TAMIU FYWP ENGL 1302 Research Genre 1 Annotated Bibliography

Research Genre 1 Annotated Bibliography Peer Review Workshop

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your answers here.
If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of what.

1. What information does the author present consistently for each source? List all that you see.
The author consistently presents that dancing has many benefits. Dancing can improve cognitive health,
mental health, physical health, and general well-being. Dancing promotes emotional, social, cognitive,
and physical integration. Dancing can be used as a way to relieve stress, and it can help people with
medical conditions.
2. What type of information does the author give for a particular source (for example, does the author give
background for some and not others?)? Why does s/he do this? Indicate to the author where more or less of this
information is needed.
For all of the sources in the draft, I feel that there needs to be more background information. Specifically,
more information about the author and by who or what organization it was published by. The author
should add more background information to make their annotated bibliography sound more accurate
and trustworthy.
3. Where is the author giving a summary and where is s/he giving an analysis? Give specific examples from the
text. Indicate to the author where more or less summary is needed and where more analysis is needed.
The author’s summary is usually the first sentence in their paragraph. The author’s analysis is usually
the second to last sentence in the paragraph. An example of a strong summary is “In the article, it states
that dance can also help with individuals’ sexual concepts not just mental, “Dance was found to improve
mental wellbeing and quality of life, enhance empathy and positive emotions as well as stress regulation
and social competencies, and has positive effects on sexual health” (1). An example of a strong analysis is
“The evidence supports the thesis statement by giving reasons why DMT is beneficial for example “DMT
has been shown to improve a range of mental health and well-being measures including mood, vitality,
self-efficacy/coping, body image and anxiety.” (1.2).” More summary is needed in the source by Ou, Kai-
Ling, et al. The sources by Aliberti, Koch, Niranjan, Ou, and Pfeiffer all need a bit more analysis and
explanation.
4. Where is the author subjective versus objective? Give specific examples from the text. How can the author
maintain objectivity and remove themselves from the research.
The author is objective from the beginning of the paragraph to the analysis part. After the analysis, the
author is subjective when describing how the sources fit into their research and how they will use it in
their research. An example of an objective sentence is the following: “The method they used is doing a
systematic search of electronic databases using PubMed, Science Direct, World of Science and
Clinicaltrials.gov to identify the studies and examine the effects of DMT in psychiatric population” (2).
An example of a subjective sentence is the following: “This fits into my research because it also promotes
social benefits from dancing which is something not everyone would think dancing brings” (2). The
author can maintain their objectivity by not including their opinions or thoughts in the evidence and
analysis parts. They can remove themselves from the research by using words that pertain to the third
person. Not using words like I or my.
5. Briefly describe the tone and style of the writing. Is this tone and style appropriate for the audience of
scholars?
The tone of the writing is real professional and informative. The author chose to use complex terminology
to properly address and inform the appropriate audience. Yes, the tone and style is appropriate for the
audience of scholars.
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6. How do you think the author determined what parts of the text to include in the annotation? What makes you
think this? Do the parts that are included in the annotation help you understand the source and how it will be
used in the essay?
I think that the author chose to include what they thought was the most important and informative
information. What makes me think this is that the author got straight to the point and was very
informative and detailed. Yes, the parts that are included help me better understand the source and how
the author will use it in their essay.
7. How does the author use examples? Are they important? Why/Why not? Where could the author use more or
fewer examples?
The author uses examples by further explaining how the articles are important to her research and the
contribution the evidence will provide. For example, “Dance has been known to be a form of stress
reliever, but for others, it can turn from a stress reliever to a form of physical therapy” (4). After this
statement, the author provides a section explaining how the article will support her research. Yes,
examples are important. They are important because they can help “paint a better picture” and could
clarify things up if not made clear already. The author could use more examples. I am unsure if the
author needs to use more or fewer examples. The author is able to effectively communicate the purpose of
each article and its contributions to her research in a sentence or two.
8. What three things does the author deserve praise for the annotations?
The author deserves praise for having the correct format and layout on their paper. The author deserves
praise for having all 10 citations ready. The author deserves praise for having the proper work cited
format and having them in alphabetical order.
9. What three things should the author fix before submitting the annotated bibliography?
There are some misspellings and some small grammar mistakes scattered throughout the paper. For
example in the Zhang, Nannan, et al. source states, “The author in thus article hints that dance and
funny running can be a big impact on individuals, “This study suggests that fitness dance and funny
running are healthy behaviors, which can help Chinese female Ph.D. candidates to dissociate from
anxiety and stress situations and develop a healthy lifestyle” (9).” The author should include some
information about the author and/or the organization who published that source. Lastly, I would
recommend taking a deeper analysis of the sources and then explaining that analysis.