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Trevor Lin
Maddie Roepe
Writing 2
11 December 2023
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Reflection
situation” and “evolves through human use activity,” thus helping individuals carry “out human
communicative intentions in fairly stable ways” (Bickmore). Essentially, genres are tools “to
help people get things done” and have been generated by others’ past experiences and decisions
in a similar context (Dirk). In literature, genres organize writings based on structure, word
choice, and an author’s purpose. However, specific genres may not be appropriate for all
audiences. For example, you wouldn’t want to format an email to your boss using conventions
typically found in a children’s book. Nonetheless, if you desired to explain the content of that
children’s book in a manner appropriate for a workspace, you’d have to change enough of its
contents that a new audience could understand. In other words, you’re doing a genre translation!
For my writing project, I chose to translate the academic journal “Duration of American
Football Play and Chronic Traumatic Encephalopathy” into a human interest story directed
toward parents of football players as opposed to those deeply entrenched in the scientific
community. I chose to translate this academic journal into a human interest story because I
perceived the worst effects of CTE as a tragic lesson. As a result, I wanted a genre that embraced
the use of emotions in inciting change and forcing people to act. With these constraints, I landed
on a human interest story, the ideal combination of pathos and logos. By adhering to conventions
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typically found in human interest stories, I intended to raise awareness of the correlation between
The first step in this process was analyzing universal features used by authors of different
human interest stories. To achieve this, I embraced Brad Jacobson’s teachings throughout “Make
Your ‘Move’: Writing in Genres,” which focuses on rhetorical moves analysis, “a useful,
practical approach for students to understand how writers achieve their goals through various
writing strategies” (Jacobson 217). By looking for “similar kinds of vocabulary and grammar,
design features, content, and patterns for organizing their content,” I noticed several patterns
among human interest stories. For example, I discovered that what lies at the center of a human
interest story isn't the science or argumentative claims but the personal narrative. To figure out
why authors made this decision, I combined Jacobson’s rhetorical moves analysis with lessons
from Mike Bunn’s “How to Read Like a Writer.” Throughout this course reading, Bunn stressed
reading like a writer, which helps “identify some of the choices the author made so that you can
better understand how such choices might arise in your writing” (Bunn 72). Similar to how an
archetype looks at a building, I began to read like a writer and realized that the author did this to
pull on their audience’s heartstrings. By allowing the reader to hear firsthand the tragic
experiences of those close to the issue, the audience cannot help but develop sympathy for the
story's victims. As a result, readers are much more willing to support changes aimed at
preventing tragic stories in the respective human interest story from happening ever again. With
this knowledge, I started with the tragedy of Junior Seau and the impact his death had on his
friends and loved ones. I hoped the story would appeal to parents’ empathy, especially with
Junior Seau’s mother wishing God would take her instead. Because most parents share the belief
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of sacrificing their well-being for that of their children, this story would set the stage for parents
Furthermore, I was interested in why authors of this genre introduced the human interest
story at the beginning of the writing process, as opposed to it being at the center of the writing
piece. By reading like a writer, I focused on how this writing choice affected me and realized that
by throwing the reader head-on into the story, they have no choice but to feel overwhelmed by
the story’s emotional appeal. Additionally, the personal story serves the purpose of easing the
reader into the reading and introducing the topic before delving deeper into the impact this topic
has on a broader scale. Subsequently, I placed my human interest story at the beginning, not just
to adhere to this genre’s conventions but to ease readers into the issue of CTE. After readers
become emotionally invested in the writing, I’d share the academic journal’s scientific findings
to set the stage for later arguments that CTE poses too much of a risk for parents to enroll their
children in football.
