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Henneke Duistermaat
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Avoid filler phrases like
excellent customer
service
Avoid filler phrases like
excellent customer
service.
Yuck:
Our product is supported by
excellent customer service.
Yuck:
Our product is supported by
excellent customer service.
More persuasive:
Any questions? Call our team
on 0123 456 789.
We’ll pick up the phone within
3 rings. That’s a promise.
Avoid superlatives
Avoid superlatives
Bllerrgh:
The best accounting software.
Bllerrgh:
The best accounting software.
More persuasive:
1,790,000 small businesses use
our accounting software.
Use sensory words
Use sensory words
Icky:
Our doors are solid.
Icky:
Our doors are solid.
More persuasive:
Our doors are kick-proof.
Or:
Even the hulk can’t break our
doors with a sledgehammer.
Focus on benefits
Focus on benefits
I design high-converting websites.
I design high-converting websites.
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Don’t use exclamation
marks
Don’t use exclamation
marks
Ask questions instead
Ask questions instead
Blah:
We listen to what you want.
Blah:
We listen to what you want.
More persuasive:
Would you like a modern
wetroom with the latest gadgets?
Or an opulent bathroom in
Georgian style? We help you
create the bathroom of your
dreams.
Avoid the passive voice
Waaaaah:
You’re so much loved by me.
Waaaaah:
You’re so much loved by me.
More persuasive:
I love you.
Never address your
reader as part
of a crowd
Never address your
reader as part
of a crowd
Ouch:
To those of you who were
inconvenienced, I apologize
sincerely.
Ouch:
To those of you who were
inconvenienced, I apologize
sincerely.
More persuasive:
I apologize if our downtime
created problems for you.
Avoid gobbledygook
Avoid gobbledygook
Yikes:
Our market-leading products
alleviate the stress of payroll
management.
Yikes:
Our market-leading products
alleviate the stress of payroll
management.
More persuasive:
Our services take the pain out of
payroll management.
Use specific examples
Use specific examples
Wishy-washy:
We dye your hair in any color.
Wishy-washy:
We dye your hair in any color.
More persuasive:
Lavender purple or shocking
pink? We dye your hair in any
color you like.
Tell mini-stories
Tell mini-stories
Duh:
We use silky smooth textiles.
Duh:
We use silky smooth textiles.
More persuasive:
We scoured the world to look for
the softest textiles. In 1999, we
discovered a small mill in Italy
producing delicate satin … etc.
Avoid multiple
adjectives before nouns
Avoid multiple
adjectives before nouns
Eh:
Our beautiful, soft,
vibrant linen …
Eh:
Our beautiful, soft,
vibrant linen …
More persuasive:
Our vibrant linen …
Don’t publish sugary
testimonials
Don’t publish sugary
testimonials
Really???
Henneke is the most wonderful
copywriter.
Really???
Henneke is the most wonderful
copywriter.
More persuasive:
Henneke’s web copy appeals to
our ideal customers, and helps
us to increase sales.
Make your call-to-action
bossy
Make your call-to-action
bossy
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