WRITING PRACTICE

Find the mistakes in each sentences and corect them.

1. They need to be received a quality education at an early age.
2. In this modern rapid developing economical age, …
3. There are several differences arising from the view that whether or not should the
government allocate abundant resources to them.
4. Globalization is now the initial priority of any country in the world which mostly
leans on the ability to adaptation and integration of citizens.
5. Another reason why young people could make huge impact on country’s future is
to easily improve national economy
6. The factor which contributes to a wealthy country is a great number of labour
force and its major element being young people. Young people who have a
dynamic energy rather than old people so that they are able to do every jobs
requiring strength.
7. Therefore, the nation’s government should put a great effort into its youth
because youngsters are the future of the country as well as they can lead the new
generations.
8. The progress of development would be relatively with investing in the young
people. From my point of view, I strongly agree with a country should finance on
the young generation.
9. Another reason is that economy of a nation and industrial development depends
on qualified and train younger. For instance, doctors and engineers highly
required in any nation to support the health and industrial sector of a country.
10.Therefore, they are the person bringing Vietnam to integrate with international
friends in the world. What I mean, investing in young generation, this is for the
future of the country.
11.Secondly, investing the education in young generation is essential. For instance,
if they are deeply trained in medical field, they could create great drugs to help
people overcome the disease. Especially in the coronavirus outbreak process, the
scientists and experts created the vaccine which can against this virus and save
people. As a result, young generation have an enormous impact on their country.
12.Therefore, they are needed ensure that they are equipped with the skills and
knowledge needed to enter the workforce and contribute to economic growth.
This can lead to increase productivity and competitiveness and create new job
opportunities.
13.In fact, the more young people studying and working in society instead of elders
own their comprehension.
14.Many surveys indicate that the crime rate of the youth in Singapore has been
reducing significantly due to the fact that they have high literacy rate, thus,
minimize the chances they get into fights and other illegal actions.

Give your comments on the paragraphs below.

1. The young is also a representative image who boosts their nation’s reputation.
An appealing example for this is U23 football team that played in a number of
international competitions. It is shown the fact that their victories had tremendous
contributions to the country. Vietnam was greater well-known not only in the
Southeast Asian region but also in the whole Asia and the West. This results in
the development of the economy and tourism since more and more overseas
tourists have visited Vietnam. Furthermore, the young generation is the most
important force in military. This is to say that they are the first community
support our nation and willing to stand up when the country appeals for their
assistance.
2. In addition, when the country focuses to invest heavily in the young generation, it
can build up a range of responsible leaders in the future. As far as I know,
people’s mindsets and perspectives can be framed when they were young and
hence if they can experience more in the shape of the country’s demand, they can
be responsible leaders. For example, in Vietnam, we have a lot of exchanging
scholarships for the young leader in a variety of clubs and organizations to
explore new cultures and the way of leading in foreign schools and universities.
So that, those who have the opportunity to hand on experience and accumulate
knowledge abroad could turn back to our country and follow their dream of being
responsible leaders.
3. To begin with, I strongly agree with the fact that investing in young generation in
terms of education will help boost the development of a country. This is because
a majority of children will grow to join and lead corporates, which can financially
affect their nations. Living in a world so revolutionary with cutting-edge
technology, young people should be provided tools and capital to follow
advanced training programs in order to serve their countries later. In Vietnam,
VinUniversity who is gaining popularity through valuable scholarships and
financial aid offers, along with strategic collaborations with many top universities
worldwide is an example to emphasize that it is wise to highly invest on young
people. Moreover, children need thorough education to develop their sensibility
of morality, which can help create a nondiscriminatory, equal and peaceful
society.