To translate an academic journal aimed at the scientific community into a human interest
story for everyday parents, I recognized that much of the journal's scientific jargon would
confuse my new audience. For example, many readers, including myself, have a hard time
understanding the meaning of “all primary models” satisfying “the linearity assumption”
between “CTE status and CTE severity” (Mez 120). To remedy this, I realized I had to leave out
certain details amidst the translation. This solution adheres to the ideals promoted in L. Lennie
Irvin’s “Changing Your Mindset About Revision.” Throughout his article, Irvin claims that
revision is necessary as “writing is about getting our thinking and meaning on a page,” and yet,
“we always experience a gap between what we mean and what we say” (Irvin 324). As a result, I
left out many details about how the researchers analyzed the brains and the lengths they went to
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during the selection process to ensure bias didn’t corrupt their findings. Instead, I emphasized the
statistics that proved a correlation between time playing football and CTE to get the point across
and not confuse the reader. Just as Irvine discussed losing information in translation, I lost some
technical jargon that the scientific community would understand at the benefit of parents who
Irvine goes on to say that each round of revision leads us to “find something missing or
out of alignment to adjust and fix” (Irvin 324). Likewise, after losing some authority due to
removing details explaining how the experiment was as unbiased as possible, I discovered I
needed a new way to add more ethos to my essay. To achieve this, I again used Jacobson’s
rhetorical moves analysis and noticed a profusion of direct quotes from people closest to the
issue. I recognized that direct quotes provide a sense of authority because who would better
know about the matter than people with firsthand knowledge? Subsequently, I inserted quotes
from Junior Seau’s loved ones to make emotional connections between the reader and those
A challenge midway through the translation process was that I lost sight of my main goal
of appealing to parents of football players after connecting the personal story to my academic
journal. The essay seemed to only bring awareness to CTE with logos and pathos to show a
general audience the seriousness of head trauma from a respected authority. I felt I had hit a
writer's block and had no larger goal in mind, such as convincing parents about the dangers of
football. Feeling as though I had strayed away from my main goal, I decided to reflect upon my
letter to the reader. According to Sandra L. Giles, letters to the reader “tell the reader what you
intend for the essay to do” and help the author “develop more insight into and control over
composing and revising processes” (Giles 193-194). Reminded of my goal to inform parents
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about the dangers of football and CTE, I dedicated the last stages of the essay to portraying how
football goes against parental responsibilities. By asking questions to the reader, I hoped to get
the parents reading this project to truly consider the costs of enrolling their children in football.
Additionally, the concerns I needed to keep in mind were to be specific in my actions and
not try to spread myself too thin across genres. During Project Builder 2, I chose a news article
because its broadness provided more flexibility. Using a news article showed I didn’t have a
clear vision of how to express my ideas. However, I overcame this when recalling that “too much
variation results eventually in lack of meaning” (Dirk 259). As a result, I chose a human interest
story and focused all my attention on creating an emotional story and then putting it in the
example, an aspect that helped my revising process was learning and embracing peer feedback.
discovered that comments “view the writing rhetorically, in terms of how the text has certain
effects on readers” (Straub 143). When reviewing peer feedback on my project, my partner asked
if readers would best receive this information from a Google document or if there was another
form of content that better expressed my ideas. After acknowledging that a straight-up Google
document had a dull appearance, I transferred my genre translation from a Google document to a
Google site. With visual elements and more organization, I hoped this new format would better
allow readers to become emotionally invested in the tragic impact CTE had on the Seau family
Dirk’s view of genres. Dirk claims that our goal as writers is to be aware of context and “to
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recognize these shifts in location and to be aware of how much shifts might affect your writing”
(Dirk 256). Feedback from my writing instructor taught me that while parenthetical citations are
conventional for essays, they don’t have the same effect on human interest stories. Just as Straub
stresses looking at the impact specific portions of the text have on readers, I learned that these
parenthetical citations pulled the reader out of the narrative. Therefore, I replaced these
parenthetical citations with footnotes, thus making the Google site more visually organized.
Ultimately, I believe I met most of the goals I set for myself. I felt I used the course
readings to develop my reflective writing on this essay and the project builders. Furthermore, I
believe I met my goal of utilizing an emotional story to draw the reader in before getting into the
scientific facts about concussions and CTE. However, I would like to set a new goal based on
this experience. I hope to develop a better vision when organizing my essay and each paragraph
within my writing. I chose this goal because my writing process was slightly disorganized as I
kept jumping back and forth. In the end, for my first introduction to writing reflective essays and
translating genres, I believe I reached many of the goals I had set for myself.
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