Professional Documents
Culture Documents
Mr.Smith
ELA
16 October 2023
School violence has been a persistent issue in America, and in recent years, the statistics
of gun violence rates have increased a disturbing amount for a handful of reasons such as gun
laws, mental health and school security (Gupta, 2023). Acts of violence, specifically in school
settings, are often a result of mirrored behavior, such as bullying or harassment (Ivanova, 2023).
This poses a concern for the safety and wellbeing of not only the students, but also the teachers.
How are we supposed to learn if we are in constant fear of falling victim to someone else's
outburst? This huge problem may be more simple to resolve than we previously thought. While
we may not understand what prompts a person to commit an act of violence, we can restrict their
ability to act on these impulses; If America's government strengthens its gun laws, we as a
It's hard to believe anyone would intentionally hurt another individual, and unfortunately,
this problem seems to be a common occurrence in schools. Due to the abundance of school
violence in recent years, there has been lots of debate regarding children's safety when in school.
This consistent anxiety regarding our security in the educational setting can cause a huge
decrease in mental health stability, not to mention it can completely jeopardize our learning. In
recent years, it has been discovered that approximately 7% of children aged 3-17 experience
issues with anxiety annually as of 2023 . In contrast with 2008 where the rate of anxiety in
children was only around 5.12% (Goodwin, 2023). The majority blame for this anxiety can be
targeted at the increase of school violence since 2008. This rise in anxiety can also be partly the
cause of the COVID19 virus that has occurred from 2019-present day. A recent article by Chris
Curran titled: School kids are so violent coming out of the pandemic that they’re sending
teachers to the hospital, Curran exclaims that research discovered two out of three teachers
perceived more student misbehavior in 2021 than in 2019 (Curran, 2023). With the threat of
these violent situations coming from those in and out of the classroom, how are we supposed to
We must start by posing the question of: Why are guns being allowed into the hands of
irresponsible individuals in the first place? You wouldn’t trust a 5 year old to drive a car, they
aren’t qualified enough to handle that type of privilege and it would be dangerous. Guns are no
different, individuals who aren’t qualified to use guns safely shouldn’t have them at all. This idea
is posed in the article Why US gun laws get looser after mass shootings written by Ranjani
Chakraborty. Chakraborty reasons the cause of gun laws getting so loose due to the idea of
protection, like a domino effect, when one mass shooting occurs, civilians will buy a gun for
protection which then raises the rates of how many guns are out in the world (Chakraborty,
2022).
We need to move forward with a solution to these violent rates starting with the
most prevalent issue: Gun Violence (Rubin, 2023). By decreasing the amount of guns on the
street, we can reduce the risk of violence caused by a gun. If the laws regarding who is allowed
to own or carry a gun are strengthened we can keep guns out of irresponsible hands. For
example, Until January of this year, individuals in Massachusetts age 15 or older were entitled to
own a gun (Mass Gov., 2023). It's completely irrational to be able to carry a gun before being
able to drive a car. Those who should be given the opportunity to own any type of gun should be
limited to age 21 or older, with a genuine reason to have the firearm and qualifications stating
that those who own firearms will be completely responsible with them and if not they should be
confiscated permanently. This isn't a topic to be taken lightly, when police officers are sworn in,
they take an oath to protect and use their authority for good. The second amendment states that
individuals have the right to bear arms but the Bill Of Rights applies to those who chose to live
freely, meaning those who violate the constitutional laws should not be given the opportunities
presented in any of the amendments (The Constitution, amendment two). To simplify this, those
who are not worthy of respecting the laws established by our Country, should not be able to carry
or own any type of firearm. It is also important that those who need attention regarding their
mental health are able to receive it. If a significant cause of school violence is mental instability,
then we should be helping these students who need it. Possibly in school counseling, or school
therapists should be an option in all schools to ensure that kids feel heard and can have ideas to
cope with their emotions rather than using violent behavior to release them.
must establish some ground to decrease these violence rates. I, as a high school student, but also
as a member of society, feel constantly uneasy at the idea of my education and safety being
compromised. School violence poses a significant threat to students and our community. To
ensure the safety of individuals in the school system, we must move forward immediately with
our efforts to bring school violence to an end once and for all.
Kate,
Good job citing a variety of sources and discussing the anxiety which violence places
claims and body paragraphs do not always seem directly related to your thesis, and as a
result, the essay as a whole feels somewhat inconsistent. Additionally, adding further details
in a paper like this will act to benefit the argument. Synthesis is another aspect that is not
necessarily evidence here. There are some instances, but it can be improved.
Works Cited
Chakraborty, Ranjani. “How mass shootings change US gun laws.” Vox, 28 July 2022,
https://www.vox.com/23283057/gun-laws-loosen-mass-shootings-texas. Accessed 16
October 2023.
https://www.mass.gov/info-details/gun-ownership-in-massachusetts. Accessed 16
October 2023.
Gupta, Sanjana. “School Violence: Types, Causes, Impact, and Prevention.” Verywell Mind, 4
April 2023,
https://www.verywellmind.com/school-violence-types-causes-impact-and-prevention-521
Ivanova, Irina. “School kids are so violent coming out of the pandemic that they're sending
teachers to the hospital, but an expert says to resist 'get tough' approaches.” Fortune, 24
September 2023,
https://fortune.com/2023/09/24/why-high-school-students-violent-dangerous-pandemic-s
October 2023.
“Trends in anxiety among adults in the United States, 2008–2018: Rapid increases among young
https://www.cdc.gov/violenceprevention/pdf/school_violence_fact_sheet-a.pdf. Accessed
16 October 2023.
Rubric
Thesis establishes a
topic and a claim
Thesis Comments:
Includes three or Includes multiple Includes specific,
fewer sources pieces of evidence meaningful, and
(from 8-10 sources) well-chosen evidence
Some evidence that clearly relate to that relates to the
relates to the thesis the thesis thesis
Comments:
Comments:
Comments:
Shows evidence of
proofreading
Comments: