Is the script okay? Yes!

Is it believable for the viewer? Yes, the dialogue seems rather realistic, the
only thing I would add is perhaps more
about why they are arguing.

Is there anything that could be changed to Maybe include more of an event at some
make it more interesting? point
Is there any part that doesn’t go together Some of the dialogue is a little too-formal
well? and sounds like how you would write an
argument, not how you would say an
argument.

How can I end it? I think the ending is fine if there was more
of a climax in the middle. You could add an
event to the ending or maybe just draw out
their apologies more so they don’t
apologise and then it just abruptly ends.