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考官华丽雅思大作文详解 1：原因分析题型电影话题

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天我们来看一篇大作文，题目是：
Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally
produced films. Why could this be?
Should governments give more financial support to local film
industries?
为什么人们更喜欢外国电影?政府应该支持本土电影吗?Simon 管这种题目叫
“Two-Part Question”，并且建议大家这种文章要写成四段，每段具体内容：
1. Introduction: topic + general answer to both questions
2. Answer the first question
3. Answer the second question
4. Conclusion: paraphrase the answer you gave in the introduction
Simon 说，Introduction 段可以只写两句，第一句引入主题，第二句表明立场。
如：It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries
than domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why
this is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local
film-making by subsidizing the industry.
第二段和第三段为主体段落，Simon 建议大家每段各写五句话，写之前大家可
以发散一下思维，简要列出每一句的论据分别写什么。下面是 Simon 给出的每
段的大纲：
First main paragraph: Why could this be?
1. Topic sentence - several reasons
2. First reason - budgets for action, special effects, spectacular
locations
3. Example - Hollywood blockbusters like Avatar or James Bond films
4. Second reason - the most famous actors, actresses and directors
5. Final reason - poor quality local filmmaking in many countries
Second main paragraph: Should governments give financial support?
1. Topic sentence - governments should support local film industries
2. Explain why - talented local film-makers need opportunities
3. Explain more - they need money to pay film crews, actors etc.
4. Explain consequences - would lead to employment, income, tourism
5. Example - invent an example about your country!
想好这五点之后，就很容易把这五句话串连成一个段落了，来看看 Simon 是如
何 将 大 纲 中 的 词 汇 短 语 转 化 成 一 个 个 完 整 的 句 子 的 ： There are several
reasons why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the
films produced in their own countries. Firstly, the established film
industries in certain countries have huge budgets for action, special
effects and to shoot scenes in spectacular locations. Hollywood
blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or the James Bond films are examples of
such productions, and their global appeal is undeniable. Another
reason why these big-budget films are so successful is that they
often star the most famous actors and actresses, and they are made by
the most accomplished producers and directors. The poor quality, low-
budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.
结论段 Simon 是这样写的：
In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help
to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete
with the foreign productions that currently dominate the market.
我们可以看出：1，结论段是在改述 Introduction 段; 2，他在结论段中有改两
个 Part 的顺序——先说 Financial Support 再说外国电影的流行。对于不知道
结尾段落该写什么的同学，这两点可以是非常好的借鉴。
接下来 Phoebe 老师就帮大家贴出完整版的满分作文供大家参考背诵：
It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than
domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this
is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local
film-making by subsidizing the industry.
There are various reasons why many people find foreign films more
enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries. Firstly,
the established film industries in certain countries have huge
budgets for action, special effects and to shoot scenes in
spectacular locations. Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or
the James Bond films are examples of such productions, and their
global appeal is undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget
films are so successful is that they often star the most famous
actors and actresses, and they are made by the
most accomplished producers and directors. The poor quality, low-
budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.
In my view, governments should support local film
industries financially. In every country, there may be talented
amateur film-makers who just need to be given the opportunity to
prove themselves. To compete with big-budget productions from
overseas, these people need money to pay for film crews, actors and a
host of other costs related to producing high-quality films. If
governments did help with these costs, they would see an increase in
employment in the film industry, income from film sales, and perhaps
even a rise in tourist numbers. New Zealand, for example, has seen an
increase in tourism related to the 'Lord of the Rings' films, which
were partly funded by government subsidies.
In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help
to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete
with the foreign productions that currently dominate the market.
(294 words, band 9)
Last but not the least, Phoebe 老师又要帮大家分析满分作文里面的词汇啦
~
Subsidizing 这个词大家眼熟吗?其名词形式 Subsidy 在剑七 Test2 的阅读中有
出现过，和 Allowance 做同义替换，意为补贴。
Established 的动词形式大家用得比较多，加 ed 变为形容词，意为既有的 。
Accomplished 同样是 v.变 adj.，意为精通的，熟练的。大家要学会灵活使用这
类形容词。
Blockbuster 和 Shoot Scenes 这些和电影有关的词汇大家要记牢，可以用于口
语表达中。
Financially 不仅是对题目表达的替换，而且形容词变副词的用法也很灵活。
Dominate 大家背完这个单词不知道怎么用的话就背下来这个短语 Dominate
the market，“在市场占据主导地位”。
今天小站的 Phoebe 老师先帮大家整理到这，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击
这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 2：同意与否题型

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天我们来分析一篇在观点上 partly agree 的大作文。以一篇大家经常会遇到
的有关 Traditional Views 的作文为例，题目如下：
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how
people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe
that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for
modern life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
看到这种问 agree 还是 disagree 的题目，大家先不要急于写作，Simon 建议大
家先来回答以下三个问题并做些笔记：
1. What arguments and examples could you use to agree?
2. What arguments and examples could be used to disagree?
3. Which answer would you find easier: agree, disagree or partly
agree?
Plan Your Idea
当同意和不同意都有一样多的论据可以陈述时，那我们在第一段 Introduction
段 落 中 ， 就 要 表 明 自 己 对 该 问 题 partly agree 。 然 后 就 要 进 行 Plan Your
Idea，即把每段要写的内容列成大概题纲。可能有同学会觉得这样会浪费时间，
但 Simon 认为，如果你不 plan your idea 的话，很可能写到一半就不知道该写
什么好，甚至会写跑题。接下来看一下对于这篇文章 Simon 是如何 plan his
idea 的：
4-paragraph plan:
1. Introduce the topic of 'traditional ideas and modern life', then
partly agree: some ideas are outdated, but others are still helpful
2. Paragraph about ideas which are not so helpful nowadays:
Work - having a career for life is no longer normal
Relationships - 'rules' about who and when to marry are changing
Gender roles - traditional fixed roles of men and women have changed
3. Paragraph about traditional ideas which we shouldn't forget:
Work - work hard, do your best, take pride in your work
Behaviour - politeness, good manners, respect for others
Community - help others, be a good neighbour, look after local area
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise the answer
Structure 有多重要？
首先大家可能已经发现，Simon 写的大作文基本都是四个段落，小站老师在整
理 Simon 给学生留学做回复时发现这样的问答：
"Hi Simon. I used your 4-paragraph structure with short introduction
and conclusion, but I only got band 6.5. I need a band 7, so should I
try a different structure?"
Simon：Can you see what is wrong with this question? The student is
assuming that essay structure is the secret to a high score. But
remember: even a great essay structure is nothing without good
content (ideas, vocabulary, correct grammar). If you're stuck on band
6 or 6.5, you probably need to improve the content, not the
structure.
小站老师认为 Simon 说得非常对，作文的结构只是骨骼，其内容才是肉肉，观
点、词汇、正确的语法方能让作文美观饱满。
Introduction 段落的写法
然后，我们看一下对于 partly agree 的作文 Simon 是如何写 Introduction 段
落的：
It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that
often seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I
agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others
are still useful and should not be forgotten.
Simon 用了 It is true that…. While I agree…, I believe that…句型来
分别陈述两边观点，这个句型非常灵活好用，建议大家立刻记在小本本上。
主体段落的写法
再来看 Simon 是如何写一个主体段落的：
In my opinion, some traditional views and values are certainly
applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations
attached great importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and
taking pride in one’s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit
young people as they enter today’s competitive job market. Other
characteristics that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness
and good manners. In our globalised world, young adults can expect to
come into contact with people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and
it is more important than ever to treat others with respect. Finally,
I believe that young people would lead happier lives if they had a
more ‘old-fashioned’ sense of community and neighbourliness.
主体段落依然是五句话(topic sentence and 3 points),将上面 ideas 里面的
核心词汇有逻辑地串连起来。

