providing structure

C1: Sequencing the interview purposefully and logically
C2: Signposting changes in topic
C3: Using organizing techniques in explanations

Score
3
Adept use
2 2-
Competent use

1
0
Ineffective use
Goop points:
Weak points:
Provide logical structure and lead your interview smoothly
D. Indicators for information gathering
D1: Facilitating the patient’s narrative with active listening techniques, minimising interruption\
D2: Using initially open questions, appropriately moving to closed questions
D3: NOT using compound questions/leading questions
D4: Clarifying statements which are vague or need amplification
D5: Summarising information to encourage correction/invite further information

Score
3
Adept use
2 2-
Competent use
1
0
Ineffective use
Goop points:
Weak points:

You should have asked a bit more about my ulcers and other symptoms etc at the start, after asking
one question, you immediately went to the diagnosis, also keep asking questions and involving your
patient in your conversation
E. Indicators for information giving
E1: Establishing initially what the patient already knows

E2: Pausing periodically when giving information, using the response to guide next steps
E3: Encouraging the patient to contribute reactions/feelings
E4: Checking whether the patient has understood information
E5: Discovering what further information the patient needs

Score
3
Adept use
2
Competent use
1 1or 2-
0
Ineffective use
Goop points:
Weak points:
Give information by chunks, means give some information, then check patient’s understanding and
slowly go to the next thing
You explain complete treatment in one go, you should have done this in chunks, also at some other
points don’t keep talking for long time, go by steps, in chunks and involve patient

Overall Grade: C/C+
Overall
Please avoid hesitation, be confident and more coherent and
Score + organized in your interview, avoid grammar and vocabulary
Advice mistakes, improve pronunciation means say words clear, put
stress(intonation), give information in chunks , collect
information well

