Improve my Writing

Using your word cline, the checklist and your own

knowledge, rewrite the following PEEL paragraph to
make it better:
Remember PEEL paragraphs should:

❏ Use specific terms and facts.

❏ Explain how or why something is occurring.
❏ Use capital letters in the correct spots e.g. for places.
❏ Uses correct geographical language. Tries to avoid language such
as ‘people’
❏ Answer the question in the point and link sentences in a clear way.
❏ Tries to use statistics to support the point.
❏ Use language from the question in your response.

Explain the extent of the issue of marine plastic pollution.

Original Improved
P- In the ocean there is P - The effects of plastic pollution
plastic that gets thrown in being littered into water have been
detrimental to the environment
from people not recycling and marine life.
correctly.
E - When plastic ends up into the
E- Once the plastic is in the oceans, ocean currents create a
ocean it can get moved into significant patch of rubbish to
build up into an immense pile.
other patches of rubbish Therefore, marine animals that live
and all this rubbish will swirl near the rubbish pile will consume
together. the rubbish and ingest the toxic
chemicals, which can be harmful
E- An example of this is to their health.
called the great pacific
garbage patch which is in
the pacific ocean. E- The great pacific garbage patch
is proof that plastic pollution
L- Overall, it is bad that affects the earth, and it’s
there is plastic in the ocean. environment.
L- Hence, plastic pollution created
great harm for the environment
and us.