接下来 Pheobe 老师帮大家贴出完整的范文：

It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that
often seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I
agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others
are still useful and should not be forgotten.
On the one hand, many of the ideas that elderly people have about
life are becoming less relevant for younger people. In the past,
for example, people were advised to learn a profession and find a
secure jobfor life, but today’s workers expect much more variety and
diversity from their careers. At the same time, the ‘rules’ around
relationships are being eroded as young adults make their own choices
about who and when to marry. But perhaps the
greatest disparity between the generations can be seen in their
attitudes towards gender roles. The traditional roles of men and
women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted as
necessary or appropriate by most younger people.
On the other hand, some traditional views and values are certainly
applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations attach
great importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride
in one’s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people
as they enter today’s competitive job market. Other characteristics
that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners.
In ourglobalised world, young adults can expect to come into contact
with people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more
important than ever to treat others with respect. Finally, I believe
that young people would lead happier lives if they had a more ‘old-
fashioned’ sense of community and neighbourliness.
In conclusion, although the views of older people may sometimes seem
unhelpful in today’s world, we should not dismiss all traditional
ideas as irrelevant.
(299 words, band 9)
Last but not the least,来帮大家总结分析范文中的词汇，供大家参考背诵。
incompatible:中文意为不和谐，容易让学生以为这个词只能用来形容社会，而
英 文 释 意 two actions, ideas, etc. that areincompatible are not
acceptable or possible together because of basic differences,所以建议
大家背单词时多看英文释意，有助于准确运用词汇。
relevant:一对反义词，即可表示和...紧密相关，也可以表示有重要价值或意
义。反义 irrelevant
profession:我们背过很多表示专业的单词，如 major,subject,当表达学习一
个专业本领去找工作时用 profession
disparity:差异，不同，比 difference 高级多了
globalised world:常用基本表达，需背熟
sense of:表达抽象意义的感觉，如 sense of direction 方向感，sense of
satisfaction 满足感
dismiss:大家最熟悉的意思是“解雇”，记住这个短语 dismiss...as,英文释
意 to decide that sb/sth is not important and not worth thinking or
talking about
今天就到这里，大家下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 3：家庭中男女分工

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天我们来讲一篇大作文，以一些 Family Topic 的作文为例，重点讲一下什么

是文章的 Skeleton。
Simon 说，the skeleton (or framework or basic structure) of a task 2
essay is:
- the introduction
- topic sentences for main paragraphs
- and the conclusion
就是说，他认为文章的 Skeleton(就是文章的框架或基本结构)就是开头介绍、
主体段落和结论段落。在写作文之前先写 Skeleton 我们来看一下 Simon 写的一
个 Skeleton：
..........
People have different views about whether parents or schools should
bear the responsibility for helping children to become good citizens.
In my view, this responsibility should be shared.
On the one hand, parents certainly have a vital role to play in the
upbringing of their children.
On the other hand, school teachers may contribute almost as much as
parents to the development of a child.
In conclusion, both parents and schools should work together to
ensure that young people become polite and productive members of
society.
..........
大家可以看出，Simon 写的 Skeleton 已经把这篇作文的信息表达得非常清楚了，
惟一缺失的就是主体段落，即第二、三段中的细节。Simon 建议大家在写作文
之前都把 Skeleton 写到这种程度。
接下来给大家带来 Simon 最著名的建议之大作文只要写 13 句。分布在各个段落
中的名子数量如下：
· Introduction: 2 sentences
· First main body paragraph: 5 sentences
· Second main body paragraph: 5 sentences
· Conclusion: 1 sentence
有的同学可能会担心字数太少，Simon 说如果大家看他的作文看多了, you'll
see that I usually manage to write 250 words or more in this way. I
think it seems a lot less scary if you think that your task is to
write just 13 sentences!
雅思考官的满分作文都写 250+，所以大家也不必一味追求字数，重点还是在于
文章的内容，当然了，13 句话也不是绝对的，Simon 提醒大家: It is not a
'rule' that you must write 13 sentences. This is just my approach or
method.大家写作文的时候要根据自己的情况而定。
接下来以这篇作文为例，大家先自己试着写一下 Skeleton，然后和 Simon 写的
做下比较

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children
while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do
you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Here's Simon’s sample essay skeleton:
Introduction
It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of
househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in
their families. There could be several reasons for this, and I
consider it to be a very positive trend.
Main body 1, topic sentence
In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our
societies.
Main body 2, topic sentence
In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are
a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these
developments are desirable.
大家的 Skeleton 是否清晰表达了整篇文章的观点和结构呢?是否发现自己写的
文章比以往更加精简了呢?Simon 说，For many of the students I've
taught, a breakthrough (or big improvement) came when they found the
confidence to write in a more 'simple' way. Simon 认为，当你不再纠结
文章中是否包含 passives, conditionals or 'difficult academic words'
的时候，you are free to focus on answering the question and
explaining your ideas coherently.你就会将注意力放在如何顺畅地表达你的
观点。 It takes confidence to change your approach and to believe
that the 'simple' way will work.这会更加自信用更加 simple 的方式来写作。
小站老师提醒大家，这里说的 Simple，绝对不是 Easy!要想写出高分文章，还
是要在 Vocabulary、Grammar、Idea 三个方面下苦功!
这就贴出完整范文：
It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of
househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in
their families. There could be several reasons for this, and I
consider it to be a very positive trend.
In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our
societies. Equal rights movements have made great progress, and it
has become normal for women to gain qualifications and pursue a
career. It has also become socially acceptable for men to stay at
home and look after their children. At the same time, the rising cost
of living has meant that both marriage partners usually need to work
and save money before starting a family. Therefore, when couples have
children, they may decide who works and who stays at home depending
on the personal preference of each partner, or based on which partner
earns the most money.
In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress.
We should be happy to live in a society in which men and women have
equal opportunities, and in which women are not put under pressure
to sacrifice their careers. Equally, it seems only fair that men
should be free to leave their jobs in order to assume childcare
responsibilities if this is what they wish to do. Couples should be
left to make their own decisions about which parental role each
partner takes, according to their particular circumstances and needs.
In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are
a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these
developments are desirable.
(274 words, band 9)
Last but not the least,小站的 Phoebe 老师来帮大家整理一下范文中的重点
词汇~
breadwinners:非常有趣的合成词，字面上“挣面包的人”，引申为“养家糊口
的人”
equal rights movements:这个词组也经常被用到女性话题的大作文中，“平等
权利运动”
qualifications:“资历，资格”，非常高频的单词，它的各种形式都要背牢。
sacrifice their careers:“牺牲事业”。小站老师建议大家单词最好放到词
组里背，这样才能知道怎么单词怎么用
assume:这里表示“承担”。另外一个意思在雅思考试中也很常见，“假定”
今天就到这里，希望能够对大家有所帮助，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击
这里！

simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解 4：野生动物篇

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
 今天我们来看一篇以 Wild Animal 为 Topic 的大作文。 首先看一下题目：
Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is
a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
显然这道题是属于 agree or disagree 类型的，对于这种题型，第一步就是要
确定你是 agree, disagree 还是 partly agree. 就这道题目而言，要么选择保
护动物，珍视动物资源，要么选择无需保护动物资源，似乎很难做到 partly
agree。Simon 也建议大家选择“Completely disagree”。
确定观点之后，我们一如既往地，need a 4-paragraph plan.大家先试着写一
下自己的 plan，写好后来看一下 Simon 写的：
 Introduce the topic (rights and protection of wild animals), then answer the question
(completely disagree)
 First reason why we disagree e.g. our duty to protect animals, their rights and place in the
world
 Second reason why we disagree e.g. the resources we should use to protect animals, and why
this is not a waste
 Conclusion: repeat / summarise our answer
如果把写作文比作盖房子的话，那 Structure 就是房梁，房梁搭建好了接下就
是最重要的环节，填补 Ideas。你能不能为第二段和第三段想到有深度有见解
的 Ideas 将直接决定你的考试分数。所以大家平时要多多练习写作，尽量多的
去为想论据，丰富中心思想。
而对于 Introduction 和 Conclusion 段落，大家要记住 Simon 的话：
The introduction and conclusion should be short, quick and direct. If
you want a high score, spend your time on the main body.
我们来看一下 Simon 是如何写首尾段落的：
Introduction (topic + general answer)
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the
protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I
completely disagree with this point of view.
Conclusion (paraphrase the answer)
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to
protect them.
大家可以看出，Simon 写得简短直接，干净利落。首段引出 Topic 直接给出观点，
尾段复述观点。文章的重心全部放在 Body Paragraph，再次印证了那句“思想
境界有多高，分数就有多高”。

现在帮大家贴出完整范文：
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the
protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I
completely disagree with this point of view.
In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild animals have no
place in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists
only for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about
this particular century that means that we suddenly have the right to
allow or encourage the extinction of any species. Furthermore,
there is no compelling reason why we should let animals die out.
We do not need to exploit or destroy every last square metre of
land in order to feed or accommodate the world’s population. There
is plenty of room for us to exist side by side with wild animals, and
this should be our aim.
I also disagree with the idea that protecting animals is a waste of
resources. It is usually the protection of natural habitats that
ensures the survival of wild animals, and most scientists agree that
these habitats are also crucial for human survival. For example,
rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide andstabilise the
Earth’s climate. If we destroyed these areas, the costs of managing
the resulting changes to our planet would far outweigh the costs of
conservation. By protecting wild animals and their habitats, we
maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth.
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to
protect them.
(269 words, band 9)
最后是本文重点词汇总结，很多单词大家都认识，但是却不知道如何使用地更
加地道，小站老师再次建议大家通过记词组的形式去背单词，总结如下：
it is pointless to do 做...无意义
it is absurd to do 做...很荒谬
extinction=die out 动物类写作、阅读、听力都非常常见的词汇，“灭绝”
compelling reason 令人信服的原因，compelling 可替换为 convincing
feed or accommodate the world’s population 通过这个词组掌握 feed 和
accommodate 的具体用法
stabilise:stable 大家都很熟悉，它的动词形式也应该掌握，”使稳定“
far outweigh:远远超过，注意副词 far 的使用
今天到这里，大家发现 Simon 的文章已经精简到不屑于用连词了吗？到底就不
应该过多使用连词呢，小站老师下期帮大家讲解！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 5：所谓幸福

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天帮大家分析的这篇大作文出自剑桥雅思 4，很多同学认为这道题目很难
Happiness is considered very important in life.Why is it difficult to
define?What factors are important in achieving happiness?
首先，从题目可以看出，这是一篇非辩论类的关于 happiness 的作文，大家可
能平时练习的比较少，缺乏写作素材，这里就帮大家带来很多来自 Simon 的
Ideas：
� Happiness means different things to different people.
� It can be described as a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment.
� People enjoy spending time with family and friends.
� Hobbies, sports and games can be a source of fun and enjoyment.
� Some people see money as a source of happiness.
� Other people define happiness as something deeper.
� They need to feel that they are doing something useful with their
lives.
� Some people get a sense of achievement from their work.
� Others find happiness in bringing up their children.
然后，和以往只有一个题目的大作文相比，这道题包含了两个问题，这种题型
被 Simon 叫做 two-part question，同时也给出了这种题型的 4 段式结构：
Use the following 4-paragraph essay structure for this kind of
question:
1. Introduce the topic and give an overall answer to both questions
2. Answer the first question
3. Answer the second question
4. Conclude by summarising both answers
和我们前几期讲的大作文结构相比，主体段由 Details 变成了 Answer
questions，结尾再总结一下每个答案即可。开头的 Introduction 段落 Simon
建议写两句话，引入主题并做出简要回答。来看一下 Simon 是怎么写的：
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be
happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it
difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we
all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.
大家可以看出，Simon 一如既往地用了 it is … that 名型作为开篇第一句，第
二句由 while 引导，前半句回答了第一个问题：很难定义，后半句引出第二个
问题的回答：确实有获得快乐的的办法。
为什么快乐很难定义呢?这种抽象的问题让学生很伤脑筋，还是来看 Simon 是如
何回答的吧：
Why is happiness difficult to define?
Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different
to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience
another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular
passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example,
derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving
success, whereas for others, health and family are much more
important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from
excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of
happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety
of different ways.
Simon 给出的原因非常 convincing:由于个体差异，对快乐感知程度不同，定义
则不同;快乐可以和多种感觉有关，如兴奋或平静。大家可以看到，Simon 在做
解释的时候，时刻不忘举例子，让回答变得更加具体，有说服力。所以小站老
师也建议大家多在举例子方面下功夫。
现在贴出完整范文：
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be
happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it
difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we
all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.
Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different
to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or
experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own
particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for
example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or
achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much
more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from
excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of
happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety
of different ways.
Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of
happiness, most people would agree that there are some basic
preconditions to achieving it. Firstly, it is hard for a person to be
happy if he or she does not have a safe place to live and enough food
to eat. Our basic survival needs must surely be met before we can
lead a pleasant life. Secondly, the greatest joy in life is usually
found in shared experiences with family and friends, and it is rare
to find a person who is content to live in complete isolation. Other
key factors could be individual freedom and a sense of purpose in
life.
In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is
particular to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for
shelter, food and company need to be fulfilled before we can
experience it.
(292 words, band 9)
最后来做词汇总结：
the majority of:其反义词组 the minority of 也要记牢
regard of:关于
individual:个体，个性
derive:重点词汇，在阅读中也很常见，常和 step from/come from 替换
a range of:重点词组，在听力中也极其常见，常和 a variety of/a series
of 替换
今天先到这儿，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 6：道路安全

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天带来一篇大作文，题目是：
Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are
the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that
other measures would be more effective in improving road safety.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
从这道题目可以看出，这篇文章是属于大作文四种类型中的 Discussion
opinion。Simon 把大作文分成四种类型，分别是：
Here are the four types of question:
1. Opinion
2. Discussion opinion
3. Problem solution
4. 2-part question
针对不同类型，大家需要记住的要点是：
1. An 'opinion' question asks for your view, not the views of other
people, and you don't have to give both sides of the argument. Just
make your opinion clear in the introduction, then explain it in the
rest of the essay.
Opinion 类是询问你的观点，而不是其他人的观点，所以你不必给出双方论据。
只需在 Introduction 段落中澄清自己的观点，然后在后面解释就可以了。
2. A 'discussion' question requires you to write about both sides of
the argument, and you should write a similar amount for each view. If
the question also asks for your opinion, you don't need an extra
paragraph. Just make it clear in the introduction and conclusion
which of the two views you agree with.
Discussion 类要求你写出双方观点，双方字数相近，不要偏颇。如果问题中有
征询你的意见，你无需另起一段，只需在首尾段中陈述即可。
3. Type 3 is easy. Simply write a paragraph explaining the problem(s)
and a paragraph explaining the solution(s). Some questions ask about
'causes' or 'effects': these would be part of the 'problem'
paragraph.
Problem Solution 类很简单。主体段落只需一段解释问题一段给出解决方案即
可。有些问题会问到“起因”或“影响”，这些只需写进“problem”段落。
4. For type 4, just answer the two questions. Write one paragraph
about each.
2-part question 类，只需主体段每段各回答一个问题即可。
这四种类型都可以用 Simon 的 4 段式结构来写，但是不同类型的文章每个段落
内容会有所不同。小站老师提醒大家在写作的时候，首先要先看好题目类型，
再选择合适的段落结构进行写作。