Complete OET Guide and Advice by Dr Che
My students keep asking me on daily basis for advice regarding OET preparation. It is very difficult for
me to explain to each and every student, so I have decided to write a comprehensive and detailed post
so that I can guide you thoroughly. It would be a longer post, but really would be very helpful for your
preparation. (I will keep updating this post). Please remember, this is my personal guidance and
thinking, I might be wrong at any place and you might disagree with me at some points.
Please remember, I am not a classical English teacher, myself done with OET and taking other medical
exams, but I have worked hard on English language for more than 4 years. I run a private hospital. I am
just telling this to ensure you that I am your colleague; I don’t need to misguide you for any financial
benefits.
Reading and listening: these two modules are a bit self-practice, at the moment I don’t know any
online or off-line OET provider who teaches these modules properly. If you subscribe to any OET
coaching, what most of them (almost all) do is that for these two modules, they will give you just some
general tips and tricks and advice, how to answer question in reading and listening, (skim and scan,
highlight, underline, read this first and then do this etc) these general things can be easily found on
YouTube free videos. Even if you purchase any course for these modules, at the end you have to do
self-practice. Reading is quite challenging module in OET, many students fail in this.
What I recommend you for now to pass these two modules is first watch some free YouTube videos for
general advice on how to answer questions in these modules, how to solve questions. Skimming and
scanning techniques etc (if you don’t find sufficient techniques for OET modules, you can search for
IELTS reading and listening tips, because overall advice to solve the questions is the same) Also, read
tips from official OET books to answer these two modules (e.g. OET practice book 1 and 2 for medicine
and nurses, and for other specialties also, Kaplan official book etc) After you get a general idea how to
answer questions, first do 4 or 5 official sample reading and listening tests from official OET website..
After these samples, next reading and listening practice should be done from official practice books 1
and 2 (as reading and listening is the same for all, you can do it from medicine practice book 1 and 2 or
nursing practice book 1 and 2, check whether these tests are same on both of them). So far you have
done the 4 free samples, + 6 reading and listening samples from practice book 1 and 2. For now, these
10 are the most authentic reading and listening materials available, they are like real exam reading and
listening, other available free materials are not of same quality. After doing these 10 sets of practice,
then go for other reading and listening materials, like Jashan files, and many other reading and
listening materials that many OET candidates have (there are almost 25 to 30 in total),
I will keep updating this post. I am planning to make a comprehensive and well-organized, and a
detailed OET reading course, as many students find this difficult and fail in reading module in the real
exam. But it will take time as I am too busy and I don’t launch any new service until I work a lot on it.
Let us now go to the next module
Speaking:
Speaking: this is not a difficult module, only you need to speak according to OET criteria. I know my
students and some other people even native English speakers failed in this module, only due to over-
confidence. They thought their English is good and they speak it on daily basis in their daily life. They
didn’t practice, so in the real exam they may fail. Here, the main thing is to do speaking according to
OET criteria, not as we wish to do this. Don’t take this module as easy, some students fail in speaking
for just a small margin, like 340, 330 or 320, then start remarking etc and wasting their time.
How to prepare for speaking: First of all, watch some free videos on YouTube for general tips regarding
OET speaking. They will give you tips and general idea about speaking. You can also read speaking part
of official books like practice book 1, 2 and Kaplan official book. After doing this, start practicing with a
speaking partner, you should have at least 2 speaking partners because sometimes one is not available
for practice, you can do with other. Please remember, find a good speaking partner, otherwise your
speaking will deteriorate instead of improving. Where you can find speaking partner? You write a post
mentioning your specialty (medicine, nursing etc), exam date, your time zone or any other
requirement, then post in different facebook OET groups, like in my own OET groups. Join this group to
find appropriate speaking partners
https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetspeaking
Apart from practicing with a speaking partner, please remember most of the speaking partners would
also be students. It is a good practice with them, but they can’t provide authentic feedback. So, my
sincere advice is to get some feedback on your speaking from any true OET expert, like premium
providers and others (please remember most of the authentic OET websites are very costly for
speaking feedback, you can check their rates), and there are many cheap and substandard speaking
feedback offers on facebook and here and there, (avoid them until you are sure about their standard
and quality), to balance all of these things I am providing very detailed and high quality speaking
feedback in reasonable prices. I call my student on Zoom, then we do the role play, I become the
patient, and my student a doctor or a nurse etc, then I record this call and assess it later, by listening to
audio, like OET does in the real exam. I provide a live detailed feedback on zoom; according to all OET

official speaking criteria + I send the recording to my students also. You can see my sample speaking
feedback on my facebook group or you can send me a message on facebook messenger, I will forward
you the sample, so that you can see the quality of my feedback. Please, Please, be aware on facebook,
there are many fake tutors and in-person coaching centers also, they are not doctors or nurses, if they
are doctors or nurses the standard of feedback is not good. So, please first read their samples before
subscribing to their service.
To find the best speaking partners join this dedicated and well-organized OET speaking group
https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetspeaking
Now let us move to the writing module
Writing:
Writing: this module is not as difficult as many students consider it. The main problem is that I am sorry
to say that but it is fact that many of our colleague doctors or nurses are overconfident, they take the
exam without proper preparation. According to my experience almost all doctors or nurses who have
studied medicine in English have enough English language knowledge to pass writing module. The only
problem is lack of proper preparation and guidance.
Two main reasons why we fail writing module
1. Overconfidence, or not having enough time to prepare well for the exam
2. Taking sub-standard and un-authentic writing coaching or correction service
To resolve the first problem, my advice is please take this exam serious, it is not difficult to pass with
proper preparation. OET exam is costly and time-consuming (we apply more than 1 month before
exam, then 3 weeks waiting for result, if unfortunately, there are 10 or 20 marks low in one module,
apply for remark, then wait for another 3 to 6 weeks, if remark result is not favorable, then apply again
1 month before exam, and so on) time of medical professionals is very important, we can’t afford such
a long time for an English exam, so please please take it serious, it is not a difficult exam.
2nd problem: a common problem, relatively authentic tutors are official premium providers, but they
have 2 main issues 1. They are very costly (taking around 12 to 25 USD, per letter correction) it is
almost unaffordable for most of our colleagues, even if we purchase 2 or 3 corrections, that would not
be too helpful in improving, we need to practice more letters and get corrections to ensure a good
preparation for the real exam. 2. Mostly Premium providers are not doctors or nurses, they mainly
focus on grammar and vocabulary etc, that is only 1 of 6 OET writing assessment criteria. No doubt,
some of them are experts. Another problem is, usually on YouTube or their classes etc we see famous
faces like … … and …. But we don’t know who really marks our letters, because these people get a lot of
letters to correct, we don’t know who will be correcting our letters and its quality etc, Please
remember, some of them are very good, I am not writing to tell you a lie, most of them are directly
trained by OET, so we should check their standard and compare their fees etc. As we are not sure, all of
our letters are marked one or more tutor, so I think they don’t know our individual progress. Every
letter is a new for them. These are my personal thoughts, you might disagree with me. Please compare
sample corrections of different OET experts/website before your final decision to subscribe to any
feedback service.
After premium providers, now comes other people including me (Dr Che), there are one or 2 famous
writing correction websites but they are like most of us, means not directly trained by OET as a
premium provider. Here the main issue is quality of the feedback. I have spent more than 4 yours after
my graduation to improve my English and reach this level. First you should ensure quality and then
should see price of feedback. Some people invest on advertisements etc and become famous, but we
should always judge their quality first then get feedback.
I think there may be people on facebook etc, who ask others or their students to write positive posts
about their service and then keep posting in different groups. These reviews may be fake or may be
real. I myself ask my students who pass their exam to write a post, but please remember you can ask
anyone who writes a post for me, I never ask them to exaggerate things for me, I only ask them to
please write a real and honest feedback. None is fake, I can show you their letters and payments
receipts etc.
Our result reports can be easily edited, some fake people copy results of other students and post in
different groups claiming their success. So, please be careful, I don’t mean all are fake, but some might
be fake.
So, how to find an authentic feedback service: first of all see their sample feedback (don’t subscribe to
any service without seeing their samples), then decide whether this person or website is authentic or
not. Then shortlist the authentic ones, now compare their quality and prices and decide which suits
you better.
Till 01/03/2021, I am the first one in the history of OET writing correction service who started such a
detailed and new style feedback service, till today, no one including all famous websites or private
tutors or facebook tutors provides such quality and detailed feedback, really usually it takes me on
average 1 to 2 hours to mark one letter of this quality sometime more time. I have kept the prices low
as compared to many corrections services for two reasons. 1. Most of us can’t afford such expensive
service, because I am myself a doctor like many of you, we can’t afford 15 to 25 dollars for one letter
correction. 2. If we take an expensive service we will only get feedback on 2 or 3 letters etc or bit more,
but that would not be sufficient for good preparation. I kept prices low so that you can practice a lot
and can pass the exam. Believe me, I am not telling a lie, I started correction service in December 2020,
till today 19/04/2021, my more than 51 students have passed OET writing and/or speaking with grade
B, and many are ready to take the exam and some are waiting for their results. In this period only 3 or
4 of my students failed in writing, 1st one was a doctor who only get 2 letters corrected only 2 days
before the exam, her first letter was of grade C, 2nd of grade C+, she still had more than one day, I told
her to write more letters, but she didn’t, and got 300 in the real exam. Other was a nurse, who had
written good letters with me, but all letters were written in more than 45 minutes and stopped getting
feedback 1 or 2 weeks before exam, and failed in all modules.
Please take care, there are many English teachers claiming to be OET expert, there are 6 OET criteria
and language is only one of them. I know my students whose grammar etc was wrong, but with just a
little bit effort of both us, she got 350 in writing. Even if your grammar is not good, but reader of the
letter can easily understand what you want to say, then we can get grade B. Please take care, many
general English teachers don’t know which information is relevant for which disease, what are the
common ways to write medical history and about signs and symptoms. They just correct your grammar
etc, and provide cheap correction service. Please don’t waste your money and time. Subscribe to any
official premium provider or someone how has real experience of OET.
I am a doctor (MD), I myself took the OET exam. I have spent more than 4 years in improving my
English and reach this level. My OET students get good results after my coaching. You can trust me for
real and authentic coaching.
What to do before you start getting feedback, watch some free YouTube videos for general OET writing
tips, watch official OET YouTube channel + others, get a general idea about it, writing criteria, how to
organize etc, if you are a doctor read writing section of book “Future Land” others e.g. nurses etc can
also find some parts of this book useful. Also read writing tips from official practice book 1 and 2.
Ready my sample corrections to get a general idea about corrections and mistakes. Then start writing
your letters and get feedback.
One last thing, at any time, if you think my correction is not the same as my samples, you can take your
money back without any hesitation. Even my corrections are now far better than these samples I send
you for free because these are taken from my initial corrections, till now I have marked a lot of letters.
Many students ask me time of preparation and any plan etc:
For an average student whose basic English is good, dedicated study of 1 to 2 months is enough. Many
doctors or nurses can’t give proper time to their OET preparation due to their jobs etc, so please don’t
take any premature attempt. Prepare well. For speaking and writing, you don’t need to study too
much, watch some free YouTube videos, read a little bit from the books I mentioned. Almost most of
you already have enough English language knowledge, you just need a little bit guidance and feedback
to achieve grade B in writing. So, quickly watch and read these things, and start getting feedback and
practicing with your study partners and your OET teacher.
For reading and listening after watching free videos and tips from books I mentioned, start doing
practice and practice all available reading and listening materials. If you have done all of them once,
starting doing them again.
(you make your own plan, according to your free time and timetable, this is not a big issue, study as
much as you can)
My last advice: being your colleague my advice is please please don’t make any premature
attempt, means don’t take the exam without preparation. It is easy but difficult to pass without
preparation and guidance. Unfortunately, if you fail once, apart from wasting a lot of money, you will
also waste a lot time. It will be frustrating, and time-consuming. Waiting for remark, then apply again,
wait for exam date, then wait for result etc. Save you time and money, instead of wasting it on
remarking and/or taking the exam again, invest a little on preparation and pass the exam in first
attempt.
Best wishes, keep in touch with me for any updates, and keep checking my posts for any updates and
more tips.
Please you are not a member of my facebook groups, join all of them and keep in touch with me.
1. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2 (about 18000 members) OET Preparation

2. https://web.facebook.com/groups/384158182347207 (about 53,000 members) OET
materials and writing correction service group
3. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparationgroup Free OET materials group (about 6000
members)
My facebook profile: https://web.facebook.com/drcheoet/ to send me direct message for any

questions or queries. (inbox me for link to my google drive)
My email: drche2020@gmail.com

My first success story, a friend of mine based in the UK; I marked helped him a lot and marked
his letters and provided individual coaching for free. Naturally, we don’t like free things, he
subscribed to one Pound per letter correction from someone else, when came back to me again
after some day, his writing was deteriorated. But finally he managed to improve his writing
again.

2nd Success story, Dr Afsheen from Pakistan, very energetic and hard working student, I marked
her 9 letters, she got 360 in writing.
You can see screenshot of last letter I sent, it date, her exam date, her result date, to ensure it is not a
fake feedback

3rd success story, Dr Haseeb Shah from Pakistan, very hard working doctor, strictly followed my
advice with close eyes, his writing was too weak at the start, but due to hard of both of us, he
obtained 380 in writing, unbelievable for both of us, ha ha. Screen shot of his last letter and
date of chat and date of exam and result can be compared to ensure it not a fake feedback

4th Success story: Dr Quratulain Haider, she got 360 in writing
Success story 5: a doctor from Canada, taking OET for EFCMG USA registration, contacted me
about 3 days before exam, his English was very good, but his first letter was of more than 360
words with grade less than C, he was not following OET criteria, in just 2 or 3 days, I helped him
a lot in a short time, even till a few minutes before exam, we were in contact, he got 360 in
writing, but failed speaking, ( I was not providing speaking feedback at that time)

Success story no. 6: A doctor from Australia, interesting story, her writing was very weak, but
she followed my advice, her first letter, sample no. 2 for doctors, 1st letter of this file, was of C-
/C level, I marked her 6 letters, amazingly she got 360 in writing, (as she failed reading, I am not
going to attaché screenshot or her name)
Success story no. 7: Dr Zulqarnain Riaz from Pakistan, his letters were good, but still needed
guidance for ensure a B, I marked his 4 letters. Very nice person, best wishes for his future

Success story no. 8 Dr Zakir Jamal contacted me only 3 days before exam, I marked his 4 letters,
and he passed his exam, screenshot of chat attached to show you it is not a fake feedback.
Please read his chat, below

Success story 9: Dr Ghiyas Uddin from India, first paid me only for one letter to test my service
ha ha ha, after getting feedback on first letter, purchased 4 four more letters. Very nice person,
and hard working, contacted me just a few days before exam, and got 350 in writing,

Success Story no. 10 Dr Asad Raza, I marked his 7 letters, interesting thing about this doctor is
that after the exam he was able to recall his complete letter, he wrote the letter and sent to
me, after reading real exam letter, I told him he will get 350, 360 or 370, look at our chat and
his result, he got 360 in writing. A very nice person really

Success story no. 11 Dr Syeda Fatima from Romania, a really nice and good doctor, I marked
her and her sister Dr Manhal Rafi, 9 letters in total, both of them passed the exam. Dr Fatima
was a bit weak in writing, so she is more happy than her sister. Ha ha ha

Success story 12. Dr Aina Khan, I marked her one free letter, after passing the exam, she told
me it was helpful

Success story 13: Dr Awais Khan, very busy doctor he paid me for 7 letters but could only send
me 2 letters for marking he was busy, he passed the exam, I will return his balance money for 5
letters

Success story no. 14: Dr Danushki Fernando from Australia, I marked her four letters, and she
passed the exam in first attempt. You can compare our chat date with her exam and result
date, to show you her feedback is not fake

Success story no. 15, a doctor who got 370 in writing, he told me not to show his name.
Success story no. 16: a doctor from Pakistan, I marked his 2 letters, he got 400 in writing, but
340 in listening, that is why I am going to show his name.
Success story no. 17: I did one free correction for her, she got 380 in writing, but 330 in
listening, so I am not going to show her name.

Success story no. 18: Dr Manhal Rafi from Romania, sister of Dr Syeda Fatima, both are them
are very good doctors, I corrected their 9 letters in total, and both of them passed.

Success story no. 19, A nurse from Philippines, I marked her 5 letters, she got 350 in writing but
could not pass reading module, so I am not going to show her name.

Success story 20. A doctor from USA, taking OET for EFCMG Usmle registration, failed in writing
in first attempt, contacted me just 2 or 3 days before exam, she was hard working, I helped her
a lot in a short time, marked her 6 or 7 letters, I took one to one session with her, she got 400 in
writing, she took two exams, one day paper-based, next day OET@Home, failed in reading I
think in one, she was able to do clubbing for her registration (exception for her, generally
clubbing is not allowed in the USA)
Success story no. 21: Dr Sahar, got one paid letter marked with me, passed her exam

Success story no. 22 A doctor from India, got 5 letters marked by me, and pass her exam in first
attempt, 370 in writing

Success story 23. A doctor who sent me a letter for free correction, I think one day before
exam, I pointed out her weak points, she was weak in writing introductions and some other
points, I told her to write purpose, of 5 letters, then I marked them, she passed the exam, all
was free for her
Success story no. 24: A doctor from Sri Linka, I think, now living in the UK, I marked 10 letters,
she got 350 in writing, but failed other modules, so I am not showing the name.
Success story no. 25 Dr Junaid Jawaid, paid me for subscription a long time before the exam,
but could not write letters earlier as he was busy, I marked his 6 letters in total, + 30 minutes
one to one coaching, as he was still weak in writing. Finally passed and got 370 in writing

Success story no. 26 Dr Madiha Asim, I marked her only one letter before exam, after her exam she was able to
recall her complete letter, she sent me case notes and her letter also, (of real exam, recalled) I told her you are
at borderline, you will pass, the same letter she sent to a paid writing correction service, they marked the same
letter as grade C, in the real exam result she shot 360 in writing and passed other modules also,
My chat with her a day after the exam

Same letter marked by a correction service

Success story no. 27 Dr Maham Zeba, contacted me only 6 days before exam, she was about to defer her exam,
as she was not improving with Benchmark, I offered m helped and asked her to the exam. She passed in first
attempt, look at our chats so that you are sure it is not fake feedback

You can see the date in above chat, her exam was on 6 th of Feb 2021, she contacted me on 31/01,
Read my reply when she was going to defer her exam

Success story no. 28 Dr Lena Ali from Ali from Iraq, a very nice and humble doctor, I marked her 6 letters, + one
to one sessions, she got 360 in writing, passed other modules also

Success story no. 29, Dr Snehitha Reddy from India, she got 7 VIP letters correct by me, and got 370 in her
writing

Success story no. 30 Dr Nuzhat Zaheer from UK, contacted me just a few days before exam, I marked her 4
letters and she got 350 in writing

Success story no. 31 Dr Roma Lal from India or UK, got 4 letters corrected by me. Got 360 in writing

2 Unsuccessful students:
Believe me, I am not telling a lie, I started correction service in December 2020, till today 01/03/2021,
my 31 students have passed OET writing with grade B, and many are ready to take the exam and some
are waiting for their results. In this period only 2 of my students failed in writing, 1 st one was a doctor
who only get 2 letters corrected only 2 days before the exam, her first letter was of grade C, 2 nd of
grade C+, she still had more than one day, I told her to write more letters, but she didn’t, and got 300
in the real exam. Other was a nurse, who had written good letters with me, but all letters were written
in more than 45 minutes and stopped getting feedback 1 or 2 weeks before exam, and failed in all
modules.
After this these reviews, I have a lot of next success stories, if I add all of them here, this file would
become very long, so I am just making a brief list:

Succes Name of Country of No. of Real exam score Remarks
s story candidate stay or letters/speaking role
no. origin plays marked with me
32 Marco Gemelli Italy 14 letters, 4 role plays Speaking 400, Worked hard
writing 350 on all modules
33 Hafsa Saboor UK or 10 letters Writing B grade
Pakistan
34 Mazharul Alam Canada 7 letters, 11 or 12 Writing 360, Failed in
speaking role plays speaking 360/ speaking in 1st
attempt, in 2nd
attempt only
got my
feedback
35 Hasanwitha Koli India 4 letters, 2 speaking Writing 370, Passed all in
speaking 380 1st attempt
36 Sainath Kakarla India 4 letters, 2 speaking Writing 360, Passed all in
37 Jamshed Majeed In Sri 10 letters, 2 speaking Writing 360, Passed all in
Lanka, speaking 410 1st attempt
(Pakistani)
38 Fati Risan Pakistan 4 letters 360 in writing Pass all in 1st
attempt, was
about to defer
her exam, but
contacted me
39 A doctor India 15 letters, and 6 or 7 380 in writing, but I helped a lot
speaking 320 in speaking in writing, but
we started
speaking
feedback
later,
40 Dr Saba Pakistan 3 letters Grade B in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
41 Haider Kattub From 6 letters, 6 or 8 Writing 380, Just contacted
Egypt, spekaing speaking 370 me about 5
exam in days before
Dubai exam, but
passed in 1st
attempt
42 Muddasir Rasool Pakistan Just a few speaking Grade B in Passed
speaking speaking in 2nd
attempt
43 Dr Priya R William India A senior doctor, got Grade B in writing Passed all in
just 1 or 2 brief 1st attempt
writing feedback
44 Rizwan Anwar Pakistan 3 letters Grade B in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
45 A Nurse Saudi 3 or 5 letters 350 in writing
Arabia
46 A doctor India 6 letters, 6 or 8 Writing 350,
speaking speaking 380
47 Jyothi Anush India 2 letters Grade B in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
48 A doctor Pakistan 12 letters, 10 speaking 370 writing, 400
speaking
49 Usmle Pakistan 2 letters, 2 speaking Grade B in Passed all in
Destination speaking and 1st attempt
writing
50 Nor Hashimah Malaysia 6 letters, 6 or 8 360 writing, 430 Passed all in
speaking speaking 1st attempt
51 Meriel Keiy Singapore 5 letters 350 in writing passed
52 Maryam Javed Pakistan 2 letters 370 in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
53 Sephora sid Uk, 5 letters 390 in writing 2nd attempt,
Pakistan passed all
54 Alexander Chach Ireland 4 letters 350 in writing Passed all in
(physiotherapist) 1st attempt
55 Naveed Shaikh Pakistan 10 letters 360 in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
56 Laraib Ambreen Paksitan 5 letters Grade in writing Passed all in
(pharmacist) 1st attempt
57 A doctor Australia 5 letters 370 in writing
58 A doctor UK 4 letters 350 in writing
59 A doctor India 3 letters 350 in writing
60 Sripali Sri Lanka 6 letters 360 in writing Passed all in
Dassanayake 1st attempt
61 Sadaf Fatima India 5 letters 350 in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
62 A doctor Pakistan 6 letters 380 in writing
63 Kainat Memon Pakistan 8 letters, 2 speaking Writing 370, Passed all in
64 A doctor USA, Cuba 7 speaking 350 in speaking
65 Maverick Pakistan 5 letters 390 in writing Passed all in

Maverick 1st attempt
66 Usmle Matche22 Pakistan 3 letters 380 in writing Passed all in
1st attempt
67 A nurse UK, 4 letters 360 in writing
Russia?
68 Svetlana Iv UK? Or 9 letters, 10 speaking 370 writing, 430 Passed all in
Ireland speaking 1st attempt
Best wishes, keep in touch with me for any updates, and keep checking my posts for any updates and
more tips.
Please you are not a member of my facebook groups, join all of them and keep in touch with me.
1. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2 (25000+ members) OET Preparation

2. https://web.facebook.com/groups/384158182347207 (about 55,000 members) OET
materials and writing correction service group
3. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparationgroup Free OET materials group (about 7000
members)
My facebook profile: https://web.facebook.com/drcheoet/ to send me direct message for any

questions or queries. (inbox me for the link to my google drive)
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Comma after Dear Dr…..,

Comma after Re; Mr………….,

Leave a blank line before and after date

Put Newtown on the next line

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A good try to make a concise and clear purpose

, a 42-year-old (good grammar point, it is good, we use hyphens here)

who I suspect has a gastro-oesophageal reflux with possible structure.

and an endoscopy, if required.

I would appreciate your further assessment and an endoscopy, if required.

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Our purpose for this letter should look like this:

2nd Body Paragraph:

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There are no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety

Last sentence is ok.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:

Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux,

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pantoprazole (look at spelling and and “p” should be small)

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Please do not hesitate to contact

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Word count: 179

Description Grade Your

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Description Grade Your

3. Conciseness & Clarity

5. Organisation & Layout

Description Grade Your

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Dr. Smith Dr. Smith

Dear Dr. Smith, Dear Dr. Smith,

Overall good effort

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(look at these introductions)

1st body paragraph:

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Children (you might say it is small c, but it looks capital. )

2nd Body Paragraph:

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