现在贴出满分范文
People have differing views with regard to the question of how to
make our roads safer. In my view, both punishments and a range of
other measures can be used together to promote better driving habits.
On the one hand, strict punishments can certainly help to encourage
people to drive more safely. Penalties for dangerous drivers can act
as a deterrent, meaning that people avoid repeating the same offence.
There are various types of driving penalty, such as small fines,
licence suspension, driver awareness courses, and even prison
sentences. The aim of these punishments is to show dangerous drivers
that their actions have negative consequences. As a result, we would
hope that drivers become more disciplined and alert, and that they
follow the rules more carefully.
On the other hand, I believe that safe driving can be promoted in
several different ways that do not punish drivers. Firstly, it is
vitally important to educate people properly before they start to
drive, and this could be done in schools or even as part of an
extended or more difficult driving test. Secondly, more attention
could be paid to safe road design. For example, signs can be used to
warn people, speed bumps and road bends can be added to calm traffic,
and speed cameras can help to deter people from driving too quickly.
Finally, governments or local councils could reduce road accidents by
investing in better public transport, which would mean that fewer
people would need to travel by car.
In conclusion, while punishments can help to prevent bad driving, I
believe that other road safety measures should also be introduced.
(269 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
deterrent:阻碍物，英文释意”sth that deters”，deter 常和 stop 作同义替
换，意为阻止
licence suspension:执照吊销，重点记忆 suspension，意为暂时中止
disciplined: 名词 discipline 变化来的，英文释意”obeying the rules”,
alert:警觉的，可理解为”watchful”
vitally:至关重要的
investing in:投资于，注意介词搭配 in
今天先到这里，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 7：青少年义务社区工作

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天要分析的是一篇大作文。题目：
Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid
work in their free time to help the local community. They believe
this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a
whole.
Do you agree or disagree?
在写作之前先帮大家带来 Simon 的一个非常有用的建议。很多学生都会问 Simon
这样一个问题 Is there any specific study order that you recommend?为
此 Simon 给出了非常具体的回答，相信大家看完之后对于写作文不会再一头雾
水。以下是他建议的 study order：
1. Essay structure and paragraphs
The first thing to do is find an essay structure that works for you.
You probably know that I prefer to write 4 paragraphs, and maybe
you've seen how I write 2-sentence introductions, 5-sentence main
paragraphs and 1-sentence conclusions. Try this: take some essays
that you have already written, and rewrite them so that they all have
the same number of paragraphs and sentences.
首先要想好文章的 Structure。Simon 喜欢写 4 段式——开头两句，主体段落各
五句，结尾一句。大家可以尝试将之前写好的作文都重新写成这种结构。
2. Question types
You need to see examples of the four question types, and make sure
you know how to answer each type using your preferred essay
structure.
平时多看大作文四种类型的范文，针对题目类型，选用合适的 Structure。
3. Planning, and isolated paragraph practice
Take several different questions, and practise planning ideas. Then
spend some time focusing only on introductions e.g. write an
introduction for five different questions. Then do the same with
conclusions. Then try writing different types of main paragraph e.g.
an 'advantages' paragraph, an 'opinion' paragraph, a 'problem'
paragraph etc.
选一些题目，练习 planning ideas.比如可以写五篇不同题目的
introduction，或者写不同类型题目的主体段落。
4. Topic ideas
When you are confident that you know how to write an essay, it's time
to start working through as many common IELTS writing topics as
possible. Even if you don't write a full essay for each topic, you
should at least plan some ideas and opinions.
当你足够自信到知道如何写文章的时候，你就可以尽可能多地写各种不同题材
的常见写作题目。参考见链接
5. Mistakes, corrections and improvements
Try to find someone who can check your writing, highlight and explain
your mistakes, and show you how to improve your essays.
找个能帮你检查作文的小伙伴，能指出错误并告诉你如何改善。
以上就是 Simon 对于 study order 的建议，接下大家按照 Simon 的指示，写一
下今天的作文，写好之后可对照范文。

满分范文：
Many young people work on a volunteer basis, and this can only be
beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I
do not agree that we should therefore force all teenagers to do
unpaid work.
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their
studies, without being given the added responsibility of working in
their spare time. School is just as demanding as a full-time job, and
teachers expect their students to do homework and exam revision on
top of attending lessons every day. When young people do have some
free time, we should encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or
to spend it doing sports and other leisure activities. They have many
years of work ahead of them when they finish their studies.
At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain
from obliging young people to do unpaid work. In fact, I would
argue that it goes against the values of a free and fair society to
force a group of people to do something against their will. Doing
this can only lead to resentment amongst young people, who would
feel that they were being used, and parents, who would not want to be
told how to raise their children. Currently, nobody is forced to
volunteer, and this is surely the best system.
In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work for free and help others,
but in my opinion we should not make this compulsory.
(250 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
on a volunteer basis:on a … basis“以…为基础”，是一个非常常见且好
用的词组，如 charge on an annual basis 以年基础收费，take care of your
skin on a regular basis 定期护理面部
revision:动词是 revise,也常见于阅读，修改，修定
obliging:形容词，乐于助人的;其动词是 oblige，意为强迫
resentment:怨恨，可替换 hate
compulsory:强制的，Compulsory education 义务教育
今天先到这儿，需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思小作文详解 8：传统音乐与国际音乐

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天要分析一篇大作文，题目：
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we
need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than
the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
大家平时做练习的时候，对于艺术类的话题练习比较少，所以很多学生考试遇
到这类题目的时候会无从下笔。Simon 建议大家平时要练习尽可能多的不同类
型的写作素材，以下是他给的 Topic List,大家在看到这些话题的时候想想可
写的内容：
1. Advertising
2. Animal Rights: testing on animals, vegetarianism, zoos
3. Cities: urbanisation, problems of city life
4. Crime: police, punishments/prisons, rehabilitation, capital
punishment
5. Education: studying abroad, technology in education, education in
developing countries, higher education, home-schooling, bad
behaviour, corporal punishment, single sex education, streaming
(grouping children according to ability)
6. Environment: global warming, impact of humans on the environment,
solutions to environment problems, waste/rubbish, litter, recycling,
nuclear power
7. Family: family size, working parents, negative effects on
children, divorce, care for old people
8. Gender: gender and education, gender and work, women’s and men’s
role in the family
9. Genetic Engineering: positives, negatives, genetically modified
foods
10. Global Issues: problems in developing countries, how to help
developing countries, immigration, multi-cultural societies,
globalisation
11. Government and Society: what governments can do, public services,
censorship, video cameras in public places
12. Guns and Weapons: gun ownership and possession, police and guns,
nuclear weapons, armed forces
13. Health: diet, exercise, state health systems, private healthcare,
alternative medicine, stress
14. Housing and Architecture: state housing, old buildings,
modern/green buildings
15. International Language: English as an international language
16. Money: money and society, consumerism
17. Personal Development: happiness, success, nature or nurture
18. Sport and Leisure: professional/competitive sport, sport
salaries, sport and politics
19. Tourism: positives, negative effects on environment, future of
tourism
20. Traditions and Modern Life: losing traditional skills,
traditional customs
21. Transport: traffic problems and solutions, public transport, road
safety
22. Television, Internet and Mobile Phones: positives and negatives,
Internet compared to newspapers and books
23. Water: importance of clean water, water supply, water should be
free, bottled water
24. Work: same job for life, self-employment, unemployment, work/life
balance, technology and work, child labour
Simon 建议大家打上面的 Topic List 打印出来，以供平时练习。
满分范文：
It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around
the world. Music is a vital part of all human cultures for a range of
reasons, and I would argue that traditional music is more important
than modern, international music.
Music is something that accompanies all of us throughout our lives.
As children, we are taught songs by our parents and teachers as a
means of learning language, or simply as a form of enjoyment.
Children delight insinging with others, and it would appear that the
act of singing in a group creates a connection between participants,
regardless of their age. Later in life, people’s musical preferences
develop, and we come to see our favourite songs as part of our life
stories. Music both expresses and arouses emotions in a way that
words alone cannot. In short, it is difficult to imagine life without
it.
In my opinion, traditional music should be valued over the
international music that has become so popular. International pop
music is often catchy and fun, but it is essentially a commercial
product that is marketed and sold by business people. Traditional
music, by contrast, expresses the culture, customs and history of a
country. Traditional styles, such as ...(example)..., connect us to
the past and form part of our cultural identity. It would be a real
pity if pop music became so predominant that these national styles
disappeared.
In conclusion, music is a necessary part of human existence, and I
believe that traditional music should be given more importance than
international music.
(261 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
delight in: delight in doing sth 非常喜欢做某事
enjoyment: 愉快，享受
essentially: 基本上，常和 basically/fundamentally 替换
marketed: 这里 market 做动词，意为“卖”
catchy: 可以指音乐悦耳易记
cultural identity: 文化认同
predominant: 突出的，显著的
今天先到这里，了解更多关于雅思写作信息点击这里，下期见!

考官华丽雅思小作文详解 9：私立教育与公立教育

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天要讲一篇 Family Topic 大作文。题目如下：
Families who send their children to private schools should not be
required to pay taxes that support the state education system.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
对于这种问你同意与否的作文，Simon 做出如下指示：
If the question asks whether you agree or disagree, you need to make
your opinion very clear. You can either have a strong opinion or a
balanced opinion.
今天我们先来说一下如何写一篇 Strong Opinion 的作文。Simon 说，When you
have a strong opinion, you don't need to mention the opposite view.
是的，你没有看错，Simon 说你若表达 Strong Opinion，则无需提反方观点！
现在开始写作文，按照前几期讲过的写作的顺序，第一步，Plan Structure:
1. Introduction: 1 sentence to introduce the topic, 1 sentence to
make your opinion clear (e.g. I completely disagree...)
2. Main paragraph: support your opinion with a reason
3. Main paragraph: support your opinion with another reason
4. Conclusion: repeat/summarise your opinion
第二步: brainstorm then organise
大家一起来头脑风暴 the ideas for a “completely disagree” answer. 以
下是 Simon 想到的 Ideas:
� difficult to calculate the tax reduction
� more government staff would be required for this process
� we all pay for public services that we may not need e.g. police
� poorer people would pay more tax than wealthy people
� state schools benefit the whole of society
� high quality state education leads to equal opportunities for all
� a well-educated workforce is the key to a prosperous nation
� companies need educated staff
� we should all be happy to contribute to public services
头脑风暴之后，我们要将它们组织归纳成两个段落，从上面这些 Ideas 来看，
似乎可以把它们分成两大主题：
1. Reasons why we think the idea would not work, or would be unfair.
2. Reasons why everyone should pay taxes that support state
education.
在给出完整范文之前，再跟大家讲解一下 Simon 是如何建议大家规划整个大作
文的写作时间的：
You have 40 minutes for writing task 2, and I suggest that you:
� Spend the first 10 minutes planning your essay structure and
brainstorming ideas for the two main body paragraphs.
� Spend 5 minutes writing your 2-sentence introduction.
� Spend 20 minutes on the main body (10 minutes for each paragraph).
� Spend the last 5 minutes writing your conclusion and checking
everything.
希望同学们在写今天的文章的时候都按照 Simon 的建议，平时练习的时候也养
成定时写作文的好习惯，考场上也一定能发挥地游刃有余。

完整范文：
Some people believe that parents of children who attend private
schools should not need to contribute to state schools through taxes.
Personally, I completely disagree with this view.
For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reduce taxes for
families who pay for private education. Firstly, it would be
difficult to calculate the correct amount of tax reduction for
these families, and staff would be required to manage this complex
process. Secondly, we all pay a certain amount of tax for public
services that we may not use. For example, most people are fortunate
enough not to have to call the police or fire brigade at any time
in their lives, but they would not expect a tax reduction for this.
Finally, if wealthy families were given a tax discount for sending
their children to private schools, we might have a situation where
poorer people pay higher taxes than the rich.
In my opinion, we should all be happy to pay our share of the money
that supports public schools. It is beneficial for all members of
society to have a high quality education system with equal
opportunities for all young people. This will result in a well-
educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous
nation. Parents of children in private schools may also see the
advantages of this in their own lives. For example, a company owner
will need well qualified and competent staff, and a well-
fundededucation system can provide such employees.
In conclusion, I do not believe that any
financial concessions should be made for people who choose private
education.
(269 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
tax reduction: 削减税收
fire brigade: 消防局
well-educated: 受良好教育的
concession: 妥协
well-funded: 资金充裕的
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simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解 10：电脑游戏

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天要分析一篇大作文。同学们在写大作文的过程中一定会有一些疑问，我在
整理 Simon 和学生问答的时候发现了两个非常常见有用的问题，所以在这里跟
大家讲一下，相信对大家有所帮助。
Firstly, Secondly, Finally 这样的单词用多了好吗?
Simon 是这样回答的，It's best not to use "Firstly, Secondly, Finally"
twice in one essay. If we wanted to write a second main paragraph
with three ideas, what could we used instead of "Firstly, Secondly,
Finally" to organise them?
也就是说，这组词最好不要用两次。那么有什么能替代它们呢?然后 Simon 写了
一个 Example，让大家找一下他用了哪些词语替换的这组顺序词：
Three main factors are affecting health in modern societies. One
problem is the lack of awareness among many people of the negative
consequences of an unhealthy diet. This is made worse by the
prevalence of fast food and processed food, which are full of fat,
salt and sugar. Another key factor is the changing trend in
lifestyles. For example, children’s hobbies now involve much less
outdoor activity, and adults are less active as jobs have shifted
towards sedentary office work instead of manual labour. In addition
to this, time-saving technologies, such as cars, elevators,
dishwashers and washing machines, have made people lazier.
Simon 写得这段完全没有用到 Firstly，Secondly，Finally，但是整个叙事逻
辑有序，原因就是他第一句就表明有 three main factors。介绍这三个因素的
时候依次用 one problem is…another key fator is…in addition to
this…来表达，连贯清晰，大家可以充分借鉴，避免过多重复。
学生问，I am confused about the question "Do the advantages outweigh
the disadvantages?". Is this an opinion question or discussion
opinion question?
之前我们有讲过 Simon 把文章分成四大类，不同类型的作文其段落内容是不同
的，所以有学生问了，像这种问法的作文是属于哪个类型的。以下是 Simon 的
回答：
Strictly speaking, "Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?" is
asking for your opinion (do you think there are more advantages or
disadvantages?). Technically, you could give a one-sided "opinion"
answer e.g. you could argue that there are many advantages and almost
no disadvantages.
However, I think the examiner would expect and prefer to see a
balanced discussion of both sides as well as your opinion. Therefore,
I think it's best (and easiest) to write a discussion opinion essay.
总结一下，这是 Discussion Opinion 类型的，那接下来我们就来练一篇同种问
法的大作文，题目如下：
Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful
educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are
having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your
opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?
完整范文：
Many people, and children in particular, enjoy playing computer
games. While I accept that these games can sometimes have a positive
effect on the user, I believe that they are more likely to have a
harmful impact.
On the one hand, video games can be both entertaining and
educational. Users, or gamers, are transported into virtual worlds
which are often more exciting and engaging than real-life pastimes.
From an educational perspective, these games encourage imagination
and creativity, as well as concentration, logical thinking and
problem solving, all of which are useful skills outside the gaming
context. Furthermore, it has been shown that computer simulation
games can improve users’ motor skills and help to prepare them for
real-world tasks, such as flying a plane.
However, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the
drawbacks. Gaming can be highly addictive because users are
constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep
them playing. Many children now spend hours each day trying to
progress through the levels of a game or to get a higher score than
their friends. This type of addiction can have effects ranging from
lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework is sacrificed for
a few more hours on the computer or console. The rise in obesity in
recent years has also been linked in part to the sedentary lifestyle
and lack of exercise that often accompany gaming addiction.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of video
games are more significant than the possible benefits.
(258 words, band 9)
virtual worlds: 虚拟世界
perspective: 观点，视角
logical thinking: 逻辑思维
ranging from…to: 重点词组，表示范围
console: 操纵台;安慰
obesity: 肥胖
今天先到这儿，下期见!

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 11：平等与个人成就

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天带来一篇巨难的大作文，大家先看题目感受下：
In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship
between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that
individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe
that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if
individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual
merits.
What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal
success?
从题目来看，篇幅长于普通大作文，内容上信息量大，关键词多，更难于理解。
Simon 说，这是一个学生发给他的问题，他也表示很难。还帮大家解释了题目
中这个单词的释意: 'egalitarian' refers to the principle that people
are equal, and deserve equal rights and opportunities. 可理解为平等主
义。所以这属于关于平等话题的作文。对于这种超难的问题，Simon 给了大家
三个建议：
1. Have a strong opinion (e.g. I completely agree that people can
achieve more in egalitarian societies.) You can ignore the other
view.(你可以采取强硬的立场，如完全支持其中一方，然后可以忽略过反方观
点)
2. Focus on the last line of the question (What is your view of...?).
This line sums up the whole question very clearly. Just answer this
question.(重点关注问题的最后一句，只要将问句回答出来就好了)
3. Use examples as the basis of your argument e.g. free university
education ensures equality of opportunity, and therefore allows
individuals to achieve more.(用实例作为论据，如免费高等教育保证了机会
的平等，因为使得个人取得更大成就)
大家自己试着写一下这篇文章，再和 Simon 的范文做对比。Simon 提醒大家，他
不确定这是否是一篇雅思作文，可能是这位同学弄错了，但是，他的范文还是
会对大家有帮助。

完整范文：
In my opinion, an egalitarian society is one in which everyone has
the same rights and the same opportunities. I completely agree that
people can achieve more in this kind of society.
Education is an important factor with regard to personal success in
life. I believe that all children should have access to free
schooling, and higher education should be either free or affordable
for all those who chose to pursue a university degree. In a society
without free schooling or affordable higher education, only
children and young adults from wealthier families would have access
to the best learning opportunities, and they would therefore be
better prepared for the job market. This kind of inequality would
ensure the success of some but harm the prospects of others.
I would argue that equal rights and opportunities are not in conflict
with people’s freedom to succeed or fail. In other words, equality
does not mean that people lose their motivation to succeed, or that
they are not allowed to fail. On the contrary, I believe that most
people would feel more motivated to work hard and reach their
potential if they thought that they lived in a fair society. Those
who did not make the same effort would know that they had wasted
their opportunity. Inequality, on the other hand, would be more
likely to demotivate people because they would know that
the odds of success were stacked in favour of those
from privileged backgrounds.
In conclusion, it seems to me that there is a positive relationship
between equality and personal success.
(260 words)
词汇总结：
schooling: 学校教育，与之对应的是 Parenting,家长教育
prospects: 前途
demotivate: 使失去动力。
odds: 机率，odd 奇怪的;奇数
privileged: 特权的
今天先到这儿，下期见！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 12：寿命延长

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天我们要来看一篇大作文。在这之前呢，Simon 老师想展示大家看的是，当
他看到雅思大作文题目的时候大脑是如何运转的。
以下是他的思考步骤：
1. I read the question very carefully, maybe three times. I ask
myself "What's the topic? What is the question asking me to write
about?"(我会非常仔细地读问题，读上三遍，并自问“topic 是什么，这个问
题让我写什么内容？”)
2. I underline the key things that must be included in the essay. I
always answer every part of the question.(我会画出重点部分，不会忽视
任何一部分的问题)
3. Now I think about my 4 paragraph structure. I can write any type
of essay in 4 paragraphs; I just need to decide what to put in each
paragraph.(现在我思考我的 4 段式结构——此结构适用于任何类型的大作文，
我只需考虑每段放哪些内容即可)
4. If I need to give my opinion, I think "What is the easiest opinion
to explain? What good vocabulary could I use?"(如果我需要给出自己的意
见，我会想“什么样的意见是最好解释的?我能用哪些高级词汇？”)
5. Then I write down some vocabulary ideas that are related to the
topic.(然后我写下一些和 topic 相关的词汇)
6. I try to write 2 sentences for the introduction: I introduce the
topic, then give a simple answer (including my opinion if the
question asks for it).(我试着为 Introduction 段写两句话，引进主题，给
出答案，如需要会给出自己的意见)
7. I write short 'topic sentences' to start each paragraph, then
develop my ideas by explaining and supporting with examples.(我写主题
句引出每个段落，然后通过解释和举例来延伸观点)
8. I look at the question from time to time in order to check that
I'm answering every part of it.(我不时看一遍问题为了确保回答了每一个
部分)
9. I know that I write about 10 words per line; I can quickly check
the approximate number of words that I've written.(我知道我每句写 10
个单词，我能快速计算出我大概写的字数)
10. If I need more words (to reach 250), I expand one of my examples
in the main body paragraphs. If necessary, I draw an arrow to show
where I want to add the extra words.(如果我需要写到 250 字，我会扩展主
体段中的例子。如有必须，我画个箭头标记我想插入内容的位置)

今天的任务就是请按照此步骤完成这篇大作文并和 Simon 的范文做比较。题目

如下：
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What
problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some
measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing
populations.
完整范文：
It is true that people in industrialised nations can expect to live
longer than ever before. Although there will undoubtedly be some
negative consequences of this trend, societies can take steps
to mitigate these potential problems.
As people live longer and the populations of developed countries grow
older, several related problems can be anticipated. The main issue is
that there will obviously be more people of retirement age who will
be eligible to receive a pension. The proportion of younger, working
adults will be smaller, and governments will therefore receive less
money in taxes in relation to the size of the population. In other
words, an ageing population will mean a greater tax burden for
working adults. Further pressures will include a rise in the demand
for healthcare, and the fact young adults will increasingly have to
look after their elderly relatives.
There are several actions that governments could take to solve the
problems described above. Firstly, a simple solution would be to
increase the retirement age for working adults, perhaps from 65 to
70. Nowadays, people of this age tend to be healthy enough to
continue a productive working life. A second measure would be for
governments to encourage immigration in order to increase the number
of working adults who pay taxes. Finally, money from national budgets
will need to be taken from other areas and spent on vital healthcare,
accommodation and transport facilities for the rising numbers of
older citizens.
In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems
that are certain to arise as the populations of countries grow older.
(265 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
mitigate: 减轻，常见搭配有 mitigate the risk/effects of…
anticipate: 预见，预料
pension: 养老金
今天先到这儿，下期见！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 13：政府资助艺术家

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天来看一篇大作文，题目如下：
Some people think that governments should give financial support to
creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that
creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss
both views and give your own opinion.
在写作之前，先解答同学的疑问。有学生问 Simon 怎样能快速写出一篇大作文
呢？来看看 Simon 的建议：
A student asked me for some tips about how to write task 2 essays
faster. Here's my advice:
1. The first step is to write better, not faster. If you can't get
the score you need when it takes you 2 hours to write an essay, you
won't be able to write a good essay in 40 minutes.(写作文首先要好，而
不是快。如果给你两个小时也写不出高分作文的话，那你也不可能在 40 分钟内
写出来)
2. One of my students was worried that it took her 4 hours to write a
band 7 essay for homework. In my opinion, spending 4 hours to write
an essay is a good idea. This kind of hard work leads to great
results! The important thing is to be able to write your first band 7
essay. At first it might take you 4 hours, but you will get faster
with practice.(一个学生很担心因为她花 4 个小时才能写出一个 7 分作文。在
Simon 看来，花 4 个小时写作文是个好主意，而且会有很好的效果。要想写得快，
首先你要能写出 7 分作文。尽管一开始耗时较长，但会越练越快。)
3. The next step is to break the 40 minutes into smaller parts. For
example, you could practise writing introductions in only 5 minutes.
Don't work on full essays yet(下一步就是把 40 分钟分成小部分。先不急于
写满分作文，比如你可以练习用 5 分钟来写 introduction 等等，具体时间规划
参考 Simon 大作文 9 的讲解)
4. Separate the 'thinking' from the 'writing'. I do all my thinking
(planning or brainstorming) in the first 10 minutes. When I'm happy
with my essay plan, I start writing. I try to stick to my plan so
that I can focus on writing rather than more thinking.(将“思考”从
“写作”中分离出来。我先用十分钟思考内容要怎么写，当我满意了我再动笔。
这样我写得时候更专注。)
5. Finally, remember that improvements happen gradually. You have to
be prepared to do the hard work: practising lots of essays and parts
of essays, preparing ideas and opinions for topics, building your
vocabulary repertoire, and learning from mistakes. Do the work and
you'll get better and faster!(最后，记住进步是逐渐发生的。你必须做些
辛苦的工作：练习大量的作文和作文的一部分，构建中心思想和意见，建立自
己的词汇库，吸取教训，这样你一定会越写越好、越写越快的！)
接下来，大家就按照 Simon 的指示来写今天的作文吧!写好和范文对照。

完整范文：
People have different views about the funding of creative artists.
While some people disagree with the idea of government support for
artists, I believe that money for art projects should come from both
governments and other sources.
Some art projects definitely require help from the state. In the UK,
there are many works of art in public spaces, such as streets or
squares in city centres. In Liverpool, for example, there are several
new statues and sculptures in the docks area of the city, which has
been redeveloped recently. These artworks represent
culture, heritage and history. They serve to educate people about
the city, and act as landmarks or talking points for visitors and
tourists. Governments and local councils should pay creative artists
to produce this kind of art, because without their funding our cities
would be much less interesting and attractive.
On the other hand, I can understand the arguments against government
funding for art. The main reason for this view is that governments
have more important concerns. For example, state budgets need to be
spent on education, healthcare, infrastructure and security, among
other areas. These public services are vital for a country to
function properly, whereas the work of creative artists, even in
public places, is a luxury. Another reason for this opinion is that
artists do a job like any other professional, and they should
therefore earn their own money by selling their work.
In conclusion, there are good reasons why artists should rely on
alternative sources of financial support, but in my opinion
government help is sometimes necessary.
词汇总结：
heritage: 遗产
landmarks: 地标;标志性事件，里程碑
infrastructure: 设施
luxury: 奢侈品;奢华的享受
今天先到这儿，下期见！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 14：拯救濒危语言

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！

今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：
Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken
by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments
should spend public money on saving these languages, while others
believe that would be a waste of money.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
在写作之前，先跟大家讲一下首尾段的写作技巧，以下是 Simon 的总结和范例：
Here is a review of my advice for task 2 introductions:(introdution
段落写法总结)
· Make the introduction short and do it quickly. The main body
paragraphs are more important.(首段要简短，快速完成，主体段才是最重要
的)
· Two sentences are enough: 1) introduce the topic. 2) give a basic
answer to the question.(两句话足够了：一句引入主题，一句对问题给出基
本作答)
Example question:
All high school students should be encouraged to take part in
community service programmes.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
My introduction:
Some people believe that high school students would benefit from
doing unpaid work in their local communities. I completely agree that
community service programmes for teenagers are a good idea.
总结：虽然只有两句话，Simon 用了大量的同义替换，避免重复，短小精悍，
值得借鉴。
Several people have asked me about conclusions for IELTS Writing Task
2. The main body paragraphs are much more important, so don't worry
too much about the conclusion; make it short, simple and fast.(尾段同
样不如主体段重要，也要做到简短，快速完成)
Here are some example conclusion phrases for different types of
question(以下是四种不同类型大作文的尾段写法):
1. Opinion
For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that... (+ repeat your
opinion).
2. Discussion (+ Opinion)
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against...
(topic), but I believe that... (if the question asks for your
opinion).
3. Advantages and Disadvantages
In conclusion, I would argue that the benefits of... (topic) outweigh
the drawbacks.
4. Problem and Solution
In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for...
(topic), and steps need to be taken to tackle this problem.
总结：不同类型的大作文要用不同句型的结尾，这样才能确保总结到位。
接下来大家按照 Simon 的指示写一下今天的作文，写好对照范文。
完整范文：
It is true that some minority languages may disappear in the near
future. Although it can be argued that governments could save money
by allowing this to happen, I believe that these languages should be
protected and preserved.
There are several reasons why saving minority languages could be seen
as a waste of money. Firstly, if a language is only spoken by a small
number of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to
make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay
for facilities, teachers and marketing. This money might be better
spent on other public services. Secondly, it would be much cheaper
and more efficient for countries to have just one language.
Governments could cut all kinds of costs related to communicating
with each minority group.
Despite the above arguments, I believe that governments should try to
preserve languages that are less widely spoken. A language is much
more than simply a means of communication; it has a vital connection
with the cultural identity of the people who speak it. If a language
disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will
lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more
interesting. By spending money to protect minority languages,
governments can also preserve traditions, customs and behaviours that
are part of a country’s history.
In conclusion, it may save money in the short term if we allow
minority languages to disappear, but in the long term this would have
an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.
(258 words)
词汇总结：
preserve: 保存，保护
facility: 设施
extremely: 极其地
in the long term: 长期来看
今天先到这儿，下期见！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 15：博物馆用途

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天我们来看一篇大作文，题目如下：
Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to
entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is
to educate.
Discuss both views and give you own opinion.
首先，大家都知道，按照写作评分标准，要求大家在写作的时候尽量做到词汇
多变。接下来就来训练一下，先把题目中三个关键词相关的词语都写出来：
Museums:
· exhibition, exhibit (verb, like 'show'), an exhibit (noun,
'item'), artifact, object, collection, history, science, art,
culture, visitors, members of the public, public viewing...
Entertain:
· entertainment, entertaining, enjoy, enjoyment, enjoyable, have
fun, interesting, fascinating, spectacular, impressive, leisure time,
free time, a day out, tourist attraction...
Educate:
· education, educational, teach, learn, explain, understand, know,
gain/expand/pass on/transmit knowledge, skills, experience, open your
mind, broaden your horizons...
Simon 说，Making lists of related words is a good way to generate
ideas. You might not have time to do this in the exam, but it's a
useful study technique.列出相关词是一个培养思想的好办法，你可能在考试
中没有时间做这件事，但是是一个有用的学习技巧。接下来大家写一下今天的
作文，然后和范文对照。

完整范文：
People have different views about the role and function of museums.
In my opinion, museums can and should be both entertaining and
educational.
On the one hand, it can be argued that the main role of a museum is
to entertain. Museums are tourist attractions, and their aim is to
exhibit a collection of interesting objects that many people will
want to see. The average visitor may become bored if he or she has to
read or listen to too much educational content, so museums often put
more of an emphasis on enjoyment rather than learning. This type of
museum is designed to be visually spectacular, and may have
interactive activities or even games as part of its exhibitions.
On the other hand, some people argue that museums should focus on
education. The aim of any exhibition should be to teach visitors
something that they did not previously know. Usually this means that
the history behind the museum’s exhibits needs to be explained, and
this can be done in various ways. Some museums employ professional
guides to talk to their visitors, while other museums offer headsets
so that visitors can listen to detailed commentary about the
exhibition. In this way, museums can play an important role in
teaching people about history, culture, science and many other
aspects of life.
In conclusion, it seems to me that a good museum should be able to
offer an interesting, enjoyable and educational experience so that
people can have fun and learn something at the same time.
(253 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
visually:视觉上地
spectacular: 壮观地，引人入胜地
interactive: 互动式的
previously: 之前地
headsets: 头戴式耳机
detailed: 详细的
commentary: 评论
今天先到这儿，下期见！

【9 分作文盛宴】simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解
17：改善城市居住环境

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界
的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的
建议，甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英
国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相
比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正
可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，
相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：
More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better
life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the
difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life
better for everyone?
这是一篇 Problem and solution 类型的大作文。首先在写作文之前，Simon 让
大家先思考 4 个问题：
· Can you see why we call this a "problem and solution" question?
· Which words are used instead of "problem" and "solution"?
· How can we write a 2-sentence introduction for this question?
· What ideas do you have for the main paragraphs?
第一， 你知道为什么我们将这种作文称作"problem and solution"类型吗?
第二， 哪些单词可以用来替换 "problem" and "solution"?
第三， 对于这种题目，如何写出一个两句话的开头段落呢?
第四， 对于主体段的内容，你有什么想法?
每次在写作文之前呢，大家都要养成勤于思考的习惯，看到一个作文题目，就
要主动地去联想这个话题下的一些可写的内容，头脑风暴练习久了自然就不愁
作文没话可写了。
接下来，Simon 给出这篇作文的大致写作框架和内容：
Essay structure and ideas:
1. Introduction: introduce the topic, then give a general answer
2. Difficulties: cost of living, unemployment, stress, traffic
congestion, pollution
3. Solutions: social housing, reduce migration by improving small
towns and the rural economy, improve public transport, fewer cars
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise
文章框架和内容：
第一段，引入主题，然后给出回答。
第二段，可以写入文章的在城市居住的困难有居住成本，失业，压力，交通阻
塞，污染等
第三段，解决方案有住廉租房，通过提高小城镇和边远地区经济来减少人中迁
徙，改善公共交通，减少车辆等
结尾段，重复并总结
从 Simon 给的文章段落结构可以看出，他还是一贯地用了四段式的写法，每段
的内容也都分工明确，逻辑清晰，同学们可以多加学习。然后 Simon 还给出了
他的开头段：
Introduction:
Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also
some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion,
governments could do much more to improve city life for the average
inhabitant.
Simon 还是保持了开头段只用两句话的写作方法，虽然只有两句话，但是足够
起到了引入主题和给出答案的作用。这种言简意赅的写作方法是备受雅思写作
考官喜欢的一种开头段写法，各位考生今后练习的时候应该多多尝试。
话不多说，接下来送给大家考官满分范文：

Here's my full sample essay for question below.

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better
life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the
difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life
better for everyone?
Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also
some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion,
governments could do much more to improve city life for the average
inhabitant.
The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is
that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a
small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher
prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that
urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime
and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the
air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic,
and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded.
As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.
However, there are various steps that governments could take to
tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the
building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of
living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from
city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which
would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In
London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for
drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would
be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry
and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major
cities.
In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of
measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.
(273 words, band 9)
以上就是今天考官范文的分析讲解，希望对大家有所帮助!祝各位都能考出理想
的写作分数!

simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解 16:环境保护

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越
来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少
Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意
赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师
深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总
结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the

environment. What can governments do to address these problems?
What can individual people do?
在写作文之前，先讲一个 Simon 的非常有用的建议。 Simon 说，some students were
surprised that you can get a band 9 using "Firstly, Secondly, Finally".Is the
phrase "First and foremost" better than "Firstly"?有一些学生见他的文章使
用"Firstly, Secondly, Finally"这样的词语，很吃惊，所以就问词组"First and
foremost"是否比"Firstly"要好？
The answer is NO.回答是 No。理由是：
Using simple organising language like "Firstly, Secondly" makes you focus on
the REAL CONTENT of what you are writing - topic vocabulary, collocations,
examples. This is what the examiner wants to see.（使用简单的词汇可以让你
更加专注在真正的内容上，这才是考官想看到的）
Spend your time preparing ideas, opinions and examples for IELTS topics, not
learning alternative ways to write "Firstly".（要把时间花在准备思想，意见和举
例上，而不是花心思去找 firstly 的替代词）
总之呢，内容核心是分数高低的关键。接下来大家写一下今天的作文，写好和
范文对照。
完整范文：
Humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, but we can
also take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet. This
essay will discuss environmental problems and the measures that
governments and individuals can take to address these problems.
Two of the biggest threats to the environment are air pollution and waste. Gas
emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global
warming, which may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. As
the human population increases, we are also producing ever greater
quantities of waste, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and
oceans.
Governments could certainly make more effort to reduce air pollution. They
could introduce laws to limit emissions from factories or to force companies to
use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power. They could also
impose ‘green taxes’ on drivers and airline companies. In this way, people
would be encouraged to use public transport and to take fewer flights abroad,
therefore reducing emissions.
Individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the
environment. They can take public transport rather than driving, choose
products with less packaging, and recycle as much as possible. Most
supermarkets now provide reusable bags for shoppers as well as ‘banks’ for
recycling glass, plastic and paper in their car parks. By reusing and recycling,
we can help to reduce waste.
In conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play their part
in looking after the environment.
Note:
This essay is exactly 250 words long. I've tried to make it as simple as
possible, but it's still good enough to get a band 9.
词汇总结：

exhaust fumes: 汽车尾气

vehicles: 车辆，交通工具

devastating: 破坏性的

quantity: 数量

contaminate: 污染

emission: 排放物